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Indecision brings delays,
days lost lamenting lost days"
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Date: Tue, 23 May 2000 23:40:06 +0300 (EET DST)
From: Esa Ruuska <eruuska@ratol.fi>
To: gally@cs.utexas.edu
Subject: Re:Ties of the Ghost, branches of a tree
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
I *CAN'T* believe I missed *this* much obvious errors.
All errors, will fix. Most suggestions, if not all,
taken.
My native language doesn't have separate male or female
pronouns, so... ^.^;;;
Later, the phone rang. As Ranma instinctively reached out towards
it, he was unprepared as tiny arcs of electricity lashed between his
hand and the receiver, causing him to retract his hand. Now more
awake,
he tried again, with better success.
Hmm, very interesting. What exactly is going on here? (wondering as a
reader, not CC'er)
first backstory ^.^
Don't worry, I'll tell eventually.
Or hint, at least.
Puzzled, Ranma closed the phone. What was that all about?
Is it a holoscreen? "Close" is not very clear here.
Golden Age style replica, actually...
"Upload Complete. If I may ask, miss Tendo, why did we just insert
"Miss Tendo" Poor Nabs, never got married. ;)
Actually, no, she didn't. I didn't notice that gave it away, darn.
The hydraulic door to the lab opened, allowing a certain
pigtailed old man to enter.
Hmm, I thought they already entered the room...
Ehh... I changed few things from the original (non-sent)
draft, and I missed this.
The shining hair should've been
a dead giveaway in the first place. She must have been tired from
all this late-night work, if she missed an obvious sign like that.
What, no great new conditioners in the future? And I don't mean an
amazon. :P
Well, self-illuminating hair's still pretty rare.
I need to change some description to make that clearer.
...
Did I mention that Ranma has problems remaining undetected ^.^
From the man-shaped dent in the wall, Ranma looked at the
Up until now, the fight has been pretty realistic. The man-shaped dent
is
cartoonish, and I don't think it fits with the tone you're trying to
set.
Er, it's made of easily collapsing material ^.^;;
I see what you mean, I'll do something about it...
Back in the control room, there was a yelp of pain. "Are you all
right, sensei?" Nabiki inquired.
Okay, I'm not getting this relationship very clearly. Nabiki gave
reference to granting research money. That would imply she's the
employer. I don't think the relationship would grant a "sensei" to the
scientist unless Nabiki was being slightly mocking.
Eh, Employer, yes. a translation error, that 'employee' thingy.. ^.^;
And Hakubi-sensei is the person behind the company's current
technological lead, slightly modelled after certain another Anime
scientist.
I liked it. :) I'm very interested in the backstory and where you're
going
with this. Please continue.
Well, since you ask so nicely.. Sure! I will! The next part'll probably
come out seventh of june, after the entrance exams.. Or maybe sooner,
depending on whether I can keep myself away from it.
Or, hopefully not, later, If I run into unexpected troubles.
Nevertheless, I'll fix all the glaring errors you pointed out etc.
and mail it to the list the same time as the next part.
The backstories are something I'm writing when I run into troubles
with the main story. I have the first two pretty well fleshed out
in my mind, though.
Anyways, I am *enormously* grateful for you taking time to comment on
this. Your C&C'll help me push myself harder to get the next part done.
Thank you very much.
"Tomorrow sees undone what happens not today.
Indecision brings delays,
days lost lamenting lost days"
Tel:050-3063241
Group:Xes
http://www.ratol.fi/~eruuska/
Martial arts.
Enlightenment.