Note: All spelling, grammar, and punctuation comments snipped because
I'm going to deal with them as suggested.
"D.F. Roeder" wrote:
Firebase LIBERTY
The moon of Oni,
~o/ "Oni Moon, you saw me standing alone, without a song in my heart,
without a horn bud to rub... Ahem. Moving right along...
Yes, quite. :)
Later, when time permitted, she would don a pressure suit and
walk among the buried dead as she had done in the makeshift morgue.
There had been no public memorial for them, nor could there be until
the fighting was over. Her private prayers of mourning would have to
suffice. It was the best she could do until an acceptable resolution
presented itself.
I just love the way you've molded Kasumi into this situation.
Thanks!
<snip>
"We've established a line-of-sight lasercomm link with the
GunShips _Leyte Gulf,_ _Cowpens,_
O_O Cowpens?
The GunShips listed were all named after important battles in American
History. The Battle of Cowpens was a critical engagement in the
American Revolution. The American victory set the stage for British
General Cornwallis' retreat from the south and into Virginia, where he
would surrender at Yorktown soon afterwards.
It was called "Cowpens" because the site was a large open field where
southern colonial ranchers would bring their cattle prior to slaughter.
<snip>
Now she was playing a waiting game. For some asinine reason,
Tatewaki Kuno had left the system in a rush with most of his
invasion force. She needed decisive action from him if her plot
was going to have any chance of succeeding, and his desertion had
left her in the lurch with the nobles, who were really getting
anxious. What the hell was going on with him? She needed him to
keep the pressure on, because her father's futile defiance of the
Combine was what she was counting on to spring her trap.
I suggest Nabsy strap some candles to her head and start dancing...
That might not be a bad idea, but hey, her plan has to start working
sooner or later, right?
<snip>
"Want a drink?" he asked her as she took the chair that would
allow her to best dominate the rest of the room with her presence.
His grating and hollowly insincere chumminess only served to remind
her of how odious a chore sex had been with him.
<smirk>
Not exactly the Nabiki pairing you were hoping for? :p
<snip>
His eyes trembled in their sockets, and she knew that, for the
moment, she had him. Rolf would just have to wait a little longer
for his chance, she decided.
The whole scene was a nice bit of power-playing characterization for
Nabiki. Kudos.
Thanks again!
<snip>
"My grandfather always said that I should marry a man who
pilots a BattleMaster," she told him with a smile.
"A-A BattleMaster?" he asked dazedly.
"Yes!" she beamed. "Isn't it so romantic?"
She likes me just because of my battlemech? Ryouga wondered,
his heart sinking. That's it?
LOL! Now THAT's an interesting twist on the Akari obsession. ^_^
The way I figured it, this Akari's obsession with 'mechs, and her
decision to fall in love with Ryouga over his BattleMaster is no less
ridiculous than the manga-Akari's pig fetish, and the fact that she
can only marry a guy who beats up her Sumo pig.
Akari shrugged. "I don't really know," she admitted with a
giggle. "But in your case, it's all true!" She leaned over him to
touch her brow softly against his. "It's all true, Ryouga, dear...
I didn't think much of it when you first joined us, but since then
I've seen that you are all that my grandfather said and more."
Ryouga's face began to burn with a great heat.
"Y-You mean, you *really* want to marry me?"
Akari shrugged. "It seems like a good idea. I can't think of
any reason why not."
:/ Well, so much for romance...
That isn't to say she doesn't love him whole-heartedly. Look how fast
her manga counterpart fell for Ryouga...
At this point, I got a bit lost in the story.
I'll take that as a compliment.
On the subject of Ukyou, I got the sense that there really wasn't much
else to be done with the R/A/U triangle than let it run its usual
course. Tough business trying to make that fresh.
Indeed, but I'll see what I can do. If nothing else, I can make it nice
and painful for all parties concerned...
The Joketsuzoku sections were pearls. The opinions of the Elders Peony
and Cologne and that of Herb himself are all off just enough to be a
problem for all of them when push comes to shove. Peony doesn't have the
correct grasp of the situation, Herb is getting too confident, and
Cologne is too easily dismissing Herb and The Musk. Very, very nicely
done.
I look forward to the next installment.
Ja!
Dave
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D.F. Roeder
http://www.flash.net/~dfroeder/index.html
Thanks again for your time and troubles, Dave!
Jamie