No major complaints...jsut a couple nit picks...

Drawing his sword Ranma smiled his feral smile, "I am Saotome Ranma,
Lord of the Kanagawa prefecture, vassal to the Lord Happosai, heir to
the Anything-Goes-School of Martial Arts." This was it then, he had
decided this and he would end this slowly... he promised Gosunkugi a
world of pain

Kanagawa Prefecture didn't exist before meiji.  There were Hans.  The name of that area prior to Meiji was Sagami.

     "No, Ranma, don't kill him, it's all right, I'm fine." Kodachi
pleaded with him, tears streaming down her already wet face, "He is
nothing, and he'll always be that now... barakumin (21)!"

I thought that the modern name for eta was BUrakumin.

that's all...

J
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