Subject: [FFML] Re: [Ranma] Divinity: Chapter Ten
From: David Johnston
Date: 5/29/2000, 7:04 PM
To: Kyle Emmerson
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

       Ryouga sat in the dark, compact room unsure of himself. His 
only
company, a large wall mirror, the door, and the dim sun lamp above him.

Sentence fragment.  There is no such thing as a dim sun lamp.  

       "Wait!" Ryouga exclaimed. "What about the fancy Hi-tech 
communications
equipment?"

"hi-tech"

       Aizen put a finger to her chin. "Well... we're under budget."

"on a tight budget"

       "Well," she began. "It all started when we found out that Aizen 
and
Ranko were actually agents of a top secret organization called MERV."

       "You know what that stands for?" he asked.

It's a secret...

       The boy blinked. "Oh, no thir... That wath not our waiter! It 
wath an
impothter!"

       "Waitress," Akane corrected.

       "Yeah, and it had to have been," Ranma said. "Look, she brought 
out
drinks."

"it can't have been"

       In fact, she even apologized, but quit literally blamed Aizen 
for the
whole thing.

"quite"

       Osamu blinked. "Like the God, right?"

"god".




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