> Jumping in surprise Mousse turned around, raising an
>angry fist. "Can't you see I'm busy, Kid?"

"Kid" isn't a proper name or title.

Well... yeah, I guess not.

>  "You were going over my resume," Kanna answered, "and
>gave love advice on the side."

"and giving" flows smoother

>  "Nothing ever goes the way you planned," Sypha
>replied. "Your infinitesimal jealousy is barring your

infinitesimal?  If it is that small, it shouldn't
bar anything.

Not a good word for something big, is it? (thinks again, probably isn't a word; can't be a word....)

>priestess joyfully. "Why didn't I think of that?!" she
>exclaimed happily.

Shizuka:  You did.  I wasn't saying anything like that.

Yes.

>double and even triply hard to please the writer that
>sold thousands of copies of his first book.

"who had sold"

>head, remembering suddenly that of all the hospitals
>in Tokyo, they managed to pick the one Kodachi was at.
>Or, rather, the one Nabiki picked.

Now that sounds like a fun hospital.

Yes (just nod and smile)

Thanks for reading.


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