In a message dated 06/10/2000 8:51:03 AM Pacific Daylight Time,
zema@freewwweb.com writes:
> "Ranma, our... uh, experiment didn't have any side effects did it?"
> asked
> Kasumi nervously.
> Ranma, "..."
> ^_^;
>
Now there's an interesting fic idea :)
Yup, but I'm not gonna touch it myself. :) (Or at least not until I
finish my Ranma/Ryouga pair-up fic, which I will continue some time,
eventually... Only one weird fic at a time for me. :)
<SNIP>
> end) but, limited knowledge aside, isn't that like... a LOT of money?! A
> ridiculously lot of money?
>
That's only about 1000 dollars to start off and 500 dollars each following
month,
not too unreasonable to my way of thinking. Then again I'm not exactly an
expert
on the costs of raising children, having just reached the point where I
could
reasonably have them myself :)
Hehehe, :) Thanks for the correction. I've been told of my misinformation
regarding the exchange rate. My.... GROSS misinformation. :)
> Why's Akane being so pissy? As in why are you writing her like that?
> If
> there's an in-story reason I'd really like to know what the hell it is.
>
She's in a bad mood? *shrug* It could just be something as little as that,
although it does seem a bit forced. Not that I'm not a fan of Psycho
Bitch
Akane
;) j/k
As a joke or slowly developed over time I don't mind the
characterization... (I kinda like Psycho Bitch characters. They make great
villains. Just read Choices and tell me you don't hate Sayuri. :) But right
off the bat with no explanation really peeves me. And she'd have to be in an
incredibly bad mood for me to believe this. Like perhaps if she's just found
out she's barren...
<SNIP>
You might want to keep it to a few of the more perceptive members of the
cast.
Akane might be suspicious, but I don't think she'd think of this
immediately.
Then again Shinji is prone to spouting out "Otousan!"'s, which are hard to
misinterpret :)
Mm hmm, like Kasumi and Nabiki. (Though Kasumi isn't perceptive in the
traditional sense I think she would notice.)
"But, but... Really! I swear, he means uh... Ah, damn." Ranma dropped his
head and prepared for the beating of his life.
> <SNIP>
> > tragedy! Now our schools will never be joined!" He began to wail and
> > the
> > tears began to flow.
>
> Despite the characterization of Akane you sure have THIS Tendo family
> member down pat. :)
>
This is about the same extreme of characterization though, people just
like
it
more :)
Okay, okay... True. But Soun isn't exactly a main character in canon OR
this story (it seems) so it's not nearly as bad.
>
> <SNIP>
> > "Calm Down?! Don't you dare tell me what to do! You....Jerk!" Out of
> > nowhere her mallet appeared.
>
> Mallet? And I doubted your ability to make it worse... Shame on me.
>
This fic is a bit serious for the mallets to be appearing.
That too. ^_^
<SNIP>
> Second, once again you prove me wrong... \Sigh/ "She thought dully."
> You
> mean she doesn't even really CARE that he must think she's some sort of
> monster? As much as I like the rest of the story this characterization,
> excuse me, MIScharacterization of Akane, may just stop me from reading
on.
>
The thought dully indicated to me a depressed state of mind actually.
Then
again
the stalked right after words conveyed quite a bit of remaining anger.
The
two
aren't necessarily incompatible though, Ryouga carries both off admirably
at
times :)
True! I interpreted it the other way as you saw above... I was thinking
it was dully as in boredom... Or lack of emotion. "Oh, it's 3 o'clock
already?" Could be that it was meant as you interpreted though. Or the author
could have had a completely different meaning. ^_^
<SNIP>
> One wonders how exactly Ranma plans to explain why he's a "mommy"
part
> of
> the time right about now...
>
I'm sure it will come out in the bathroom scene :)
And boy(girl?) will that be fun! :)
> FINAL COMMENTS:
> I really, really like this story, and the idea (I'll have to check out
> Childhood Mysteries some time...) is great. I'm not so sure I can handle
the
> way you portray Akane though and so this may be one for Anyone But Akane
> fans. (I'm a fan of all the characters myself...) Hopefully, you won't
lose
> this reader. Guess I'll just have to wait and see. Later.
>
Akane can be a hard character to write at times, especially with the
sheer
amount of fanfiction that displays her (and all the other characters) at
nothing
but the far extremes of their personalities. I didn't really see anything
Yeah, I guess... But I made that mistake myself, (I.E. going by
fanfiction for reference) when I first started and ended up just deleting my
first attempt at writing fan fiction outright... I've since done my best to
try and keep away from fanfic conventions. (Hope I've been doing well. :)
here
which displayed an actual dislike of Akane, so I imagine it's just that,
something which could be fixed fairly easily.
Personally the Akane parts only detracted from the story a little for
me,
but
Akane isn't one of my favorite characters, and her parts were overshadowed
by the
idea. I've always been a sucker for stories where Ranma has children for
True, and as I said, I'll just have to wait and see. I hope it's not
dislike for Akane because otherwise this IS a very good story. And yes it
would be pretty easy to fix those Akane parts...
some
reason, it adds an interesting variable to the mix. His fiancee's then
have
to
factor in immediately becoming a mother the moment they marry him, the
fact
that
he's been with another women who he might have loved, and the necessity of
raising a child who isn't their own. All balanced against a man they're
competing with two or three others for. At any rate, I'm looking forward
to
seeing how it turns out here.
Agreed. :)
--
James M. Zema
http://gozips.uakron.edu/~zema/