~This is from Miashara. He can't send e-mail currently, so i'm getting some things out for him, g'night!
Nika
Chapter 4
Tokyo Hospital, Central.
"Did you hear about the mugging?"
Two nurses were working at a small alcove in the ICU section. One, a
gentleman,
Nice. I went with the stereotype and automatically assumed they were both
women.
I figured that would give most people pause.
Seeing he had his audience captivated, he took a sip of his drink
before resuming. "The hero is some kind of insane martial artist. He's
got this sword out, and he's moving so fast he's barely more than a
blur. My cop friend swears, he swears, that with his own eyes he saw the
rescuer dodge bullets."
Well, all except the ones that hit him.
Yep. but it was just one, not ones.
"There's only one problem."
"Oh?"
"Colt .45s have seven bullet clips."
magazines, actually. But since since this is in idle conversation, I can
see how he would make the common mistake.
I was originally intending to write a special note, just to you, at the
end of this chapter mentioning that. However, I forgot.
"Yep. Last words before passing out were 'I'm going to get myself. He
must suffer.' They're thinking of taking him to a head shrinker when he
wakes up."
Not that it would do any good. :)
We're as screwed up as we're going to get.
"He's back!" Usagi wailed. She began to bawl, tears streaming down her
face.
Rei, usually the first to jump on her when she began to weep, just
shuddered in empathy.
'sympathy' would be better, I think.
empathy means you're feeling it too. ex his mother just died, mine did
to. I'm empathetic. sympathy is I can imagine how much that must hurt.
His mother died, mine didn't.
The five girls whirled around, hands leaping to henshin rods. Standing
in the doorway, black jacket hanging to the floor, Cyanide leaned
against the wall. He was idly tossing and catching a knife in one hand.
That he caught the blade by letting it impale his palm was of no
consequence.
He's a manly man. besides, he needed that blister popped.
"His highness wants Serenity alive. Keeping Cyanide alive long enough
to turn him over to the Prince could be considered an act of treason."
"Wow."
That is pretty harsh.
Diamond is really annoyed. More on this later.
Pearl was still out
their somewhere, doing bad stuff. And this new guy who melted was trying
throwing
Very brief, this chapter was. But it set things up for later chapters.
Nice
work.
It did what it was meant to. Bridge a slow moment.
D.B. Sommer
Thanks much, as always.
PS. My send email function doesn't work. I sorry about the delay in this. I will C&C as I usually do for you, it just might take a will for a reply to occur.
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You know, 200 pounds of trinitro toluene, a couple thousand gallons of
liquid oxygen and hydrogen, and some thermite, just to give it that
special friendly touch. The usual.
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