Tactically, there was no reason for Bell to stay after she reached Skuld. A
wind-assisted jump would get them both out of reach of the monsters. Can you
think of a better reason for making Bell stay?

I commend you for a very original take on Skuld's reaction to seeing the
rides in an amusement park. If you can keep writting up things like that,
you may have a chance.

You DO have a plot besides throwing all the characters together and showing
off their powers right?



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