July 4th: A fine day to do C&C
re: [FFML] [Tenchi] Ryoko's Choice: Tenchi's Choice
Date: Thu, 29 Jun 2000 01:50:39 -0400
From: Matthew Lewis <maybeso@home.com>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Comments: Interesting piece. The prose was a little hard to
decipher at points, and might stand a rewrite to clear up
certain points especially during the court scene. Overall, a
different take on Tenchi's character, not entirely unprecedented
in Tenchi's actions during the various series.
[FFML] [fanfic/Dirty Pair] Digital River, Tributary
Three: Jump the Fence
Date: Wed, 21 Jun 2000 20:13:01 -1000
From: "Rob @ Studio YOGIPIGS" <rob@yogipigs.org>
Organization: Studio YOGIPIGS (http://www.yogipigs.org)
To: "FFML" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Comments: I've been waiting for another part of the series to
come out. I enjoyed the previous parts, for the combination of
their authentic tone and interesting take on the characters.
THis part continues that trend with a cute combination of the
TV/Movie continuity and the newer OAVs which was developed in
the previous part. Prose is appropriate, perhaps a bit on the
sparse side though. Plotting is excellent, the pace fast enough
to carry the feeling of the series, and the background is
developed further. Very good work.
[FFML] [FFML][BGC][2090] Forgotten Tales II -
Priss's Tale
Date: Mon, 3 Jul 2000 20:44:05 +0100
From: "Alex Gray" <hitomi@ndirect.co.uk>
Organization: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Subway/7630
To: "ffml" <ffml@fanfic.com>
CC: "Alex Gray" <hitomi@ndirect.co.uk
Comments: Good to see another addition to the 2090 universe.
<It was the year 7614 and the glorious space bound empire that
Man
had always dreamed of had been and gone.>
Awkward. Perhaps: ...year 7617 and the glorious space empire
that man had built was gone... or something similar. A rather
gritty intro.
<Alone. It was a word that Priss had had rather a lot of
experience
with, even before the Darkness. It was almost as if being alone
was a
natural state for her. All those she had ever loved had either
been
taken from her forcefully or Priss herself had driven them away.
She
was an island, self contained, and although she might share
herself
with others from time to time being alone was who she was.>
A fair, if harsh interpretation of Priss's character.
< "You're Playing with me!" Priss growled.
"Playing? No. Teasing? Yes.">
Cute interplay between divine and mundane characters here. Would
Priss really get that out of sorts over Samanaimethea's
appearance?
<** End of Priss's Story.>
Interesting bit of plotting. I can't wait to see how the rest of
the story shapes up. That part about Leviathan was especially
promising...
[FFML] [Spamfic][Pinky and the Brain/Eva] Of Mice and
Angels
Date: Tue, 4 Jul 2000 17:59:58 EDT
From: RaeMowse@aol.com
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Comments: Ever since "Great Minds" I've felt a strange
obligation to read Pinky and the Brain crossovers. I haven't
been disappointed yet, and this cute little story is no
exception. However, I tend to dislike script format, which hurt
this story a little. The primary gags were appropriate and I
chuckled (meh heh heh) at most of them. Nice work (gears are
turning in my head for further P&B/Eva crossovers, if you don't
mind me playing with your idea).