Gary Ee wrote:
This might feel a little rushed. Not sure, myself. If so, I apologize
for
it.
Also if you want to preread for this series, let me know, and I'll put
you
on a list.
Well, I was originally a pre-reader for this series so I might as well try
to take up that role once again.
Ack! That's what happens when you misplace your list. Though in hindsight I
think I made mention of the people that preread at the end of the old
chapters I had and could have used that.
Thor and Raiden Present:
Lessons on Why It's Bad to Play With Electricity
Guest Lecturer: Ataru Moroboshi.
Heh. He would be a good authority.
gathered around his hands while more electricity flowed from his eyes, a
suggestion: a sure sign that he was losing what tenuous control he had
left
over his anger.
Ah yes. That was a line I had particular trouble with.
sign of his anger and his inability to fully control that emotion. "I
warned you never to set foot upon this island again, yet you have
brazenly
suggestion: replace "this" with "my". It makes Raiden sound a lot more
possessive.
Agree. Better that way.
"But I'm not a pervert!" Thor shouted to herself.
That's what she thinks. Wait till Thor's lusty nature kicks in and we'll
see
what she says about that.
True. You've already seen little hints of it, although Akane is aware of
the unusual feelings and reactions.
An uru mallet flew forth from the wreckage of the car, sailing through
the
air leaving a trail of energy as its head glowed a dull orange full of
power. There was the sound of thunder as the hammer struck Raiden full
in
the chest, driving him back into the wall of a nearby store and through
it.
That's why you shoulder be nice to big, blonde goddesses with huge
hammers.
I wonder if Akane will rename Mjolnir as "Baka-Smiter"?
Nah. Mjolnir's too classy in its true form. She might dub that the name of
the wooden stick form of it though.
"Only if there are other gods from thy pantheon about to join thy side."
Like Amatersu and Sansoo-wo. Although in Thor's case Uzume or Benten
should
be more useful.
Japanese deities are not my strong point. I'll take your word on it.
"Do not mistake foolishness for bravery, nor wisdom for cowardice." Thor
Or you could have Thor show an uncharacteristic moment of insight by
quoting, "the mountain never learned to step aside."
Okay.
Cloaked in shadows nearby, Xellos found himself agreeing with the
Goddess
of Thunder. It had been his dearest hope that Raiden, whom he had warned
of
Thor's presence through an anonymous document delivered to his castle in
Document? I never know that Raiden had an office. Who's his secretary?
From: Unknown@itsasecret.com
Now that's appropriate
To: Raiden@kami.heaven.immortals.com
Subject: Travesty.
Your divine personage might find it interesting to know that the foul
Norse
God of Thunder has once-again stepped onto our lands in a clear challenge
of
thine might.
Hehehehe. Very nice. Have since changed 'document' to message, since the
former is awkward.
the realm above, would prove more than sufficient to finish off Thor.
After
The diversion distracted Thor and allowed Raiden a chance to recover.
Seeing the opportunity before him, Raiden shifted the godly energy
within
his body, causing a blue aura to form around him once again. Mentally
forcing the energy from him, Raiden shot forward and into the air,
defying
gravity as his body flew parallel with the ground like a living shaft of
lightening,
sp: lightning.
Doesn't this move remind you of M Bison's Psycho Crusher? Looks like
Thunder
Toes been taking Street Fighter Lessons.
Just a few. :)
Xellos' hand began to give off a yellow glow as he prepared a
particularly
vicious spell that would cause Thor's body to be wracked with intense
pain
for several moments, when an arrow struck the ground in front of him.
The
instant the head of the shaft made contact with the pavement, it
exploded
in fury, knocking the sorcerer off his feet and disrupting his spell.
Xellos was quick to recover as he shot to his feet, a look of naked rage
upon his features. "Who dares interfere with me?"
Never seen Xellos angry before.
Chance to off his half-brother slipping through his fingers. He's got more
at stake here than in The Slayers because it's personal.
Just as Xellos was about to unleash the bolt, a large circular disk
crashed
into his wrist, nearly breaking it and causing the blast to fly up into
the
rainy skies. Xellos looked in the direction the weapon had come from.
"Now
who dares interfere?!"
"Interfering in a fair fight is evil. For love and justice, I'm the
sailor-suited warrior Sailor Moon. In the name of the Moon, I will punish
you!"
Heh.
In response, Ulos pulled out a set of huge metal knuckles from a pocket
on
his vest. He put them on, then beat them together, producing a shower of
sparks and a resounding ring that was loud enough to be heard over the
peals of thunder. "Would you like them dismembered, pulverized, or torn
in
half?"
Somehow, I was hoping for Tolkien's Balrog. Any chance for a cameo?
Don't remember it since it's been so long since I've read Tolkien. So nope,
no chance.
"Oh boy," Bucky moaned as she prepared herself for yet another titanic
battle against a huge and very powerful foe. And to make matters worse,
his
breath smelled ten times worse than the Hulk's.
Troll Secret Attack: Infernal Haliotosis!
The most lethal of the lot. :)
Xellos watched in disgust as the red-haired girl punched Ulos in the jaw
again. The battle was going poorly for the troll. He might have been
lighter and faster than his brother, but his speed was nothing compared
to
that of the mortal girl. She was bouncing around faster than a hungry
Volstagg looking for food, or Amelia on a sugar rush. And the few times
Ulos managed to get close enough to land a blow, the girl's shield would
block the blow, the piece of metal somehow withstanding the raw power
unleashed by the troll. So much for the Ulos, the Pretty Damn Powerful.
the Pretty Damn Powerful but also Rather Slow.
Nah. More like 'Just Not Fast Enough'
figured out what had happened and smiled inwardly. This was going to be
good. Shifting his vision back into its normal spectrum, he approached
the
girl with a slow but steady stride.
Uh oh. This is BAD.
Not really.
Sif's blade remained where it was. "Thou dost know the All Father's
edict
that none of the Realm might interfere in the current matter involving
Thor. Any who do would find themselves in direct violation of that order
and would be punished most severely. Even those that are considered of
royal blood, Lo-"
Loki is Xellos? Well, it fits.
Yep. I thought it worked out quite well. Both are shifty enough.
"One question."
"Which way is home?"
Nah. You're thinking of Ryouga.
There was true curiosity in Xellos' voice as he asked, "Why did you
choose
to interfere now and save Thor's life when he so unceremoniously dumped
you
without a second thought all those years ago? One would think you would
want to see the oaf get his comeuppance."
"He still owes me five bucks from bowling night."
That too. Thor's reputed to be quite the deadbeat, after all.
Xellos' gave a sad shake of his head, and for once seemed genuine in his
emotion. "Such ridiculous sentimentality. It pleases me that I have
never
fallen for this detrimental feeling others term love. It gets them into
far
more trouble than I ever could, even at my best." With that declaration,
Xellos turned back to the glowing gateway and vanished inside, the
portal
collapsing after him.
Hmm, Xellos/Loki falling for Nabiki....... Has potential, ne?
Nope. No more of Xell in this series. He's taking Sif's threat to heart.
Especially since she's serious, and he's having fun in the Linverse anyway.
so
without him laying a hand on her. The few times he came close with his
attacks, the damnable little gnat kept blocking it with her shield,
which
refused to give under his blows. What was the thing made of anyway?
Akane's bento lunch, no da.
Heh
Ulos was shocked for nearly ten seconds before his body jerked hard
enough
to break the connection. He stood up, then stated boldly, "That didn't
hurt."
A thrown shield struck him right in the face.
"That did." Ulos's eyes crossed.
Heh, nice Kuno referance here.
Thanks
The redhead connected with a mighty roundhouse right to Ulos' jaw. Much
to
her amazement, the troll stood there. He laughed, then fell face forward
to
the ground.
Or maybe a Mikado Sanzenin.
Hadn't thought of that one, so it's unintentional.
"Yeah!" Bucky gave a 'V for Victory' sign with her fingers as she stood
over her fallen foe. A clean victory. It felt good. Real good,
especially
with how miserably her fight with the Hulk went. The five idiots in the
masks she could have taken if Nabiki hadn't...
Oops. Looks like Ranma forgot all about the rest of the troupe.
Heat of combat, don't you know.
they could renew their association once again. There was such a thing as
priorities, after all. But soon he would head out for that little island
in
the Pacific.
I wonder what he will make out of the newly female Thor? Hint, hint.
Read the letter and you can see the direction he's been pointed towards.
Whether or not that's going to happen will remain to be seen. Although you
have to admit the potential is good. And you though Kunou was bad...
Thanks for all of the C+C. It's greatly appreciated.
D.B. Sommer