Subject:
[FFML] [ffml][fanfic][Xenogears/Robotech/others]Tears of an
Immortal
Date:
Sat, 03 Jun 2000 17:11:14 -0700
From:
Andrew Wilson <templar@softcom.net>
Description: Another one of those unreadable, because
not line wrapped, fics.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma][Alt][ver 1.1] Ranmage.03 : Blue Thunder
Date:
Sat, 03 Jun 2000 18:38:48 EST
From:
"Graham Kemp" <gj_kemp@hotmail.com>
Description: Ranma uses "magic" instead of martial arts.
Comments: Shaky spelling
As she approached the school gates, a horde of boys emerged from the
yard yelling declairations of love and violence. 'Man,' Ranma
thought as he pulled back to watch Akane plough her way through them.
'when she said she had to beat off the guys, I thought it was just a
figure of speach.'
"declarations", "speech", and Akane beats off the guys?
Really? Boy, she could get a reputation that way.
to Akane. "Hold this a sec. I'm heir to the Saotome School of
Indescriminant Grappling. I'm Saotome Ranma. It's after the fact,
"Indiscriminate"
Ranma ruefully brushed the bruise that was already starting to show.
If she hadn't noticed, he could have just healled it at once. As it
"healed"
"I'm not forcing anyone...," Ranma began as Kuno did his best to cut
him off - literally. A paniced Ranma leaped away as the blade sliced
"panicked"
I'm dubious about the basic premise here, that magic
reliably trumps physical violence in direct confrontation.
Subject:
[FFML] [Slayers] Return to Mipross Island #1
Date:
Sun, 4 Jun 2000 13:39:51 EDT
From:
LunaHNeko@aol.com
Description: Lina returns to...well...you know.
Comments:
"I don't he could still exist, because Joyrock never entered the time
stream, so his future self should just have ceased to exist. Rowdy gave me
"don't think" All the indications were that Joyrock had
ceased to exist since the islanders were now unaware of
anything being wrong.
Subject:
[FFML] [fic] [Draft] [Ranma x-over] "the Moron and the Maiden"
pt3
Date:
Sun, 4 Jun 2000 20:11:24 +0100
From:
"Ryoko" <kathy@linuxgrrls.org>
Description: Akane the Psycho nearly kills Ranma and
Neil Gaiman's Death shows up.
Comments: I found it unappealing.
the
Ronin - bandits who had attacked the train his sworn liege. The
Incomplete sentence.
Subject:
[FFML] [R1/2/SM]revised Chapter 1
Date:
Sun, 04 Jun 2000 07:12:30 PDT
From:
"Travis Grant" <blueeagle6@hotmail.com>
Description: Scriptlike story in which Ranma is
the ever popular Silver Millenium reincarnation of one of
the bodyguards for the bodyguards.
Comments: Dialogue is utterly unnatural. The author
needs to work on having his characters talk the way people
really talk.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma][Lemon]A Different Viewpoint:Curses and Demons:
Chapter 4
Date:
Sun, 04 Jun 2000 02:15:35 -0700
From:
Christopher J Olsen <GAMERS@prodigy.net>
Description: Akane gets it on with both female and male
Ranma.
Comments:
strange. Really, Ranma wouldn't just leave Akane like that, no mater
how much I wish, and besides, he wouldn't just lay there with his head
"matter"
The only notable element is the lemon part, which I found
arousing. Otherwise the story is seems to be in a holding
pattern at the moment.
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic][Dirty Pair/?] Should Old Acquaintance Be Forgot
chapter 1
Date:
Fri, 2 Jun 2000 21:05:41 -0400
From:
"DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Description: Kei meets a new Zeiram.
Comments: Well, I guess I can trashcan that outline I had
for this story.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][OMG] Goddess in the Mirror -- Chapter 5
Date:
Fri, 02 Jun 2000 18:55:44 -0400
From:
Bart Kelsey <kelsey.14@osu.edu>
Description:
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic][SM] Sailor Moon D, Chapter 1
Date:
Thu, 1 Jun 2000 04:15:57 -0500 (CDT)
From:
TendouNabiki@webtv.net (Yuvia Chairez)
Description: Naru gets tapped as a senshi.
Comments: "Apollo" is an odd choice since Apollo is already
associated with a celestial body. Very original flavour,
perhaps too much so for my taste.
Subject:
[FFML] [FanFic][Ranma] Cast A Second Line Into The Sea
Date:
Sat, 10 Jun 2000 22:48:17 -0500
From:
"D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Description: A middle aged Ranma and Ryoga meet again,
only know Ranma is much more in touch with his feminine
side.
Comments: I'm less tolerant of Ranma fics than I used to
be, but I rather liked this one, so it's probably pretty
good. That being said, the four daughters don't seem
terribly distinguishable, and I think Ranma needs to be
less...um...wimpy in the final scene as he decides he doesn't
need the rod to assure his love. I'd like to see even more
ego.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma]A Different Viewpoint: Curses and Demons: Chapter
6
Date:
Sat, 10 Jun 2000 22:40:08 -0700
From:
Christopher J Olsen <GAMERS@prodigy.net>
Description: Akane must decide whether she can accept
that Ukyo is going to get one of the split Ranmas.
Comments: If "Misty" is an angry cat, she should probably
hiss or yowl.
run into them scouting talent at Furinkan and had kept them in mind if
she could ever get Nermia's martial artist crowd to work together long
enough to complete a fashion shoot.
Ne-ri-ma
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic][Ranma] Fairy Tails, chapter two...
Date:
Sat, 10 Jun 2000 14:24:37 -0700
From:
"Eimii" <eimii@selway.umt.edu>
Description: Ryoga is mysteriously reincarnated into the
world of elves and kitsune.
Comments: Cuteness abounds. My theory is Ryoga was never
human. His entire family are really disguised fox thingies.
Nodding emphatically, Myaan continued. "Yeah; the even if it moves, the
town's never _too_ far away."
delete "the"
Ryoga has a surprising clear idea how to find his way
considering he never could do it.
Subject:
[FFML] [FIC][DARK][R.5] A Murder of Crows, 2 of 4
Date:
Sat, 10 Jun 2000 15:35:57 -0400 (EDT)
From:
Knight Writer <Jedediah@tri-countynet.net>
Description: Akane returns from death after 20 years to
kill the ones who raped and killed Ranma.
Comments: What, you didn't include the TV series?
What a dump, he thought as he surveyed the darkned mess of the foyer. Signs
of a struggle, maybe? The call had stated that shots had been fired, a
darkened
(Part 3)
Why couldn't they ever get it right? What higher power deemed them not to
be together?
decreed they could not be together?
"Very well," she said after an eternity of seconds. "Remain while I
entertain your simlple request."
simple
Subject:
[FFML] [fic][original] Hikage
Date:
Tue, 6 Jun 2000 23:55:39 -1000
From:
"Rob @ Studio YOGIPIGS" <rob@yogipigs.org>
Description: Hapless mortal acquires demonic girlfriend
as third point in romantic triangle, after becoming
irresistable monster bait.
Comments: Deft adaptation of anime conventions. Looks
well researched, as well.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][Robotech] Pushing the Envelope Ch. 1
Date:
Wed, 19 Jul 2000 16:28:53 -0700
From:
"Brian Payne" <sofaspud@sofaspud.org>
Description: Veritech courier unexpectedly finds himself
with a human supercargo in considerable demand.
Comments: Dynamic and promising. Reminescent of Roger
Zelazny.
Subject:
[FFML] [fic][original]Baka Yaro Ch 5
Date:
Wed, 19 Jul 2000 16:10:18 PDT
From:
"Ryo M" <kotaro326@hotmail.com>
Description: Teenage martial artists spend a great deal
of time attacking each other.
Comments: I definitely prefer the prose style.
Azusa fell to her knees in exaustion. She losened her belt. She had never
trained that hard before. She had to to help beat that Lee guy and rescue
Shin and his friend. She suddenly stoped, wondering why she wanted so bad to
"exhaustion", "loosened", "stopped"
sword. Ryo remained in a squated position in his boxers with a look of
surprise evident on his face.
"squatting"
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma] Let the Curtain Fall - Act One, Chapter Two:
Fresh Scars
(complete draft
Date:
Wed, 19 Jul 2000 02:02:43 PDT
From:
"Michael Noakes" <noakes_m@hotmail.com>
Description: Demons are out to get Akane. Ranma is
rather enjoying it.
Comments: One possible substitute for the car is to collapse
a structure on top of the demon. My biggest problem
is why, if the demons are tracking Akane by scent, would
they attack girls who just look like Akane?
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic][R.5/AMG] ASHES - A Cinderella Story, Chapter
Three
Date:
Tue, 18 Jul 2000 23:43:10 -0500
From:
"James and the Bluejay" <alboro@wanderway.com>
Description: Hiroshi has acquired the power to become
the world's greatest...female...idol singer. Meanwhile
the world's second greatest idol singer has taken to mugging
female martial artists.
Comments: Threats to his masculinity aside, this is not
such a bad deal for Hiroshi. He can be a star for a few
hours, and then escape the burden of celebrity.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic] [Escaflowne] You know. That One.
Date:
Tue, 18 Jul 2000 18:45:05 EDT
From:
DirandauAlbatou@aol.com
Description: Flashbacks fill in the background of the
story of the girl who changes into a sociopathic guy.
Comments: I found this chapter confusing, probably because
I don't know Escaflowne.
Subject:
[FFML] [fanfic/OMG]Goddess?!?!?! Oh My..... part Three
Date:
Mon, 17 Jul 2000 18:24:07 -1000
From:
"Rob @ Studio YOGIPIGS" <rob@yogipigs.org>
Description:
Comments:
I'm still in the Security biz, so I know a few things about modern tactics
that you guys won't. And number thee," she remarked as she stared at Mara,
"three"
her lens-covered brown eyes staring into Mara's own, "We're your friends,
That's a bit of a turn around.
jaded as Amsterdam would be impressive enough, but when the woman moved
forward slightly in her seat, unfurling two grand, ivory and gold wings,
Funny scene, but does Kami-Sama really approve that that
kind of blatancy? Ah well, maybe it'll be assumed to be
some kind of publicity stunt.
and said, "You know, for a second there, I almost thought you had some mad
skillz."
"'Mad skillz?'" Catoblepas parroted, not familiar with the term.
Joan shrugged and answered, "Hey, I live in North America mostly. You'd
be surprised of the colloquialisms you pick up now and then. Besides
I found this digression annoying. "at the"
Subject:
[FFML] [BGC] BG Cross Part 23: "...Out Of Sight"
Date:
Sun, 16 Jul 2000 02:06:03 -0400
From:
Andy Skuse <askuse@home.com>
Description: Boomers are out to kill Priss's boomer
boyfriend.
Comments:
Nene sighed. "Thanks for nothing Oto."
Comma after "nothing". Who is Oto?
How can Clarence be so stupid as to charge boomers who
just killed two tough men instantly? It would make more
sense if he called out for the others to run, self sacrifice
rather than stupidity.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma/Matrix] Interface - The Infamous Chapter Six
Date:
Thu, 20 Jul 2000 04:09:08 -0700
From:
"XStylus" <ranma@cts.com>
Description: Akane is captured by the Agents and Ryoga
quickly loses his enthusiasm for working for them.
Comments: An object demonstration of the reason for the
anti-Matrix rebel's fanaticism, and the reason why they
keep hammering in that your family isn't "really" your
family. They're wrong about the guns though. Ranma will
be more effective with martial arts than with a gun.
Subject:
[FFML] [FFML][Tenchi/Crow] Iniquitous Angel
Date:
Sun, 16 Jul 2000 00:42:48 -0500
From:
Michael McAvoy <mmcavoy@ejourney.com>
Description: Ryoko does that Crow thing.
Comments: The Crow elements were well written, but why
was it so easy to kill Ryoko? Is this a Ryoko who wasn't
impaled for 800 years?
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma] Shampoo and the Sea
Date:
Sat, 15 Jul 2000 22:38:28 -0700
From:
David Homerick <dhomeric@jps.net>
Description: Hemingway pastiche featuring Shampoo.
Comments: Apt parody.
Subject:
[FFML] [SOAP][minor revision]All-Purpose Cultural Mecha-Boy
Ryu-Kun 0-II
Date:
Thu, 20 Jul 2000 13:08:43 +0800
From:
"TimeRunner" <keiichi@i-manila.com.ph>
Description: Professor Natsume gets a job with NERV,
as his estranged wife finds out that NERV is a big cash cow.
Comments: Really, shouldn't Gendo at least make some
gesture toward making sure that the price of what Akiko
is at least vaguely proportional to value?
Subject:
[FFML] [ffml][r.5/precept]GLDD ch1
Date:
Sun, 16 Jul 2000 04:30:08 GMT
From:
"Josh Temple" <tarne_of_eat@hotmail.com>
Description: In a science fictional nanotech universe,
Genma and Ranma are still idiots.
Comments: As I said before, the author really needs to
work on his commas and question marks. Also there's a
recurrent problem with double letters like "latter"
instead of "later" and "hoped" instead of "hopped".
In the mainline Ranma universe, Ryouga only pursued
Ranma for a year or less.
There doesn't seem to be much connection between Keith
and Ranma. Instead they are just tacked together.
Also, given that the tournament was described as not for
Amazons only, the Amazon law doesn't make sense.