Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][R1/2][Fusion] Battletech: The Saotome Gambit Part 17
From: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Date: 8/5/2000, 9:43 PM
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Major snippage throughout...

       The soft hum of air stirred by ventilation fans set
  above and behind
  the mechwarrior's ejector seat mingled with the tinny
  whine of an array of
  gas-plasma displays, as did the muted roar of several
  hundred kilograms of
  liquid nitrogen rushing through the flashing chambers of
  the battlemech's
  heat sinks. To this chorus of sound was added panting
  breaths of nervous
  tension, echoing in steady, measured counterpoint to the
  myriad noises of
  the machines.

Great details. I'm there.



       A winking of light in the darkness caught her eye.
  It was a signal
  lamp, flashing from the cockpit of one of the 1st Nerima
  Guards battlemechs.
  The regiment was observing radio silence for the sneak
  attack on the freshly
  constructed Combine base, and so all pre-strike messages
  were sent via lamp.
  The method was awkward and slow, but it was secure
  against electronic forms
  of eavesdropping.

That's really one of the interesting little end-results of too much
tech. Sometimes, the old-fashioned ways shine forth, in this case
literally.




             J. Austin Wilde and Fission Park Press proudly present:

                       BATTLETECH: THE SAOTOME GAMBIT
                               PART SEVENTEEN

/cue Mechwarrior soundtrack...





       Time and tiny micro-meteoroid impacts had taken
  their toll on the
  hulls, however, and the ability to manufacture the
  special hull coating
  had been lost with the First Succession War. The
  corvettes had patchwork
  hulls now, and there were parts of the ship that were
  vulnerable to radar
  detection. The crews had to minimize the enemy's exposure
  to these parts
  of the ship, and their tactics reflected this weakness.

It's interesting to note at this point that the manufacturing
capabilites of the Successor States must be even lower than ours in
some respects. It probably *isn't* beyond our current capability to
repair those stealth coverings. It provides for an interesting mix
of high tech and little knowledge, other than how to switch out
parts. Almost a dark age, of sorts.




       "You've got to admit though, that this is the
  mission we've trained
  for, and hoped for, all our lives," the X.O. pointed out.
  "Those metalhead
  grunts on Oni are depending on our interdiction of local space."
       "True," Captain Hauptmann agreed, wondering if his
  subordinate and
  friend was aware that one of those 'metalhead grunts' was
  the Lady Kasumi
  Tendo, eldest daughter of the Grand Duke.

Most likely not... ^_^




       He looked to a portrait on the bulkhead of the
  Wardroom. It was of
  a man who had been dead for over a thousand years, the
  famous captain of
  _Tang's_ ancient namesake: Robert "Killer" O'Kane.
  Beneath the portrait
  was a silver-plated cribbage board, worn and pitted with
  tarnish over the
  centuries despite dilligent preservation efforts. Legend
  had it that this
  artifact was the actual cribbage board used by O'Kane
  during an ancient
  and practically forgotten war, a war at sea rather than
  in space, and the
  numerous plaques that adorned the board testified to a
  tradition of passing
  it on from ship to ship throughout its nearly
  eleven-hundred-year history.

Nice. And, as I've read below, true. ^_^




       "Fire Control, I intend to attack contact Echo
  Five-Five with a
  Barracuda. Make launch tubes One and Two ready in all respects."
       "Make launch tubes One and Two ready in all
  respects, Fire Control,
  aye."
       "Range to target Echo Five-Five; two
  hundred-thousand kilometers,"
  Sensory updated. It would be a medium range engagement
  for the formidable
  Barracuda.

Even the missile name retains its submariner heritage. Nice. This
entire passage has the feel of a submarine, and the nature of the
game has changed almost not at all.




       "Conn, Fire Control; launch tubes One and Two ready
  in all respects."
       "Very well, Fire Control," Hauptmann replied. "Firing Point
  Procedures!"
       This was the moment of truth. They would launch a
  Barracuda missile
  at the Combine DropShip. If things went well, the enemy
  would not detect
  the ejection of the weapon from the tube. They wouldn't
  be able to
  retaliate at this range even if they did, but Hauptmann
  wanted to give
  them as little time as possible for evasive maneuvers.
       "Firing solution set," Fire Control announced.
       "Fire One," Hauptmann ordered coldly. This was his
  first Barracuda
  fired in anger. His first Barracuda fired ever.

A defining moment for Hauptmann.




       There would be no abandoning ship for the Flight
  Deck crew, he
  realized. The escape pods were located a deck below, and
  the section of
  the pressure hull that connected them was depressurized.
  They were trapped,
  doomed to die as the compartment slowly bled its air into
  space. He lay
  back in his chair and watched the viewports for the sight
  of an escape
  pod, just *one,* that would tell him some of his crew would live.
       There were none.
       He let out an anguished cry, the only one he would
  permit himself.

Wow. The entire foregoing snipped passage was powerful, ugly, and
extremely effective. Cheers.





       As he floated through the airtight door he noted
  that the triumphant
  expressions on his crews' faces were gone, replaced with
  the silent
  knowledge that next time, it could be them out there left
  to die in the
  cold airless void. He thought back to the days of Killer
  O'Kane, where
  combat had been on the similar terms of
  attack-without-warning and
  no-quarter-given, and wondered if the man had felt just
  as sick with
  himself after a victory as he did.

War is ugly. Nice, nice, nice stretch of writing.




       She knew him peripherally. The _Palomino_ was too
  small of a ship
  for her not to know the crew by sight. She knew some of
  them by name. He
  was a Sensor Operator on the Flight Deck, and doubled as
  one of the Mess
  Cranks during off-watch meals. He was about her age too,
  and kind of cute
  in a boyish way.
       It would serve Ranma right, she decided. I'm not
  going to sit here
  and sulk over him!

Oh, dear, Akane. Two wrongs don't make a right. Very IC.



       "What are you doing after this?" she asked him.
       The young petty officer started, then turned back to her.
       "M-Me?" he asked in a small voice.
       "Yes, you," she said with a smile. "Do you have
  liberty after you
  finish up here, or are you stuck on the ship?"
       The man set his broom aside. "As soon as I'm done
  here, I'm cut loose
  for the night, ma'am," he replied. "But I really wasn't
  planning on going
  anywhere."
       She turned up the heat in her smile.
       "Do you think you could change your plans?" she asked him.
       The young petty officer began to perspire.

Heh.



       "Um... Do you mean go o-out with you, ma'am?"

"No, silly boy. I mean to throw you on the floor and have my way
with you. I've never done *it*, you know."

Oh, god. A virgin, he thought. I am sooo dead.

^_^



       Thaddeus, or Tad, as she had often heard the crew
  call him, was a
  true gentleman. It was a welcome change from watching
  Ranma shovel food
  into his mouth while arguing with his father, to note
  that Tad understood
  a napkin belonged on the lap, not tucked into the collar
  of your shirt, and
  that a lady appreciated it when you showed her to her
  seat. She knew on an
  instinctual level that it more

it *was* more



  than simply hollow
  courtesy for one of the
  nobility on his part, that such etiquette and respect for
  a lady came
  naturally to him.

[snip]


       One of the menu items showed particular appeal to
  her. A large pepper,
  indigenous to Tiber, stuffed with three kinds of melted
  cheese, seasoned
  bread crumbs, fresh cream, and shredded savory herbs. It
  was exactly the
  kind of food that Ranma would despise. She ordered for
  both of them.

Heh, very progressive, our Akane. ^_^



       They also ordered beer, which seemed to flow in this
  place from an
  endless tap. Buxom waitstaff in archaic bodices and
  skirts whirled around
  them with silent efficiency and pleasant smiles, each
  carrying a fistful
  of quart glasses filled with the golden brew.
       Akane wasn't at all a drinker, and she had never
  been terribly
  interested in beer, but when in Rome... She sipped
  tentatively at her
  glass of pilsener,

pilsner,



  noting the bite of the hops and the
  crisp finish of
  the lightly-bodied beer. It wasn't half bad, she decided.
  She could see
  why men liked drinking the stuff on a hot day.

You know, this is a good indicator of how earthy Akane really is. If
Ranma could only "see" it well enough, he'd know she was the right
one for him.



       Tad drank his with gusto.
       "What do you think?" she asked him.
       "It's good," he replied, agreeing with her
  assessment. "I'm not much
  of a lager drinker, but this really hits the spot."
       She took a larger drink from her glass. The beer's
  effervescence
  tingled in her nose and throat, a sensation rather like
  drinking champagne,
  she decided, only without most of the cloying sweetness.
  She was liking
  beer better and better.
       "Have you come here often since we first arrived?"
  Tad asked as she
  put away her first glass in three giant gulps.
       "This is my first time," she replied, now feeling a
  little bloated
  by so much liquid taken at once. Their waitress
  immediately noted the empty
  glass and replaced it with a full one. In spite of
  herself, she took another
  drink.

The trap of all beergartens - keep the glass full and the customer
buying. ^_^



       "Actually, there's a third reason," she added. "You
  aren't that
  stupid, insensitive jerk, Ranma Saotome..."
       "Excuse me for saying this," Tad returned, his
  expression clouded
  with concern. "But

concern, "but



  aren't you engaged to marry Ranma Saotome?"

[snip]


       "Commander Saotome," the Captain addressed him. "We
  have a serious
  problem on our hands."
       "What is it?" he asked blearily. He could not
  imagine any problems
  in that moment, other than the JumpShip's jump core being somehow
  irrepairable,

irreparable,




  or that the Confederation had finally
  fallen to the Combine.

[snip]


       For the first time in his life, Ranma Saotome felt
  completely relaxed
  in the presence of a girl. It amazed him how well he and
  Ucchan had been
  able to pick up where they had left off more than ten
  years ago. True, his
  best friend from childhood wasn't who

whom (I think...)



  he had always
  believed she was, but
  that didn't seem to matter much now.
       "It's getting pretty late," he said to her. "We're
  coming up on
  'bingo' fuel."
       "Yeah, we should probably head for home," she
  agreed. Thoughts of
  continuing their time together in more personal
  surroundings was foremost
  in her thoughts.
       Ranma banked the plane into a turn for the starport.



                             *       *       *



       Akane Tendo staggered down the wide tree-lined
  boulevard near the
  Starport Expressway, alternately crying her eyes out and
  cussing hard
  enough to strip away old paint.

<smirk>



  Though she had stopped
  drinking an hour
  previous to this moment, she was getting more and more
  drunk as her system
  absorbed ingested alcohol into her bloodstream. It seemed
  that her forward
  motion was more an act of sheer stubbornness than any
  sort of coordination
  between her brain and her feet. In fact, she had only a
  peripheral
  awareness of heading back to the DropShip, as if her feet
  were engaged by
  a subconscious autopilot.
       Her thoughts flew from one extreme to the other,
  hating Ranma for
  what he had done to her in one moment, then railing
  against herself for
  treating him so poorly at the castle. She pitied herself
  and then pitied
  Ranma for having such an awful, mixed-up childhood. The
  next moment

moment,



  she
  was raging at the night, shaking a fist into the sky as
  if Ranma and Ukyou
  were right above her.
       Finally, without realizing it at first, she had
  returned to the
  _Palomino._ She did not recall tearing a ten-meter
  section of chain-link
  fence from its posts on the perimeter to get there, nor
  did she recall
  tramping across a kilometer of grassy fields and
  stretches of concrete
  tarmac, oftentimes only just avoiding certain death from
  the arrival or
  departure of a spaceship. All that she was aware of was
  that she had
  returned to the _Palomino._
       As she staggered past the steel-tube staging around
  Tarou's Hunchback,
  the throaty sound of the Boomerang's engine filled her
  ears. She looked
  up, her bloodshot eyes wincing at the intensity of the
  aircraft's flashing
  collision lights as it passed overhead. Ranma had returned.
       She watched the Boomerang circle lazily around the
  DropShip before
  diving sharply at the ground. Her heart nearly seized up
  at the idea of
  him crashing, and then he pulled out of his dive to flare
  out neatly for
  a landing. Only then could she breathe again.

Suggest that you have Akane's emotional responses to Ranma's flying
acrobatics be delayed. For instance, he lands, and then have fear
clutch her heart or whatever emotion you wish.



       Ranma began to say "Aw, it was nothing," but got as
  far as 'it' when
  she reached over and kissed him. Her parted lips pressed
  firmly against his
  as she curled her arms around him to draw her fiance into
  a deeper embrace.
  At first he was too surprised to do or say anything. Then
  he started to
  enjoy it.
       It was only when her tongue began to slide into his
  mouth that he
  panicked. What in the hell was he doing with her?!

Heh.


       Ukyou sensed his negative reaction to the new
  direction she was taking
  with their embrace, and parted with him. He looked like
  an animal caught in
  the headlights of an oncoming car as she drew away.
       "Something wrong, Ranchan?" she asked softly.
       "Uh..." Ranma murmured cogently.
       "You don't get kissed very often, do you, honey?"
  she noted. She knew
  she was correct in this, and that only made her chances
  with him better. If
  he wasn't smooching Akane, then he didn't really love her. Right?
       "Uh... I guess not..."
       She chuckled. "That'll have to change." She popped
  the canopy release
  and lifted the clear polycarbonate to step out of the
  plane. "Come on,
  Ranchan, that okonomiyaki awaits."
       The mention of food snapped him back to reality.
       "Oh yeah," he said brightly. "Cool."

Gods, he's so predictable...




       He closed his eyes and turned his head away for good
  measure before
  his fingers began fumbling with the buttons on her blouse.
       Man, I hope she's wearing a bra...
       "What the hell do you think you're doing, Saotome?"
  an angry voice
  asked him.

Ah, the famous Saotome timing strikes again.



       "Stand down, Saotome," Sayuri continued. "Just get
  the hell out of
  here. Leave. Do us all a favor - especially Akane - and
  go find your little
  local honey. When we finally get off this planet, you
  should just stay here
  with her, okay?"
       Ranma fists clenched tight with barely-checked
  wrath. The two fighter
  pilots could hear the knuckles crack and the tendons in
  his wrists and
  forearms creak with tension.
       "I don't need a couple of dykes

Ouch.


  like you telling me
  how to live my
  life," he said to them, his voice trembling with fury.
  "You don't know me,
  and no matter what you might think, you don't know Akane
  either, so just
  STAY THE HELL OUT OF THIS!"
       He pushed his way past them before he lost his
  temper and did
  something he would really regret.
       Akane does not love me! he thought angrily. He took
  the stairs down
  to the Lower Deck three at a time. Half the time she
  doesn't even seem to
  *like* me!



                                Chapter Four



       Ranma Saotome could feel Ryouga's eyes burning into
  him from across
  the 'Mech Bay when he stepped through the airtight door.

Well, this was pre-ordained. :)



       "I've had about enough of your lip, Ranma!"
       Ryouga lashed out with his foot, his strike aimed
  for Ranma's nose,
  and angled up in such as way as to drive the bone into
  the brain if it
  connected. The pig-tailed mechwarrior bobbed clear of the
  strike knowing

strike, knowing



  that it had been a potentially fatal blow.

[snip]


       "It's gonna get a lot worse for you," Ranma
  returned, wiping away the
  blood on his cheek, and secretly fearful of the man's
  resilience. What was
  this guy made of? This was not the candyass he had
  spanked time and time
  again in 7th Grade!
       Ryouga just seemed to be getter

getting


  angrier as he stood there.

[snip]


       Ranma took both blows hard, and staggered backwards
  in a daze. Ryouga
  noted his adversary's watery knees, and knew that one
  more shot would put
  him away for good.
       He didn't get the shot. Ranma must have been faking
  the extent of his
  weakness, he realized as a devastating punch combination
  smashed into his
  bruised body and face with incredible force. That rotten,
  sneaky bastard!

Anything Goes, Ryouga...



       "I'm listening," Ryouga said tersely, interrupting
  his internal
  speculation.
       "Like I said," Ranma went on. "I didn't even know
  she was a girl until
  today."
       "Not just a girl," Ryouga pointed out, "But

"but



  your fiancee!"
       "That's my stupid Old Man's fault!" Ranma returned.
  "He made some deal
  with Ukyou's dad ten years ago, but all he was doing was
  swindling them out
  of her dowry. I had nothing to do with it! I didn't even
  know there was
  an engagement! I thought Ukyou was a BOY, remember?!"
       Ryouga thought this over, his face a mask of skepticism.
       "Keep talking, Ranma."
       "All we were *doing* tonight was talking, Ryouga. We
  hadn't seen each
  other in ten years!"
       Ryouga pondered this as well. He didn't look convinced.
       "If all you're saying is true," he said sternly.
  "Then explain what

is true," he said sternly, "then explain what




  her lipstick was doing all over your mouth. I wasn't here
  to see it, but
  plenty of other people did."

[snip]



       "Let's put it this way, Ryouga," he said finally.
  "The only person
  who can say if we aren't engaged anymore is Akane. Until
  she says otherwise,
  you just stay the hell out of our business."
       "Fine with me," Ryouga grunted. "The second she
  wakes up tomorrow,
  she's going to dump you, Ranma." He cracked his knuckles
  in anticipation.
  "And then your ass is grass."

This is a much more bitter rivalry than in canon, but it fits the
setting well.



       "I see," Akari replied. "That's why you were so
  quick to defend
  Akane's honor, then. Because you felt you owed her for
  her kindness to
  you on Capra."
       Ryouga closed his eyes. If that is how you want to
  see things, Akari,
  then for you it shall be so...

Mmmm, a tangled web you're weaving, Ryouga. Watch out. First, P-chan
and Akane, now Akari.



       "Yes," he replied. "Exactly."
       She looked at him with her huge soft eyes. "Would
  you do the same for
  me?"
       Yes, he thought to himself. I would.

Suggest: Yes, he thought to himself, I would.



  But please
  don't ask me to choose
  between you and Akane, because I don't know that I could.
       "O-Of course I would," he replied.
       Akari sighed contentedly. "It makes me feel so very
  special to know
  that you would." She snuggled sleepily against his
  shoulder as they went
  up to Berthing. "You mean the universe to me, Ryouga dearest."
       Heat welled up within him at her declaration. He
  felt such an intense
  satisfaction and pride at being the object of Akari's
  affection, and at the
  same time he felt such intense shame for not being able
  to come to terms
  with his love for Akane, that he was leading Akari on.
  Was he any better
  than Ranma to feel this way about two women? Didn't that
  make him a
  two-timer, with the only difference between himself and
  Ranma being the
  fact that Ranma had actually kissed one of his loves?
       "Well, Ryouga dearest," Akari said to him in the
  darkened passageway
  of Berthing. "I guess

Berthing, "I guess




  this is good night."
       He could see her eyes shining in the fire-lights.
       "I, uh, guess so," he replied.
       She closed her eyes and tilted her face up to him.
       "Would you like to kiss me good night?" she asked him.
       Sweat began to pour in buckets down Ryouga's
  temples. His knees
  buckled. The compartment seemed to be swaying back and
  forth around him.
       She waited patiently for his lips as he grappled
  with himself.
       "I would like to kiss you good night," she added softly.
       "No! Um, er, what I mean is. Th-That is to say
  that..." he stammered
  helplessly.
       "What is it?" she asked coyly, her eyes still
  closed. Her lips returned
  to a slight pucker that would be receptive to him.
       "I-It should be m-me who, ah, you know... uh, er,
  k-k-kisses you g-good
  night," he rambled. He didn't even hear half of what he
  was saying, he was
  wound up so tight.
       "I agree completely, Ryouga dearest."
       She continued to wait with seemingly infinite
  patience, which was a
  good thing considering the glacial pace at which Ryouga's
  reluctant lips
  descended towards her.

LOL!!



       "I had a feeling that I might find you up here," the
  doctor remarked.
  "Do you mind a little company?"
       Ranma wasn't in the mood. "Actually--"
       "--Good, I didn't think you'd mind," Tofu said,
  interrupting him.

Suggest:  "Good, I didn't think you'd mind," Tofu said, interrupting
him. (Tofu's speech wasn't interrupted so I suggest doing away with
the emdash.)




       "What now, cousin?" Tetsuo Gosunkugi asked him.
       Hikaru consulted the charts. Their horoscopes were
  vague at this point,
  offering little in the way of advice. Worse, he had run
  out of pigeons to
  sacrifice; their entrails had been particularly oracular
  for him of late.

Oh, no! <smirk>  I'm starting to grow mildly fond of your Hikaru. :)




       Hikaru punched in the code sequence that would open
  the door. It
  slid open, bombarding him with sound that poured out into
  the passageway.


            o/" ...We throw our nets
                Out into the sea,
                And all the ama-ama come swimmin' to me!
                Well, we're going... To the Huki-lau!
                The Huki-Huki-Huki-Huki-lau! o/"


       Hikaru Gosunkugi fought back the urge to scream in
  pain.

HAHAHAHAHAAA!!! This is so choice! ^_^




       "We make planetfall soon, yah?" Kuno continued,
  ignoring the young
  man's reply. "No can surf in dis big metal can!"
       "I'm afraid not, your Eminence," Hikaru said to him.
  "We'll be Jumping
  again shortly."
       "Dat's heinous, brah!"

LOL!



       "For what purpose?" he asked indignantly.
       "To offer the Shogun to the Grand Duke as a
  bargaining chip with
  Tatewaki," Hikaru replied. "Kuno might like to see his
  father done away
  with, but the Combine's Daimyo won't stand for it. He'll
  have to back
  down from his invasion if he's to get his father back.
  Just be sure to
  let this magnanimous gesture on our part cement our
  alliance with the
  Confederation, and my betrothal to Akane."

More political machinations. It'll help Nerima, but when Soun can't
produce Akane, Tetsuo's going to be caught between a loud
wannabe-Hawaiian and a hard lava rock...



       Tetsuo stepped away from his cousin to think about
  his proposition.
       "It's crazy, cousin, but it might actually work," he
  finally conceded.
       "The tricky part will be in breaking the blockade,"
  Hikaru noted.
  "But if I can continue to lead Kuno on while you make a
  break for Capella,
  it will keep the number of ships guarding the system low
  enough for you
  to have a good chance of pulling it off."
       "It will be interesting to work with Nabiki again,"
  Tetsuo agreed.
  "I'm sure, given the current situation, that she'll see
  the merits of
  working towards an alliance with the League."

Uh-huh. Wanna bet that's all she'll see?




       "We can hope, cousin," Hikaru said, nodding. "We can
  hope. In the
  meantime, get that crazy idiot off my ship. I can't stand
  having him on
  board any longer."

Heh.



       "Pray tell, what is it that troubles thee, my lovely
  Akane Tendo?" he
  asked her.
       "You have chosen the Pig-Tailed Girl over me?" she
  asked him wretchedly.
       Her query wounded him to the depths of his being,
  pangs of grief and
  dismay that shook him to his very foundation.

Man, Kunou's going to blow a gasket when he finally gets it beat
into his head just *who* his pigtailed goddess is...




       "Never!" he cried, shocked that such a thing was
  even conceivable.
  "Thou art my Tigress! My shining Valkyrie with blue-black
  hair! Never could
  I, Tatewaki Kuno, foresake thy love for another!"
       "Oh, Tatewaki," the Pig-Tailed Girl cried out in
  grief. "Then you
  don't really love me?!"
       Tatewaki reeled. How could he forsake his buxom
  red-haired Venus?

How indeed...



       "Nay!" he wailed. "Why must thou render such cruel
  judgement upon me?
  I cannot give my heart to one and forsake the other. Is
  there not a place
  for the three of us at Aphrodite's table?"
       "No," they intoned. "You must choose."
       Overcome with grief, he leaped at them to take them
  both into his
  embrace. His two loves lashed out with simultaneous
  jumping kicks to his
  face.

Well, he got that part right. ;p




       "Pay them no mind for the moment," Tatewaki said,
  dismissing the
  matter with the wave of his hand. "It is the whereabouts
  of that blackguard
  Hikaru Gosunkugi that concerns me."
       "Ah yes,"

"Ah, yes,"



  Kyle returned uncomfortably. "We are
  unable to determine
  the whereabouts of his fleet at this time, but as our
  ships finish charging
  their Jump batteries, we shall begin searching all the
  systems within a
  One-Jump radius of Alpha Centauri."
       "It is not good that Gosunkugi should escape,"
  Tatewaki seethed. "He
  has my father as his hostage." He clenched a fist. "O,

"Oh, (?)



  how I have prayed
  for an end to his pusillanimous reign over the mighty
  Furinkan Combine,
  but not in this manner! He finds yet another way to
  debase the high rank
  of his office by allowing himself to be made the prisoner
  of a half-wit
  such as the scion of Gosunkugi!

[snip]


       He raised his fists over his head.
       "It is intolerable!" he bellowed. "That such a great
  lord as myself
  be made to play the fool!"

Yep. Especially when he doesn't need the help...



  He fell to his knees and began
  to beat upon the
  carpeted deck. "Both of my loves are snatched from me by
  that fell villain,
  Ranma Saotome! My twisted sister escapes from my very
  flagship! And now,
  my own father is taken by the likes of Hikaru Gosunkugi,
  a cretin so callow
  and crass that he dares not face me as true man - upon
  the battlefield -
  but as a craven plotter, weaving instead his dark magicks
  upon me!"
       Kyle could only stand in silence, and let his lord
  rage impotently
  against the cruelties of the gods.

I wouldn't think that he would, at that precise moment, care to draw
attention to himself. ^_^



  1. Well, I've underestimated my _literary elephantiasis_
  once again. It
  looks like "The Saotome Gambit" will be completed in no
  more than 25 parts
  at this point, which is a lot more than I had intended.
  That means we're
  somewhere between two-thirds and three-quarters of the
  way done. Hang in
  there!

I thought that when you started this, the setup was more indicative
of a fic greater than the 14 or something chapters you initially
said. :)

Very nice installment, J. Austin. Eagerly anticipating the next.

Ja!
Dave

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