Glazius Falconar wrote:
The FFML Synopses List REVIEW (3000! ::twang::)
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For the week of: May 26, 2000 AD (Next Sunday!)
Moderator on Duty: G. Falconar ("Bird-boy?")
Synopses Reviewed: All of 'em! (La la la!)
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[Devilman / Neon Genesis Evangelion]
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Title: Dema-fa
Episode: Chapter 08
Genre: xover
Author: Disruptor (Tom Mathews)
Email: mathews1@gte.net
Homepage: <http://home1.gte.net/mathews1>http://home1.gte.net/mathews1/
Archived at
<http://home1.gte.net/mathews1/fanfic.htm>http://home1.gte.net/mat
hews1/fanf
ic.htm
Date Sent to FFML: May 25, 2000
Archive Number: 10995
Size: 14 KB
Series Summary:
Shinji is rescued by a mysterious boy calling himself Dema-fa.
Episode Summary:
Misato finds unbelievable evidence.
In an unbelievable fashion, might I add. Any true data entry person uses the
keypad for numbers, and ain't no way 0 is close to 9 there. Why not just
have the computer start from 2000, say, and count on back, and have Misato
be surprised it's taking so long? The entire piece felt a bit... forced. We
already know Rei's and Kaworu's preferences for food, for example; just have
him ask if anyone minds eggs. (I'm hardly a vegetarian, but I can't stand
the texture of an omelet.) The premise is rather interesting, but the story
trips over its own feet a bit too often to hold my attention.
I'll admit it, this and Fighting Spirit needs a lot of work and they
will be revised. They also need pre-readers. Any takers for either of
them?