I would like to say that this is rather interesting Alternative Ranma1/2
story. I missed the first chapter so I'm not sure what's going on but from
reading this chapter I bascially get the gist of the story. It's actually
pretty well done, but might not get the popular response from all the fans
who believe that Ranma is the best and also those people who really don't
like or at least have slight tendency to not like Akane. However this fic
was pretty good and I know that some people give advices as to what to do and
what not to do to improve your fic, and they actually tell you what to cut
and what to leave as it is, I think you should think really hard about that.
This is your fic and it shows your creativity. It shows what you can do what
and what you've written. Of course if there is a grammer mistake or spelling
error, they can tell you to change it. If there was parts where it's really
hard to understand than they can tell you to change it. However, if they
lack the patient or the vision to wait couple of paragraph in order to get
the answer to question that you raised or they lack the creative vision to
see where you are heading with it and tell you to change to match their way,
don't. It's your fic and don't listen to it. Also, I've noticed people
actually critize you for using too many of original story line and than the
next line they tell you that the story is not really with the original
storyline. Tell them to make up their mind. Whether you use the original
storyline or not, it's your usage of how you do it that's important and not
how many times you use it. I've noticed that your fight scenes are pretty
interesting, it's like you want to go more with it but really can't because
of lack of words to use. Keep it that way and make people see it in their
head. Well, that's all I have to say about that.