Also if you want to preread for this series, let me know, and I'll put you
on a list.

#sounds like a deal. Though I warn you I'm better at spotting the plot holes then doing grammer and spelling.

Upon Raiden's initial appearance, and learning who he was and that he was angry, Thor had intended to apologize and explain that no insult had been intended. But Raiden's arrogant boasts and slurs against her overrode that impulse. How dare he call her conceited! Just because she was three times the god of thunder Raiden could ever hope to be was no reason for him to behave in such an offensive manner.

#Raiden no Baka nice to see Akane dominating Thor just as much as it's the other way around.#

Well, that and her dalliances with Kitsune, whom Raiden fancied. But it wasn't Thor's fault that her godly form was so irresistibleto the self-proclaimed Goddess of Foxes.

#But obviously not proclaimed loudly enough to show up in any of the text books. I know this is Marvel style mythology so it doesn't matter but here's a sugestion for an *actual* possibility. The female member of the two foxes who served Inari the rice god (I'm sure she's well over 1000 so that she could easily do the nasty with Thor in human form) was Akumachi#

Thor recoiled at that memory. Not the specifics --thankfully those seemed to have been lost-- but there was one disturbing fact that was inescapable Kitsune had most definitely been female. Very foxlike, but also definitively female.

#These scenes where Thor's memories don't add up are priceless. I can't wait for the horrifying scene when Akane actually decides to read up on Norse mythology ^-^#

Raiden sneered. "What you are is an overbearing, arrogant self-centered, egotistical, womanizing meddler that has challenged me for the last time."

#Of course the whole problem with this scene is probably that Raiden doesn't seem to realize there is something wrong with this picture as well#

"Finished by you? Mayhap when icicles ornament Surtur's fiery realm."

#heh#

"Do not mistake foolishness for bravery, nor wisdom for cowardice." Thor brought Mjournir into the pavement

#I'm sure everyone and his dog has pointed this one out to you so I won't belabor it#


The instant the head of the shaft made contact with the pavement, it exploded in fury, knocking the sorcerer off his feet and disrupting his spell. Xellos was quick to recover as he shot to his feet, a look of naked rage upon his features. "Who dares interfere with me?"

#From what little I know of Xellos in slayers it might work better for Xellos to stop the arrow in mid air with hardly a glance. THe explosion does just as much damage but it's just enough to distract him. THen have him acknowlege it almost as a left handed complement. something to the effect of "Ah, you distracted me. Impressive. Please, tell me your name before I dispose of you."#


"So you're the Mighty Ulik?" Bucky said as she prepared herself for a
fight.
"No. He isn't." Surprisingly, that came from Xellos, who waved a hand, banishing the glowing portal. He moved in front of the troll, face
twitching. "Excuse me, but who in Hela's deathly realm are you and where's Ulik?"
"Ulik was busy, so he asked me to fill in for him." The troll beat his fist
proudly against his chest. "My name is Ulos, The Pretty Damn Powerful. I'm Ulik's little brother."

#Don't you just hate non union labor?#


"You're a woman!" Raiden gasped as the staff's course was arrested directly above Thor's prone form.

#oops didnt see this bit never mind about one of the previous comments. #


Let's see for some reason. I was'nt able to get the rest of the Document on this Email account so I'll just finish with commenting on what else I remember. The bit with Sif is very good not just in the respect that it reveals Xellos's true identity. You have a potential for a very interesting sub plot if Thor/Akane meets Sif or visits Asgard. Partially because it makes for more of an expansion on how the ongoing headache of conflicting memories. And also It is interesting how you'll handle this since obviously you can't use the "There never really was a Donald Blake" plot device that Marvel fell back on.
Of the other bit's I liked. The thaughts of the Slayers gang being Asgardians is quite terrifying and as always the Captain Japan and his cute Panda sidekick scenes are fantastic. As well as Nabiki being true to form. So anyway finish the next chapter of your Dirty Pair story stat so you can get on with this. Looking forward to it and talk to you later.
                                  Bill Morse
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