The morning rays, coupled with the light breeze, were just perfect
and she couldn't help but smile, even if it was for no reason at all.
were just perfect, and she couldn't
They reached the front of the store. Ukyou guided him in and sat
him down on a stool by the counter. She automatically went behind the
grill and started preparing ingredients, which was okay for Ryouga since
running away from archers on horses can make one pretty tired and
hungry.
:D I'll bet!
Ryouga slumped on the counter and watched Ukyou as she gracefully
did her magic on the grill. Ryouga could sit there all day watching
her,
if not for the licking on his big toe.
The first sentence is past tense, while the second is present. If you
want the second one to be past tense, as well, change it to 'Ryouga could
have sat there ...'
"It seems that Shampoo confessed her love to Mousse...."
O_O; Apparently, I should have read the beginnings of this fic...
"I think she's a model or something. I've seen her somewhere
before. I wonder why would anybody give me these kinds of pictures."
Maybe 'I wonder why anybody would' instead?
And then it dawned on her.
Hey, who is it?? <:}
"Here take a look."
"Here--take a look."
OR
"Here, take a look."
Mmm, I think I liked Biopsy 2 of 3 better, though this is also likable.
^_^ (That's just my opinion, though.)
Nibun