I am too freakin' tired to write anything clever for the opening and
I don't want to make excuses, so let's begin. Excuse me for the
somewhat clipped way the reviews will come ou, and the sometimes
acidic tone to them. I'm dog tired. And I am in pain. And I'll be seding this
out without rereading it, against my own policy, since this is way too late.
Disclaimer:
All opinions are my own. No one else was involved in the decision for
the reviews found in this post.
The SLR reviewer for the week is: Elsa Bibat
The FFML Synopses List
======================
For the week of: June 16, 2000
Moderator on Duty: Sean Connor
Synopses Submitted: 21 [1 rejected]
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[Evangelion]
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Title: Ascent of the Fallen
Chapter: Part Four
Series: Evangelion
Genre: action, drama, suspense, some WAFF
Author: Sparky Clarkson
Email: sparkster@writeme.com
Homepage: http://members.tripood.com/Sage_Ohlmin/evafic.htm
Archived At: http://members.tripod.com/Sage_Ohlmin/ascent/ascent.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 17, 2000
Series Summary:
In the darkest hour, a light from heaven brings new hope. Mankind's
once -bleak future now offers a glimmer of promise. Yet humanity's
protectors must battle not only the angels from above, but also dark
forces from within. An ancient evil seeks to use their greatest hope
as its key to power. Unless the Evangelion pilots can use their own
inner strength to defeat the overwhelming odds, all will be
destroyed. Can mankind survive the ascent of the fallen?
Episode Summary:
The foes from heaven return in the form of Jophiel. Shinji and Asuka
grow closer as Shinji finally expresses some of his pain. Ristuko
finds an unexpected savior, and Rei seems to need one.
Review:
More good stuff. Very well-written and an excellent story is shaping up.
I'm ranking this up with E.L. Toh's fic as one of the better Eva-cont. fics
ever written.
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Title: common humanity
Series: Evangelion
Genre: Continuation
Author: Adrian Forest
Email: dalziel_86@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/fanfic.htm
Archived At: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/common.txt
Date Sent to FFML: June 19, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 11731
Size: 14K
Summary:
After the events of Episode 24, Shinji's world crumbles. But events
conspire to show him that there is more to life than this.
Review:
Incredibly touching and very evocative. This when I expected crap.
Keep up the good work.
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Title: EVA 2055
Chapter: Prologue (Ep 0.1) "Karen's Last"
Series: Evangelion
Genre: Cyberpunk, Divergent Continuity,
Author: Adrian Forest
Email: dalziel_86@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/
Archived At: soon to be at: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/index2.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 14, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 11558
Size: 8K
Series Summary:
The year is 2055. Third Impact never happened, reason unknown. In the
recently completed Tokyo-5, corporate warfare is about to erupt in the
shadows of the monolithic nanotech buildings. The UN's global army,
the UNAERG, has just commissioned a new division: First EVA Cadre. But
why? Why are the new pilots fourteen? What exactly *is* FAUST? And
why has Asuka Langley Sohryu been resurrected?
Episode Summary:
Tracey Engstrom makes a promise to her father, on the eve of events
which will ignite a corporate war.
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Title: EVA 2055
Chapter: Episode 1.0, Exodus 0:1 "Objects At Rest"
Series: Evangelion
Genre: Cyberpunk, Divergent Continuity
Author: Adrian Forest
Email: dalziel_86@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/fanfic.htm
Archived At: http://www.geocities.com/dalziel_86/ep1.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 19, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 11744
Size: 40K
Series Summary:
The year is 2055. In the forest of nanotech monolith buildings that is
Tokyo-5, a corporate war is brewing. The UN's global army, the UNAERG,
has just inducted the first three teenage pilots into its newest
division: First EVA Cadre. College student Aki Shirato, just months
short of graduation, is conscripted into First EVA as a replacement
for the head of the tech division. But no-one's telling her anything,
least of all the man she's replacing. Major Ruri Matsushira, combat
commander of First EVA, is discovering that her adolescent charges may
not be all they seem. The pilot of EVA-14, Hitomi Miyamura, is
struggling with her life outside the EVA, while her suspicions about
the EVA itself grow. And Shinji Ikari, now an old man, has just
received a visitor who really shouldn't exist.
Episode Summary:
A resurrection, an induction, a reunion and a pep talk.
Review:
A rewrite for the EVA 2055 series. Better than the original in style and
prose, as well as clearer plotting. But you made Shinji a wimp again.
I want him to be somewhat like his father with a touch of the rat-bastardiness
and the cynicism. Keep up the good work.
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Title: A New World For Shinji & Asuka
Chapter: 7
Series: Evangelion
Genre: WAFF, Romance
Author: Jonathan "Katarn" Gaters
Email: KatarnX2B@NetZero.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/katarnx2b_8/
Date Sent to FFML: 6/5/00
Size: 83kb
Series Summary:
Asuka and Shinji realize their feelings for each other. As the war
with the Angels intensifis, will they be able to stay together?
Episode Summary:
An Introduction to my writing style, and basically the start of my
plot arch. I'm taking over for A1-I-Bus (he stopped writing ;_;), I
don't know where he was heading with the story, but I'm going all the
way to TI with it. If all the characters make it there alive or not,
you'll just have to see. ^_^
Review:
I am in pain. Not that bad, just an electric feel as my synapses
feedback along the nerves of my entire nervous system.
And that is my comment.
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Title: Now I Lay Me...
Chapter: 0 (Prolouge)
Series: Evangelion
Genre: WAFF, Romance, Introspection
Author: Jonathan "Katarn" Gaters
Email: KatarnX2B@NetZero.Net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/katarnx2b_8/
Date Sent to FFML: 6/8/00
Size: 7kb
Series Summary:
An introspective look at the relationship between Rei and Gendo
Episode Summary:
A warning to show the basic theme of the series. It's short,
technically a spamfic, and doesn't have much plot to it. Nothing like
what the rest of the series will be like.
Review:
I am in pain. Again. Your style wasn't that bad. Your prose was passable.
But still I am in pain. _Pain_. Hope to whoever up there that the rest of
the series is better.
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[Original]
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Title: It's A Rainy Day, Sunshine Girl
Chapter: Episode 03 - The Sleep Of No Dreaming
Series: Original
Genre: Romantic Comedy
Author: Matthew Johnston
Email: caravan@cafe-pierrot.net
Homepage: http://www.cafe-pierrot.net/
Date Sent to FFML: June 14, 2000
Size: 45K
Series Summary:
Kenji Terada had writer's block. When his teacher offered him a
solution, he tried it immediately. Only, his teacher never told him
what really happens after you wake up...
Episode Summary:
Kenji gets an eyeful, Caravan gets some clothes, Ichiro gets a good
laugh, and Tanako gets go-go boots. All this, plus a Renaissance Fair!
Review:
Very nice. A nice repost of one of the fics I lost in Melchior's little impromptu
crash. A highly recommended fic. So go read it, you idiot!
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[Ranma 1/2]
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Title: An Awakening of Demons
Chapter: 11
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Action/Thriller
Author: Kagami
Email: kagami@jeack.com.au
Homepage: http://www.csus.edu/indiv/s/seifertv/kagami/
Date Sent to FFML: Thu, 15 Jun 2000
Size: 46kb
Series Summary:
Add one demon-stained heritage, and stir. Mix in one
vengeance-inclined half-sister, and bring to a quick boil. Toss in a
dash of fast-and-furious-paced battles to simmer and season. An
Awakening of Demons - a fun-filled recipe of disaster.
Episode Summary:
With Nodoka still safely trapped in a prison of Ranma's making, and
Shukumaru still on the loose and keen to revenge herself on Ranma, the
Nerima gang is forced to seek allies of their own. On Seiryu's Isle
and on a bitter ice-bound peak above Nagano, the penultimate battles
to the second clash between Ranma and Shukumaru occur.
Review:
One of the few lights in the Ranma 1/2 scene for me, this is another
highly recommended fic. Another must read. So read it!
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Title: Curious Genma, the curious martial artist
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Comedy
Author: Carrotglace
Email: Carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage: Http://www.geocites.com/misatira/
Date Sent to FFML: 06/12/00
Summary:
A humorous explination for Genma's actions during Ranma 1/2
Review:
Funny. Though it caused me pain, it was still funny.
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Title: Juliette's Sonatta
Chapter: 2a
Series: Ranma 1/2 / Vampire Chronicles
Genre: Crossover
Author:Jiro Maeda
Email: hiryuu@edsamail.com.ph
Date Sent to FFML: 06/16/2000
Size: 68kb
Series Summary:
Ranma becomes immortal, how will this affect Nerima?
Episode Summary:
Ranma finally departs Nerima and a secret about his physiology is
revealed
Review:
You know one of the few things that reflexively cause me pain? Like
in vampire folklore, how the cross really, really ruins a vampire's night?
Bad formatting.
I am in pain, young man. If you ever manage to straighten this crap out
for me to read it without howling about "the pain", I may manage to give it
a positive review. Emphasis on "may".
And Ranma is starting to slowly smell like garlic.
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Title: Permanent part 30
Series: Ranma
Genre: Comedy/action
Author: Carrotglace
Email: Carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage: Http://www.geocities.com
Date Sent to FFML: 06/12/00
Series Summary:
Jusenkyo curses are permanent. Ranma Saotome has chosen to turn to
learning magic in order to find a cure for herself. She returns home
and things start to spin out of control, beyond anything she could
have imagined. Demons, crazed magical girls, perverted martial
artists, even shoddy sorcerers plauge her life as she attempts to
survive the maddness in Nerima long enough to cure herself...
Episode Summary:
Things finally start to come together as Akane continues to fight the
devil hunters that plauge her at night. Also, Ranma is coming closer
to discovering the truth about her friend, but some mysterious force
is trying to stop her and may succeed...
Review:
A very nice little fic where I can at least like Ranma 1/2 a little. Carrotglace
knows how to keep things somewhat interesting for me. How about
the next chapter of Teacher? ^_^
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Title: Second Chances Chapter 18
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Start Over
Author: Lord Archive
Email: archive@mich.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Fuji/9061/anime.html
Date Sent to FFML: 6-13
Size: 13K
Series Summary:
Akanes makes a wish after the death of Ranma and ends up returning to
the day she met him. This time she plans not to repeat any of her
mistakes. (Just make a bunch of new ones.)
Episode Summary:
First kiss, martial arts skating competition, and Shampoo. Is there
anything more that needs to be said?
Review:
Nothing except that I still like this series, even if it is Ranma. Lord Archive
really knows how to keep a long-time fan of his work feel loved. A must
read for fans of the Archive's work.
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Title: Virus
Series: Ranma 1/2, Tenchi Muyou!
Genre: Comedy, Crossover
Author: Chris Jones
Email: guilty@furinkan.net
Homepage: http://www.furinkan.net
Archived At: http://www.furinkan.net/fanfic/
Date Sent to FFML: June 18, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 11723
Size: 56k
Summary:
Tenchi accidentally infects Ranma with a Washuu-created virus. The
virus is 'altered' by Ranma's curse with the obvious effect. Within
days, the entire world is infected.
Review:
Very funny. Nice and funny. And it reading it again made the on-list
discussion of the tech involved that followed shortly after sound
really stupid.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Battletech]
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Title: Battletech: The Saotome Gambit Part 14
Series: Ranma 1/2 - Battletech
Genre: Fusion
Author: J. Austin Wilde
Email: wildeman@psn.net
Homepage: http://www.psn.net/~wildeman
Archived At: http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/TSG-14.txt
Date Sent to FFML: 16 June 2000
Size: 99K
Series Summary:
A Ranma 1/2 - Battletech fusion pitting the might of the Furinkan
Combine, the League of Five Nails, and the Jusenkyo Commonwealth
against the beleaguered Nerima Confederation. The only hope for the
Tendo family lies in the hands of two Dispossessed mechwarriors named
Saotome.
Episode Summary:
Kasumi battles the Furinkan Combine on the frigid moon of Oni. Kodachi
and Shampoo make their escapes from their respective captors. Cologne
contemplates the future of her reign, and Hikaru Gosunkugi becomes the
Guest of Honor at a luau thrown by Combine Shogun Kuno on the planet
New Hawaii.
Review:
If you haven't read this, send me an e-mail. I will have my death squads
prepped and ready to shove this down your throat. So read it. At least that
way you'll enjoy it.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Robotech]
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Title: Silent Battles
Segment: Chapter 4: Countdown
Series: Ranma 1/2 / Robotech
Genre: Crossover
Author: Latin_D
Email: latin_d@uol.com.ar
Archived at:
http://lwf58.tripod.com/fan_fiction/latin_d/
http://tannim.freehosting.net/Silent_Battles/Silent.html
Date Sent to FFML: 06/14/2000
Size: 36 KB
Series Summary:
In an alternate reality, Ranma and Akane are present in Macross when
the SDF-1 first comes to Earth. Back in Nerima, Akane feeds Ranma with
one of her most special recipes, and he suffers the consequences. Some
time later, Akane dies at the hands of Saffron. Hunted by memories,
Ranma leaves Nerima trying to leave that part of his life
behind. Years later, he decides to return to the SDF-1 to cut off one
of the last links to Akane. The Launch Day arrives, and he's there to
witness the important event. When the Zentraedi arrive and start
sending pods, you just KNOW things will get ugly.
Segment Summary:
Ranma finally meets Roy, the famous fighter jock of the RDF. Rick and
Ranma share a cozy moment inside a Veritech, and join forces against
an old sourpuss soon after. Uncle Henry finally makes his appearance,
and we can tell Ranma is surprised when he discovers he's the Captain
of the SDF-1. The fold system's activated, and the SDF-1 leaves the
Earth--along with Ranma.
Review:
You know, for some strange reason, I like this. The prose is clunky but the premise
keeps me interested. And it's a Robotech fic. I love Robotech.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Rurouni Kenshin]
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Title: Rurouni Ranma part 11
Series: Ranma/Rurouni Kenshin
Genre: Action/comedy
Author: Carrotglace
Email: Carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage: Http://www.geocites.com/misatira
Date Sent to FFML: 06/14/00
Summary:
Saito shows up and meets Ryouga. More war stories from Ranma...
Review:
I still somewhat mildly dislike this. But it's fresh and I like fresh. Dialogue
is clunky and as always your formatting stings my sensibilities, but all in all,
pretty nice package.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Sailor Moon]
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Title: Honor and Love
Chapter: 9 - A Flash of Silver
Series: Ranma/SM
Genre: Crossover
Author: Kevin D. Hammel
Email: khammel@mail.geocities.com
Homepage: http://www.anime.sobhrach.com/~khammel/
Date Sent to FFML: June 14, 2000
Archive Number: 11588
Size: 35 KB
Series Summary:
Genma was killed at Jusenkyo. Nodoka makes Ranma go to school as a
girl, "Saotome Kikuko" so he can appreciate them better. The Tendou
sisters, Naru, Ranma, Shampoo , and Ukyou are Neo Senshi.
Episode Summary:
A new character enters the scene, the Silver Rose. Ranma tires of his
role as Kikuko. In a battle, the Silver Rose appears and rescues
Callisto (Naru) who is torn between her feelings for him and Umino.
Review:
You know, I really, really felt pain, when I read this. The summary alone caused
that.
Now to the fic itself.
The fic wasn't all that bad. Pretty nice considering there were large bursts of intermittent
pain as I read it. Readable and good story. But it still caused me pain. But that's just me.
So if anyone's curious, don't let the summary frighten you away.
And Mr. Hammel, could you try to make a less painful summary? @_@;;;;;;
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[Robotech]
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Title: FOX Squadron
Chapter: 3
Series: ROBOTECH
Genre: Adventure
Author: G.L. Sandborn
Email: sandborn@microlink.net
Homepage: www.microlink.net/~sandborn
Date Sent to FFML: June 17, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 11705
Size: 68k
Series Summary:
This series takes place beteen the time the SDF-3 (along with Rick
Hunter and Lisa Hayes) has departed for the homeworld of the Robotech
Masters and the rise of the Southern Cross. The world government is
in shambles, militaristic city-states are popping up all over, and
surviving Zentraedi are on both sides. The remaining RDF forces are
all that stand between order and chaos. This is the story of one
squadron. A most unusual squadron, made up of young Lakota women,
loyal Zentraedi females, and assorted outcasts stuck in the worst
sector possible.
Episode Summary:
Katherine and Samantha recruit a couple more members. Colonel Stuart
gets a strange visitor that wants to join his squadron. The Fox
sisters learn the truth about Colonel Stuart. Katherine confronts the
Colonel and finds out more than she wanted. Against his wishes,
Colonel Stuart gets permanent command of the squadron.
Review:
Very nice. Another Elsa-Bibat-if-you-haven't-read-it-my-death-squads-will-
shove-it-down-your-throat fic. So read it already or you'll be feeling paper
go down your throat.
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[Sailor Moon / Gen13]
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Title: Sailor Moon/Gen13: Moonlight Heroes
Episode: 7
Series: Sailor Moon/Gen13
Genre: Crossover
Author: Skyrocket
Email: skyrocket35@hotmail.com
Archived at: http://www.fanfiction.net
Date Sent to FFML: 6/17/00
Series Summary:
Anime's favorite magical girls met comic's hippest teens. A call from
the past of John Lynch has brought the Gen13 kids to Japan. All they
want is a nice relaxing vacation. But unbeknownst to them, their
arrival in Tokyo has garnered the attention of the
Negaverse. Meanwhile, Raye is having bad dreams - dreams that end in
the death of the Sailor Scouts.
Episode Summary:
The final battle is here! Gen13 and the Sailor Scouts face off against
Gen13's mentor, John Lynch, who has been changed into a youma by
Malachite. Normal youma are bad enough, but will two teams of heroes
be enough to beat one made from a superhuman? It had better be because
the lives of everyone in Tokyo and the fate of the Silver Imperium
Crystal are hanging in the balance.
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Title: Sailor Moon/Gen13: Moonlight Heroes
Episode: 8
Series: Sailor Moon/Gen13
Genre: Crossover
Author: Skyrocket
Email: skyrocket35@hotmail.com
Archived at: http://www.fanfiction.net
Date Sent to FFML: 6/17/00
Series Summary:
Anime's favorite magical girls met comic's hippest teens. A call from
the past of John Lynch has brought the Gen13 kids to Japan. All they
want is a nice relaxing vacation. But unbeknownst to them, their
arrival in Tokyo has garnered the attention of the
Negaverse. Meanwhile, Raye is having bad dreams - dreams that end in
the death of the Sailor Scouts.
Episode Summary:
The battle is over. Now Gen13 and the Sailor Scouts must deal with the
aftermath and prepare to say goodbye to each other.
Review:
You know, as I said in an earlier review of this fic, this fic really didn't hit off
with me. Right now, in my present condition of grouchy bitch, it causes me
a lot of pain. Tons of it. But the writing is good and is looking to get better
as Skyrocket seems to be getting the hang of it. So if you like Gen 13
(I don't) and the NA dubnames and that come with it (I don't), you maybe
able to get away from this fic with a pleasant sensation, rather than my
howling torment.
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[Slayers]
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Title: The Secret Games Chapter: Episode 3: In the Beginning...
Series: Slayers
Genre: semi-serious
Author: Talia Shimae aka Murasakikaze
Email: TaliaShimae@juno.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Villa/9072/Fanfic.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 14, 2000
Size: 70kb
Series Summary:
Naria finds that not only is her family life going downhill, so is her
friend's life. It seems that Xellas Metallium and Deep Sea Dolphin
have finally collaborated on something... unfortunely, it's all about
revenge. Lina and Co. must survive three tests before being allowed
to live and, of course, they are divided into teams...with the losing
team giving up their lives.
Chapter Summary:
Lina and the others return to the mainland only to find a terrible
plague has riddled the city. They stay to try and help, but when they
get to the hospital they're confronted by first Mirai then Deep Sea
Dolphin. Things get even more complicated when Zelgadis and Mira-chan
catch the plague and the gang finds Imako and Kako also affected. The
other gods show up to help, but what's this about Kojiro forgetting
what the cure was?
Review:
My wrists hurt and ached, along with my eyes, as I read this fic so pardon.
This fic is not exactly the best. Average would be my guess. But since it's
Slayers and there aren't many Slayers fics around, this fic was pretty nice,
though the author tried to force a few things. Clunky but getting smoother.
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My head hurts. I'm sending this off. Any responses to requests for private
and indepth C&C from both old friends and newbies that are currently piled
up in my Inbox, please wait awhile as my body settles down and stops hurting.
Wait a week. If I haven't responded, I'm either still in pain or have gone to a
better place, preferably, the Caribbean. ^_^