Spoilers in this commentary for the entire Utena TV series.
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At 07:44 PM 5/26/00 -0400, Sailor Ranma wrote:
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I touch myself in dreams I know nothing about. Why, why does this happen? It
scares me so much. Scares me that I can love you like I do. You are the one
in my heart and I have a feeling that I'm in yours. I drink this poisen
poison
because I love you, this aching heart of mine can't hold it in. So why do I
drink this poison? Because I carry someone else's child and I don't want to
have that in my life. *Our* life. He always was one of my lovers and look
what I'm doing, killing a dead man's baby. I want you so bad I'm willing to
kill, my own child at that.
Dios forgive my soul.
Akio, take what's yours.
I love you Anthy.
I love you, Anthy.
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This is an intriguing idea, as far as I can figure out the intent of it:
Utena, post-series, carrying Akio's child? There's a lot that could be
done with this in a story.
This, however, is not a story yet; it's a fragment. The possibilities it
raises are intriguing, but it requires expansion before it will actually
feel like an Utena fanfic. As it is, it reads like the names of some of
the Utena characters have been plugged into a generic situation that could
be mapped onto any number of series.
If you want to expand on this, I think you'd probably want to have this as
the climax, after some lead-up and development of the situation. It's a
horrific act to poison your own child, and it's not the kind of thing I can
see the Utena we know from the series doing unless under incredibly severe
mental stress. Perhaps whatever happened to her after the duel called
Revolution deranged her mentally?
Suggestion: Anthy, post-series, finds Utena in a mental hospital, amnesiac
and several months pregnant. Develop things from there, if this fragment
is the ending you actually want.
Summing up, this idea deserves a larger treatment than you gave it. I'll
be interested to see the results if you choose to do so.
Ciao,
-Alan Harnum