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[Ranma 1/2 / Robotech]
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Title: Silent Battles
Episode: Chapter 3: First steps
Genre: Crossover
Author: Latin_D
Email: latin_d@uol.com.ar
Date Sent to FFML: May 12, 2000
Archive Number: 10540
Size: 31 KB
Series Summary:
Hunted by memories, Ranma stumbles into the SDF-1 and finds himself
deeply involved in the First Robotech War.
Episode Summary:
Quick and to the point: Ranma vs Rick, Ranma vs Battlepods, Ranma vs
himself.
Review:
A good chapter, though there are typos.
Spell-checkers just don't work! I guess I'll have to reread my work. Oh,
well...
Diary not dairy. ^_^
That's one mistake I'll never make again. You have no idea how many people
made jokes about that one. ^_^
And of cour'se you forgot to
use contractions.
Argh. Will be more careful about that.
And some of the dialoue feels wooden.
Well, I'm working on that. Hopefully, with time (not sure how much), it'll
improve.
Other than that a pretty good
piece of work.
Thanks.
And don't worry about Glazius, he's a lot more stricter than me. ^_^
Hey, he's great. After all, if people isn't blunt when they C&C, I'll never
know what I' doing wrong.
BTW, your prose
need some work, too. It needs to have a more natural flow. I just don't
have the feel
of the work, you know.
Oops. I'll see what I can do. Just tell me if I did better in your next
review.
Thanks again for you comments.
Bye and good luck,
Latin_D