A couple of thoughts.
1. Good premise, and I suspect you're gonna bring Tsubasa into this mess
somehow. However, I am surprised that Konastu bought into this thing so quickly.
It is his way of life, and I would spend a little bit of time showing how Ukyou
convinced Konastu to try to become a man.
2. And what does Ukyou get out of this? I'm not sure she'd be even doing
something like this...
3. Finally, dialogue seems a little stiff towards the end. In addition, wouldn't
Konastu have harder time not calling Ucchan as Miss Ukyou? Just a thought.
Otherwise, "Boy Nights" looks really good, perhaps the counterpart to "Girl
Days" that we've been looking for.
---Andrew