In a message dated 7/12/00 7:38:33 PM, kyle_emmerson@yahoo.com writes:
Well, THIS time, the reply is complete! Sorry for my last botched post. ^^;
At 02:54 AM 7/12/00 EDT, you wrote:
I wonder how many of you can figure out what's going on. :)
I had it figured out pretty early on, but you _DID_ tell me a bit about
it last night on IRC. ^_^
So did I, didn't I? :)
C&C would be appreciated, btw.
And here it is! Hope you enjoy. :P
Thankie. :P
<snippity>
Like Water for Ranma and Akane
Ooh. OAV rip-off! Baaaad mojo! :P
Ouch! When I started writing this fic, I hadn't acquired the OAV
yet. But even after acquring it, I couldn't let go of it; the title
was just sooooo perfect! :)
Or
The Arienniichuan
That works.
It'll do, but I still like the first title. :P
Nooo, not the DISCLAIMERS! Ranma 1/2 and its associated
characters belongs to Rumiko Takasahi. I'm merely borrowing
them. I cannot be held liable for missing zeros and ones that
result in the transfer between clients, however.
Sorry, too late. ;)
Nor can you be held resonsible for the people who READ this, right? ...
Otherwise, I woulda never caught it. I think. *shrug*
*nodsnods* Nor for the conditions inflicted upon those who read it,
since it was of their own risk. :)
Ranma sighed as he let his body soak in the hot furo, royally
confused by his own actions. Just few minutes ago, he had been
all over that girl like a love-sick puppy! He couldn't stop
hugging and kissing her. He felt sickened by the memory of it
and shook his head to clear his thoughts. They drifted away.
Okay, you're writing in past tense, ne? Rather than saying 'Just a few
minutes ago', I'd go with something like 'A few minutes prior, he had...'
Right. 'Several minutes earlier, he had...'
He heard the door slide open behind him and he spun around as
he stood up to face the person. And his eyes bulged at the sight
of a beautiful and shapely young girl's n-naked body!
...person, and his... OR ...person. His...
I'll go with the former.
Akane giggled at Ranma's reaction, who was gawking at her.
Partly to his relief and disappointment, she held a small towel
over her hips. He then remembered his passionate kissing with
the same girl.
Hmm. That last sentence sounds kinda clunky. Maybe '...remembered kissing
the same girl passionately.'
"Oh, don't be so embarrassed, Ranma! We're practically
engaged, after all! It's perfectly okay with if you look at my
body." She smiled sweetly and walked over to a wooden tub of
cold water. Teasingly, she knelt down, using her legs and arms
to hide her private parts, having discarded the towel at Ranma's
head.
Okay, I'll assume this has occured BEFORE she finds out she actually IS
engaged to Ranma, so I'll let that one go. ^_^
Actually, Soun DID explain to the girls about the arranged marriage
before Ranma arrived. So it wouldn't be much of a stretch for Akane
to assume that she's engaged to him.
"Ooo, cold!" Akane remarked as she rinsed herself off with
another bowl of water. Ranma gulped as he was being turned on
again.
That last sentence is.. somewhat confusing. Does it mean he's getting
excited, or that Akane has turned toward him again? ^_^
*coughs* Er, well.. umm... ^_^
"Ooo, cold!" Akane remarked as she rinsed herself off with another
bowl of water. Ranma gulped as he shivered in healthy excitement.
^_^
She quickly slid (or more accurately, pounced) into the warm
tub beside Ranma, still paralyzed with shock and fear. She
giggled once more again and slid her shapely legs around him,
her arms around his neck and...
Ooh. The PAIN is a'coming!
(deep in bowels of the neverlands, DEATH reads the inventory)
DEATH: Oh, looks like I'm going to have a new visitor today... no,
make it two...!
(voices heard in distance)
AKANE: Look at what you've done! Now we're really DOOMED!
RANMA: Whose fault was it for strangling me and then eating
some poision, a la 'Romeo & Juliet'?!
AKANE: RANMA NO BAKA! *mallets him*
DEATH: Oh no, not again, not them! Anyone but them!!
A boy. A naked one at that, and she realized belatedly that
she was naked as well. And she was cuddling him bit _too_
passionately. In a steaming furo. And she was just about to kiss
him...
Obviously she's cursed. :P
Is that your final answer...?
In an instant, a scream of "PERVERT!" echoed throughout the
house.
Yup. Cursed. ^_^
Pin-pon! :)
To say that Nabiki was surprised was an understatement. Less
than an hour ago, very many things had surprised her. When you
consider the fact that she was Nabiki Tendo, it was no easy
feat.
There's that 'ago' again. Remember, ago is usually used in present tense
or
dialogue. You're writing in past tense, so I'd use 'prior', or 'earlier'.
Hmm. Thanks for the info - I wasn't aware that 'ago' shouldn't be
associated with past tense.
Their unexpected visitors were next; a _panda_ and a boy. Why
would a panda want to visit them? The boy was a mystery enough,
since she had never met him before. Her Daddy DID try and ask
him for him, but before he could answer, came the _third_
surprise of the day.
Umm.... He smelled like fish? ^_^
Well, _maybe_ that one too. (swiming the distance between China
and Japan do tend to soak some rather unusual odor into the
swimmers ;)
Akane had just come up from behind and they saw each other.
One second they were staring at each other as if they had never
met before (which they never did), and the next they were making
out with a such passion that caused even Kasumi to blush. They
were _french-kissing_, for Kami's sake! And in public too!
o_O
I don't blame Kasumi. But she'd either faint dead away, or scold the two
of them for carrying on in public like that. :P
Or cheering them on. :)
None of this made any sense to her. Why would Akane, a boy-
hater and breaker of hearts, be smooching with a boy (which,
even she had to admit was cute-looking in a way, with a cute
bod, with cute... STOP IT!), and she didn't even have a chance
to make any impression on him!?
Nabiki is cursed too?
Nope.
The kissing session had lasted for quite some time, and
nobody had even moved an inch. She had just gaped at the...
couple? It was not until Akane had suggested that the boy take a
bath (something about him being filthy), she had snapped into
reality. The cute boy agreed and left with Akane as his guide.
Wow. She knows him so well already. ^_^
The Destined Lovers should be well-knowledgable of each other. ^_^
Ten minutes later, a scream of "PERVERT!" startled everyone,
and Nabiki had quickly rushed to the bathroom, only she was not
prepared for a sight of Akane trying to throttle a boy
underwater in the furo. And they both were naked.
Err. She's throttling his _NECK_, right? o_O
AKANE: I'm giving him a hickey!
Acting quickly, she jumped into the furo (and ruining her
favorite shirt) and wrestled angry Akane's hold off the now-
unconscious boy.
Boy, I'd really like to see how the Musk Ladle goes into play here. ^_^
Hum, say, that's an idea... >:)
"I'M GONNA KILL THE PERVERT! I'M GONNA GET HIM!" Akane
screamed as she struggled against Nabiki's hold. Unfortunately,
as she strained to pull her sister out of the furo, she slipped
on a puddle of water, and crashed into a nearby pail of water.
And the loop continues. :P
"Wah, COLD!" Startled by the temperature, Akane ceased her
struggle, just as the rest of Tendos and a bald man burst into
the bathroom. Kasumi blushed at the sight of naked boy, while
the bald man slapped his hands against their forehead.
"What's going on here?" Soun demanded.
"Daddy!" Akane quickly tried to cover herself as best as she
could with her arms. "I'm taking a bath!"
"With a boy?" Nabiki remarked.
Akane: Yes with a boy! How else do you expect me to get nasty?!
Soun: Oh, that's all right, then... Enjoy!
NABIKI: Wanna share?
"'With a boy...?' Oh! You must mean Ran--"
A splash of hot water splashed them both, interrupting
Akane's words. The bald man had jumped into the furo and was now
pulling a pigtailed boy above the water level. "I'm sorry, but
will you please spare us few minutes to get proper?"
'Proper,' he says. Sheesh. :P
Couldn't think of anything else to use. :P
"Yes, yes." Soun nodded in agreement and quickly pulled both
Akane and Nabiki before they could protest a word, sliding the
door shut behind him.
He pulled his naked daughter into the hallway? What did he pull on? o_O
AKANE: Daddy...
SOUN: Yes?
AKANE: *mallets Soun* Next time, watch where you're groping at! That
*hurts!*
"What's going on, Daddy? Who are these people?" Nabiki
demanded.
Soun chuckled. "Why, those two were the people we've been
expecting. My best friend Genma and his son..."
"I don't care about them," Akane retorted angrily, having
wrapped a large towel around herself to cover her modesty. "What
I want to know is WHAT DID THAT BOY DO TO ME?!"
Kasumi: Well, you first started out by making out like you were in heat,
then you told him to have a bath, and then you climbed in... Then you
started strangling him.
Akane: So... what did he do?
Nabiki: Apparently, he existed.
"Um," Soun sweatdropped at Akane's outburst. Quickly, he went
to his knees and was groveling at the feet of his daughter,
"Please forgive your old miserable father! I didn't mean to do
it- Kasumi was supposed to be the one--"
*shudder* I cannot imagine Kasumi in such a comprimising position... At
all.
"What about me?" Kasumi stepped into the conversation. "What
am I supposed to be?"
Soun: A two dollar ho' to Ranma's mackdaddy!
Realizing his slip, Soun laughed unconvincingly, "Oh, I meant
Kasumi was supposed to buy more rice for our new guests!"
Yeah, right. To throw, no doubt. :P
Heh. That hadn't occured to me. :)
Three girls looked at their father doubtfully, but before
they could respond, the door to bathroom slid open to reveal a
wet boy. He looked from Kasumi to Nabiki, and finally to an
angry Akane, and brought his hand behind his head. "Um, I'm
Ranma Saotome. Sorry 'bout this."
He hasn't introduced himself yet? o_O
I'm afraid Ranma's schedule was rather busy. Let's see, kissing a
strange girl and being seduced by the said girl wouldn't take much
of your time, wouldn't it? :)
Akane: I can keep a stoic expression longer than YOU can!
Ranma: What? No you can't-- D'oh!
Hehe.
It had taken both families almost two hours to coax their
simmering scions out of their mood for a proper greeting. Their
kids were obviously angry over the bathroom incident, but in
both fathers' opinions, they had more important matters to deal
with.
Namely, saving their skins.
I'd already have a panda skin rug by this time. ^_^
Granted, skinning a panda would be lot easier than skinning a human. :P
Genma cleared his throat, "What I am about to tell you is a
_true_ story, and it has a wonderful ending for everyone in it.
But first, I should show you something..."
O_O
Before himself, he held a glass of cold water in his hand.
"Observe," Genma said simply as he poured it over his son.
The girls blinked as something about the boy changed abruptly.
Every fiber of his body suddenly relaxed as if some unseen hand
had switched his power-on button off.
Oh. That. Whew. :P
Hentai. :)
An instant later, Ranma's arms were around Akane's body,
nuzzling her and making contented sounds. "You're so cute,
Akane. I love you..."
It's so sweet... I think I'm getting a toothache. :P
It _is_ going overboard, I think.
Akane stared at the boy around her blankly, as if not
comprehending what Ranma had just done. Except for Genma,
everyone stared at the speculate, mouths agape in shock.
Ten seconds rule goes into effect...
A Law of the Anime&Manga, apparently. :)
Nabiki, though, whistled a little, suddenly green with envy.
The boy was practically radiating _passion_. Any normal girl
would have practically swooned in the heat. Her eyes twitched in
annoyance. She didn't need more evidence than what she had just
witnessed to know that this boy indeed was the Prize specimen
every girl would kill to win. She shook her head; the Dream Man
of about every girl was in front of her and Akane already had
claimed his heart? Gods were indeed cruel to her...
Nabiki's getti' horndogged by Ranma, too? Yowza. I'd almost hate to se
his
first day of school...... ... ...
No I wouldn't. Give it up, DA! ^_^
While Ranma and Akane's eternally bound to each other, I don't think
Nabiki would be the one to pass up a hunk like Ranma. :P
The eldest sister sighed almost contentedly. That was _so_
romantic! A boy confessing his undying love for another girl,
spilling all of his heart onto the her on the spot. Just
straight out of the romantic novels she would read every night
before going to bed... too bad he was too young for her, or she
would have nabbed him. Hmm, she probably would have done so
anyway if Akane hadn't gotten him first. Kasumi clasped her
hands under her cheek and marveled at the prize her sister had
won, "Akane, you're so lucky!"
Lucky, she says. Heh.
Lucky, yeah. Hehe.
And Akane? Her mind was a complete blank. This... BOY had
just confessed that he loved her. She had heard the words
before, said by hordes of boys, but none of them had truly meant
it. This... boy did, she could sense that Ranma had meant it.
She could feel his comforting presence covering her like a warm
blanket, dampening even her toughened defenses, threatening to
overwhelm her heavy resistance against boys. She felt... warm
and safe. She suddenly felt an urge to kiss Ranma passionately
on the spot. Any normal girl would have succumbed to the desire
in a heartbeat.
And slowly, the viewers see her eyes turn red... a moment later, Baazel
is
reborn...
I'm afraid this particular joke fell flat on me. ^^;
Baazel?
Akane, however, was anything but a normal girl. Snapped out
of her shock by Nabiki's whistling, she quickly became furious
as she tried to remove the offending _boy_ off her body. "WHAT
ARE YOU DOING, YOU PERVERT?! GET OFF ME!!"
I think he's _TRYING_ to get off. :P
On the contrary... :)
"Mmm. Mmm. I'm so happy that I've met you! Happy, happy!"
Genma: Quiet, boy!
Soun: Knock on wood!
Somewhere, in a cave far away, someone sneezes.
LOL!
"LET GO OF ME!" A metallic frying pan clanged off Ranma's
thick head repeatedly as Akane continued to hit her lover.
Ranma: More! More! _SHOW_ me your love!
Wait until Akane realizes that Ranma's a masochist... :)
"Ah yes, it was not until two weeks ago when I came upon a
fortunate incident. I discovered about a mystical training
grounds known as Jusenkyo. I decided to take my son and train
there, to improve our skills. However, I had not anticipated,
ah, the true horror of the grounds."
Genma: Yes... the true horror... There was a $10 cover charge...
LOL, that absolutely had cracked me up.
"The horror?" Everyone echoed. Akane, ignored by the group,
continued to pummel Ranma's head, this time with an empty kettle
and adding more bumps to his head.
Ranma: Akane, you're so sexy! Can I do you next?
AKANE: Only if you're into kinky...
Genma shook his head, "No. Fortunately, who knows what worse
fates might have befallen him," he bemoaned. "No, he didn't fall
in; I pushed him into the pool." Genma replied broadly, as if he
had just unveiled his greatest plan. Which, in his opinion, it
was.
Ya know... I'd hate to se a mixture of Arieniichuan and Nyannichuan.
Seriously, you could imagine an oversexed Ranma-chan? *shudder*
Fortunately, in this case, Ranma is _not_ cursed by Nyannichuan.
Somehow, I don't think Akane'll take lightly to being hopelessly in
love with a girl whose has better body than her. ^_^
AKANE: Oh, wow! This is great, you've got bigger breasts than me! Now
we can get _really_ kinky!
RANMA: *flees in terror* WAAAAAHHHHHHHH!
The girls stared at him in shock. Even Akane stared at the
old man, not responding to Ranma's passionate advances.
"W...why did you do that?" Nabiki finally spoke.
Genma: I was bored and needed something to pass the time.
Heh.
Before either daughters could adjust to the new change, Soun
instantly picked up a steaming-hot kettle and poured its
contents over the mammal.
Even as a panda, Genma is hardly warm=blooded. :P
Yes! Genma is an accomplice to the demons of the Hell! :P
"OWOWOWOWOWOW," Genma yelped as he transformed back into a
fat, balding man, "Hot, hot!"
A hot, fat, balding man? o_O
Strike that one, should've been 'a hot, fat, bald man.' :P
A nice specimen for the next Iron Chief session, ne?
"Hah! That'll teach the pervert for molesting me!" She
smirked, wiping her hands clean.
Kasumi: He still managed to get your top, Akane.
Akane: *looking down on herself* D'oh!
Heh.
I'm afraid to speculate what would happen if Ranma and Akane
decided to be more, ahem, 'creative' in their affections for
each other. :)
Something settled into Nabiki's stomach as she realized the
implications. No way, she thought, Daddy wouldn't do a such
thing... would he? She quickly grabbed another glass of cold
water and splashed it on her own sister, already anticipating
her response.
Akane: I'm a little teapot, short and stout...
Nabiki: Oh my GOD! They turned her into a... err... what exactly IS she?
SOUN: I don't know. Are those hot steam coming out of its ends...?
"What'd you do that for?!" Akane shook her head to shake off
excess water, then gasped at the prone body of her lover. She
quickly went to his side and used her strength to hurl the table
off Ranma and didn't notice that she had thrown the table
through the wall. "Ranma! Are you all right?!"
"Oww! Why'd ya do that, ya tomboy?" Ranma moaned as Akane
gathered him up into her arms.
"I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to hurt you! Please forgive me!"
Ranma: Err... Okay... I guess...
Akane: *glomp*
Ranma: Gackk!
Akane evens the score:
Akane - 1
Rarnma - 1
:)
Once caught in the Lover's Grip, there were only two ways to
escape: by pushing the passionate female off your body, which
was unfortunately positioned in a such way that an attempt would
require a contact between hands and the female's breasts (and
any sane man would realize that this indeed was _not_ a wise
move for obvious reasons), or returning her affections in hopes
that she would eventually release you. Of course, this was in
many ways, _not_ considered a good idea either, since she would
be liable to increase her affection tenfold and leaving the
person with same choices he had earlier and running short on
air.
Soun: Touch her boobies! Touch her boobies!
Kasumi: Father! That's not proper!
Soun: Oh, er... sorry, Kasumi. Touch her BREASTS!
Kasumi: That's better.
Heh! And Nabiki snaps out a camrecorder and starts recording...
In sum, Ranma was damned either way.
Which goes in the tune of the actual manga, thinks I.
*nods sagely* Never to give him a break, thinks I.
Nabiki sighed in defeat as her visions of a new boyfriend
exploded in a puff of smoke in the sight of Akane cuddling
Ranma, who was currently trying his best to break free of the
crazed girl. Turning to her daddy, "You used the water on Akane,
didn't you." It was not a question.
I'd do away with the 'Didn't you'. The way it's written, it's phrased like
a question.
Okay, corrected.
Soun coughed uncomfortably. "Not really. I was trying for
Kasumi, but I missed and the water hit Akane instead." Nodding
in approval of the lovers before him, he mused, "Looks like it's
good thing I missed. They're SO perfect for each other!"
Soun now sounds like a schoolgirl. He just needs a catholic schoolgirl
uniform and it's complete!
Don't forget the kneesocks!
And he'll attend the Trainning School for Schoolgirls and learn the dreaded
Spill Water Out of the Windows Without Looking Outside First technique! Oh,
the true horror...
As Ranma snapped into a crystal-clear clarity, he realized
how right his father was; he was indeed the luckiest man in the
world to have a woman whom he loved with all his heart! He
abruptly ceased his resistance and met his fiance's eyes, his
eyes now glittering with happiness.
Oh, this could get ugly.
Oh? You didn't notice already? The train must've missed you somewhere. :)
Nabiki returned her gaze back to the love-struck couple and
felt a heavy sensation growing in her stomach. This bode bad
news, she knew.
I can see it now. Nabiki gets bored, wants to torture one or the other,
drops hot water on Ranma, while leaving Akane alone, or vice versa. Either
way, Ranma is tortured. ^_^
That _is_ one of potential outcomes of this events. Ahh! Which idea to use?
I can't decide, so I must use them both! :P
Ten minutes later, Nabiki had quite enough of their sickening
public display of affection that she ran out of the room,
zeroing for the bathroom. Moments later, retching sounds
followed.
Hopefully not to the theme of 'The Crying Game'.
Again, this went flat on me. I'm not familiar with the title, sorry.
"How in the world did I deserve this?" she bemoaned an hour
later.
Nabiki: *snaps fingers* That's it... It's divine retribution for selling
those pictures of Akane to Kuno-chan!
Nah, it's Urd's sweet revenge against her for selling pictures of her without
a share of the profits, and shacking up Ranma and Akane as an added bonus
too! :)
All in all, a highly entertaining read. As for continuing... Well, it works
wuite well on it's own, but there are some other... situations I'd love
to
see the lot of them in. ^_^
It appears to sit well alone on its own to me, but there's some ideas
that I just _want_ to write out. But meanwhile, I'm not certain if I
can spare some of my energy into turning this into a mini-series.
For now, it'll sit on the back-burner for a while as I think the matters
over.
Namely, school. Bwahahaha! ^_^
Rest assured that I have couple of ideas in store for them both when
they visit school. :)
The slightly revised version should hit FFML in a day or two.
Anyhow, ttyl!
Kyle...
------------------------------------------
"Tyd, you need a smaller .sig. :-)"
- Gary Kleppe, FFiRC
Don't you ever consider following the suggestion? :)
Again, thanks for the C&C. It was throughly entraining for me!
DA/R
Dark Alpha
---AlphSailor@aol.com
---http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Bay/7233/