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From: "Douglas MacDougall" <dougmacd@dougmacd.net>
To: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Cc: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Monday, June 12, 2000 11:37 PM
Subject: [FFML] [FFML][C&C][Ranma][Lime] Cast A Second Line Into The Sea
The line between two seasons was drawn, on this day, in the
contrasting tones
between the slight chill of a breeze and the welcome warmth of the
sun. It was
a time of transition, caring little for official dates scribed on
manmade
calendars that decide for one when Winter would end and Spring would
begin.
cap: winter
cap: spring
Hmmm... This opening is too artsy-fartsy for my tastes
(to use a technical term). Especially the gratuitous use
of a subordinate clause in the middle of the first sentence.
Mebbe. Sets the generic mood nicely, tho.
I, for one, am a believer of "Cut-to-the-chase" style writing.
Then again, my favourite fic is still 'Ranma and Akane:a love story',
which has lots of heavy-duty imagery...
hmm...
Anything goes school of martial arts writing...
nah.
Out of long habit, he jumped at the sound of water splashing on the
ground,
but he smiled at the familiar but long-unheard shout of an annoyed
woman.
"Whaddya do THAT for?! Ba-a-ka!!"
RANMA: Baka is three syllables?
AKANE: Don't be a dummy.
RURI HOSHINO:Baka baka, minna baka.
Oh wait, I'm supposed to be C&Cing a fic, here... ^_^;;;
I don't mind.
A Ranma 1/2 FanFiction
cap: Fanfiction
(I wouldn't bring it up, but you use this
capitalization yourself everywhere else.)
By
D.F. Roeder
This and other fanfictions of mine can be found at
http://www.flash.net/~dfroeder/index.html.
RANMA: Isn't fanfiction like moose?
SHAMPOO: Mostly stupid?
MOUSSE: You're so cruel...
RANMA: Er, I meant, isn't fanfiction it's own plural?
Well, is the word 'fiction'?
Ranma backed up and smiled up at him, embarrassed. "Sorry, man. I, uh,
well...
Anyway, where the hell ya been, P-chan? What's it been? Jeez, I lost
count!"
Ranma sat down on the bench next to him, almost insignificant next to
his
size. "It's good ta see ya! Man!"
What is insignificant next to Ryoga's size: Ranma, or the bench?
RANMA: Hey, I'm not small!
AKANE: Would you please stop bragging? And stop sticking out
your chest. Who do you think you are, Sailor Jupiter?
This scene, also known as 'shameless plug' :p
Just rememberin' some stuff." She removed her hands and hastily
left the kitchen, absently rubbing the top of one breast.
Remembering the koi-rod, I take it. When he was talking about
Cologne, did he remember his short-lived love with her? ;)
RANMA:"Ah, Ryöga, Cologne... I would have them both!"
"Remember, Atsuko-chan," Ranma called. "Ryouga's like a rock. If he
gets his
hands on ya, you're done for. Keep your distance and keep your speed."
ATSUKO: Explain to me again exactly how it's dangerous
if a rock gets its hands on you? [rolls eyes]
"Hai, Papa-san!"
"GO, NUKU-NUKU!!" Ranko cheered.
Ranma looked at Ranko and shook his head. The girls had tried to
explain to him where the nickname came from. Something about an
old TV show. For some reason, though, he always blanked out when
trying to remember their description of the character.
By the way, the use of "Papa" sounds weird. I'm used to either
"Father," "Dad," or "Daddy." Papa is just... well... French.
Well, it's used in many series. Anime, that is. Weird people, Japanese.
"I just don't care anymore if I'm a man or a woman." She turned away,
biting
her lip, then sighed. "Do you think I'm... pretty?"
RYOGA: Old hag.
RANMA:"SIT!"
UKYO:*splat*
RANMA:"Not you!" *sigh*
BTW, where did that dog thing start, anyway?
"Yeah, I think I see what ya mean."
"When we got down to the nitty-gritty, trying to accommodate each
other, build
something together, it really fell apart. Other than the requirement
that her
husband defeat her champion pig, her grandfather catered to her every
whim. He
ruined her, really."
I just can't see this in Akari. She seemed willing to do anything;
make any sacrifice for Ryoga. After all, she loves pigs, but was
was going to learn to hate them for Ryoga's sake. Heck, she even
had Katsunishiki beat her up!
True. Sounds more like something Ukyo'd do if she married Ranma.
Their plans for future... don't exactly mix.
"Don't matter. Whether they like it or not, I'll probably be namin'
Atsuko as
heir to the combined ryuu; not whatever man she ends up marrying."
I don't know what ryuu means, but I nonetheless have the
sneaking suspicion that maybe it should be capitalized?
I think so too.
Ryuu, in this case, means a martial arts school. Also, 'tradition'
"I'm a woman today, so ladies, I'll be hittin' ya plenty when we
spar." She
was greeted with an assortment of chuckles and groans. Ranma smirked
at them,
and then turned her attention to the side.
Since when did Ranma differentiate between hitting girls when he was a
boy, and hitting them when he was a girl? He didn't hit girls because
he didn't think it was right. It didn't matter who was doing the
hitting...
When did Ranma hesitate hitting any girl - exept Akane
- when neccessary?
He's hit Shamps, Kodachi, Kiima etc...
[...]
"Oi! You developed a ki attack based on something other than
depression!"
Ranma splashed hot furo water at his friend. "What emotion?"
"Would you believe... calm?"
"EH?!?! Calm is NOT an emotion!"
Ryouga studied his fingernails for a moment. "It... can be, under the
right
circumstances."
This reader disagrees. ^_^
I can see calm lending an immunity to ki attacks (ala the Shishi
Hokodan), but not as a source of ki. Maybe he's just gotten to
the point where he doesn't need strong emotions to focus his ki.
Well, Ryoga's calm here, is hardly natural. Consider it a... stream of
emotions, in such a way, that he doesn't get caught in any of them.
pretty zen-'no-mind' thingy...
Ranma choked off a laugh, but Ryouga just grinned. "I can joke about
it now,
but then, it just made me worse. I started generating a LOT of
depression ki,
with some serious, good old Tendou-style anger ki in good measure."
What the heck is "depression ki" and "anger ki"? Those are emotions used
to generate ki (well, depression, anyway). They're not *types* of ki.
Are too! That's where there's so many puns in the manga!
Check the anime, there's a scene in the Shishihokodan episode, with
Ranma going:
"ki ga omoi ki ga omoi ki ga omoi..." eg, "Depression, depression,
depression..."
and he comes to conclusion
"...Omoi Ki!" eg. "Heavy Ki!"
Also, in the scene where Mint(or was it Lime, I constantly mix the
names) is
strangling Ryoga, and in near death, he gets very depressed. All the heavy
ki
makes him so heavy that the Musk's feet sink in the soil, and he comments
that he can't keep his hand up - this from a guy that can throw 50 ton
boulders around like Ryoga throws 2 ton boulders... ^.^
It's Ranma-physics. Deal.
"Ohayou, Himiko-chan."
"Ohayou, Otousama," she said deferentially.
Otokasama?
in the spirit of Oneniisama?
He put him in the hospital before? Wasn't that Asuza beating him on
the head? Or Ryoga pulling the ice flows together, squishing him?
Y'think Ranma wouldn't take the credit, hmm?
Oh, and he *did* beat him senseless, before. Remember the
"dance of death."
That was a nice story. Not as explicit as some of your more recent
works have been. :
Of which I, for one, was grateful.
"Tomorrow sees undone what happens not today.
Indecision brings delays,
days lost lamenting lost days"
http://www.ratol.fi/~eruuska/
Martial arts.
Enlightenment.