On Sat, 27 May 2000, David A. Tatum wrote:
Chapter 2: Pax Sailoon
"Lina, where are we going? I forgot!"
"Baka! How many times do I have to tell you, we're going to-" Lina
started, preparing to throttle the somewhat forgetful swordsman. Cutting
herself off in mid-sentence, she paused to think about it. "Um, actually,
I guess I haven't told you this time, have I?
This is new. ^_^
that." She smiled for his benefit... though regretted the knowledge that
she'd probably never be able to talk him into being her dress-up dolly ever
again, now that she no longer had that excuse.
Maybe they'll run into another gay sea monster. ^_^
"To get good at it, yeah. But I'm not talking about making you into a
wizard or anything- just giving you a couple spells that even your average
jellyfish could learn in a week," Lina said, smiling to show she was
teasing him.
I have a lot of trouble with this, actually. I mean, if spells like
Lighting and Levitation were so simple, EVERYONE would know them. They'd
be just too useful not to know. Heck, you state later that Lighting takes
most people a day to learn,and even poor Gourry can learn it in a week.
That's just too easy. Why isn't everyone a sorcerer, then?
"Gourry, I'm probably the most powerful sorceresses in the world right now,
<snip>
Who's this, and what have you done with the real Lina? ^_^
Another person who the teenaged boys might have described as a
'big-breasted chick' overheard this with great delight. "OOOOH HO HO HO HO
HO HO HO HO HO!" her shrill laughed echoed through the streets as she
approached the boys. They cringed in terror, furiously looking for a way
to escape. "Lina, Lina, Lina... did you think you could escape I, your
greatest rival and companion, Naga the White Serpent, just by changing your
name to Luna, stuffing your bra, and getting a job as a waitress thousands
of miles from where we last saw each other? OOOOH HO HO HO HO HO HO!"
So, what happened to the clone army? ^_^
"You mean Prince Phil wants to know if Amelia wants to get married some
day," Zelgadis summarized.
Not realistic, considering that she's part of the direct line to the
throne. She'd *have* to get married. Then again, I suppose that realism
isn't exactly a forte of Slayers.
Xelloss caught her sleeve before she could leave. "Wait- before you kill
her, find out if her name is Naga of the White Serpent.
^_^
"Ah, that is a secret," Xelloss said, raising a finger into the air. "But
it wouldn't work out even if I did- she's one of the last of the Golden
Dragons- if not THE last. I'm the mazoku who singlehandedly wiped out half
the dragon race a thousand years ago... But then again, she DID forgive
Valgaav, and he wiped out the other half.
Thought that was the last of the Kamizoku, actually.
"Well, that's part of our mission. L-Sama wanted you and me to get them
together- they've BEEN together for some time, actually, they just don't
realize it yet."
Damn. I was hoping Lina'd shack up with Xellos. ^_^
"You could have just slept with him, you know," Zelgadis suggested
^_^
"Good luck finding those," Zelgadis snorted. "Especially finding some you
could afford. Didn't you spend several million on those talismen of
yours?"
4 million, or so. I think (it's been awhile).
Xelloss actually opened his eyes at that one, giving her a dangerous look.
Martina suddenly realized that the mazoku in question wasn't exactly
pleased with her, and swallowed. Even Filia looked a little surprised at
the anger he was showing, though Luna was just smiling quietly to herself.
Oh, please. Xellos wouldn't even care. He's never gotten angry in the
series unless there was someone to kill. Martina isn't someone he'd care
about. And just having him spill his guts and preach a sermon like this
isn't very IC, and it's just dull to read.
If you want to change Filia's mind about him, have someone *else* make
that call. Perhaps one of Zelas's minons taunts him for always being a
Dragon lover, and pulls up that example of saving that dragon in the war.
Or something.
support. I am impressed with your outfit, as well- how DOES it hold
together?"
"I believe there's this magical enchantment which enhances the strength of
the leather..." Naga explained.
She doesn't believe. She knows, since she's using it (I think that's what
you mean, right?)
"There is this lovely magical enchantment..."
"Um, excuse me," Luna said, breaking her usually unflappable exterior with
the shock of Naga's appearance. "But... what about my Mute spell?"
"Oh, that?" Naga said. "I just kept laughing until it overloaded and the
spell shattered. It held fast for an impressive length of time, however-
you should be proud."
^_^
Well, it doesn't feel like Slayers. Then again, no fanfic I've read yet
made me feel like it was Slayers, although Twoflower's are the closest.
Keeping that in mind, this fic isn't too bad.
Still, I'd really like to stress that Gourry learning magic is
an incredibly bad idea. It makes him too versitle, and it's just too
ridiculous of a powerup. If he needs to be flying around, give him a
magic item, or something. If it's integral to the plot, it's my opinion
that you need to rethink it. It's just something that makes the fic lose
it's credability in my eyes.
-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble. A few more shots, then
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode. Ducking around a corner,
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of
my Anime supplier.
One look at his face and I knew that I had been betrayed. "Tell me,"
I insisted. He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance. Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao," he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...