I recieved this reply, and realised it raised something I 'should' have said in my original message, but never did.
Original message:
<< Hello, I have a story, four chapters long right now, which I would like to have proofread. If anyone is interested, please reply personally.
Reply:
what's the story about?
Oops! I have common sense, but I'd be damned by all celestial beings if ever I say I use it...
In response,
It begins right after Ranma loses his strength due to Happosai's moxi-bustion technique. It was originally supposed to be an emotion-heavy, ladden drama, but somehow only suffered to be ladden. I want the emotion-heavy part.
Anyway, it picks up after the moxi-bustion incident, but instead of regaining his strength, Ukyou doesn't find the last part of the moxi-map on Happosai's face; it (the last part) was carried away by the terrifying winds.
So Ranma begins to leave, Akane follows, and an adventure begins. Somehow, along the course of writing the story, it 'transmorgified' (I love Calvin and Hobbes) into a space-opera (I don't really care what style of story it is). A terrifying enemy is foreshadowed and Ranma's simple training quest turns into something different.
I'm having some trouble dealing with introductions of new characters and the description of the old characters. If you'd like to help, please respond.
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