Akane left, feeling disoriented. The experience had somehow
rattled her nerves.
Might want to work on the wording here... "somehow" suggests that there
wasn't any easily definable reason why her nerves were rattled. Perhaps,
"The experience had definiatly rattled her nerves." Maybe put in
something about it being even weirder than Kuno's speech?
I disagree - its a little old fashioned, but acceptable English.
He did say that he wrote it on his dad's computer.
Larry Meyer
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