General C&C beforehand: I like this idea. Could get interesting later on, too,
as Akane's faith gets tested when Shampoo and Kodachi (weren't they the first
two to show up? I'm a bit rusty on the timeline) go for him. Everyone in
school is going to be wondering just why she's acting so "not-Akane-like"
to this guy when she still pounds the Morning Hentai Horde flat
(This being Nerima, the obvious hypothesis that maybe it's because he
doesn't want to beat her up in order to force her to date him will be
rejected before it's even fully formed), and she might even get realistic
about Ryo-- Saay.
Cursed.
Mighty warrior.
Life on the road.
... Sound familiar?
There's a thought...
He doesn't qualify, though...
After all, he doesn't have all the enemies or women after him.
What's more, there is nothing to say that Ryoga would ever want Akane to
know about his curse. Thus:
Ranma
Cursed - Akane's clothes don't exactly fit him
Mighty warrior
Appears in the correct time frame
Chased by women
Hunted by men (and women)
Ryoga
Not cursed (as far as Akane is concerned)
Mighty warrior
May or may not appear in the correct time frame
Not chased by women
Not hunted by enemies
Seems to be relatively clear cut to me.
Anyways, I can't wait to read more. You *are* going to write more, neh?
Please suh. More?
Behind the desk was a man-- or rather a scarecrow with human
aspirations. His face was gaunt, with heavily shaded eyes. His hair
was thing and gray. He wore a pair of thin, gold-rimmed glasses and
a lab coat with a few buttons on it bearing what were either mystic
sigils or circuit diagrams-- she wasn't sure which.
"I can help you, Miss," the man said.
"Ah, isn't that 'Can I help you, Miss?' I mean..." Akane asked,
uncertainly.
I thought that was a nice line. Fortune teller that knows instead of
guessing...
"Pepsi, Coke, or Calpis?"
Calpis? Wazzat?
I think it's some type of iced drink.
The name is no worse than Pocari Sweat.
And alone, the man removed the 1000 yen and tossed it into the
wastebasket also. After all, that part was simply for appearances.
Heaven should be pleased with the tests so far, the routines were at
98.924 percent accuracy...
To the poor person that gets into that last 1.076 percent... oops.
Wouldn't he walk out and randomly drop it into the hat of a beggar,
so that instead of starving to death on the street he goes into
a cafe to buy a sandwich and a cup of coffee, thereby being just
in time to perform the Heimlich maneuver on the choking wealthy
businessman, who helps him get out of the gutter and back to his
old job as one of the top surgeons in Japan... Or something? This
*is* Heaven we're talking about. How much good *can* you do with
1000 yen in the right place?
For all we know, the wastebasket may be some kind of conduit to
process/re-process resources.
"So... won't you please stay a while?"
Ranma began to sweat.
Did I say Nabs is going to be curious? Ranma's probably wondering what
the HELL is going on here... :)
Why? He would be curious that a person is being nice to him (probably not
a common event during his training) but even with the bathroom event,
Akane really doesn't act unreasonably, does she?
Phuc Tram
Master Pivot - Wielder of the Coherent Light Bokken
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