David Johnston wrote in "Collected Comments":
Subject:
[FFML] [FanFic][Ranma] Cast A Second Line Into The Sea
Date:
Sat, 10 Jun 2000 22:48:17 -0500
From:
"D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Description: A middle aged Ranma and Ryoga meet again,
only know Ranma is much more in touch with his feminine
side.
<smirk> Well, that's a tad misleading. Let's say his feminine side
is becoming difficult to ignore for reasons explained in the fic. :)
Comments: I'm less tolerant of Ranma fics than I used to
be, but I rather liked this one, so it's probably pretty
good. That being said, the four daughters don't seem
terribly distinguishable,
Agreed.
and I think Ranma needs to be
less...um...wimpy in the final scene as he decides he doesn't
need the rod to assure his love.
Less wimpy how? That needs some clarification.
I'd like to see even more
ego.
!!!!
I think that would probably be, er, bad characterization,
considering all Ranma's gone through by that point in his/her life.
Ranma still exhibits a healthy amount, but it's been tempered by
loss.
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