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From: "Jerico Mele" <jmele@brandeis.edu>
Re:[FFML] [FFML][BGC][2090] Forgotten Tales I - Nene's Last Journey
Date: Mon, 8 May 2000 22:30:48 +0100
From: "Alex Gray" <hitomi@ndirect.co.uk>
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To: "ffml" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Comments:
<This meeting was the beginning of the tale - the tale of those
forgotten
vigilantes who were called the Knight Sabers.>
A decidedly different opinion than the one I advance in "Mote" but
probably more likely.
<How ironical that only the night before we had just finished
celebrating our sixth year together>
I'm not entirely certain, but I think you can use ironic instead of
ironical. Sounds more grammatical, 'n stuff.
By Horus! It Does indeed!
<His name was Leon. He was a friend, an ally and very nearly the
one to whom one of my sisters had given her heart. He had known about
us for almost four years, and during all that time he struggled to
accept what it was we were trying to do. He was an officer in the ADP
you see - a very good one. And as such, there was always a quiet
discomfort in the way he regarded us, even in the way he felt towards
my sister. Perhaps, it was that discomfort that bought the two of them
closer... I do not know, and I do not suppose it matters now anyway.
However you look at it, we were the ones who killed him.>
A great bit of discription regarding the relationship between the KS and
Leon.
Why thank you kind sir. ^_^
<I remember how startled I was to hear that this young girl
had... how did Linna put it... "kicked Sylia's arse"... Yes, that was
it. That as well should have warned me that this girl was a lot more
than she first appeared to be.>
Nene: That alone should have alarmed me beyond all comprehension.
Good flow so far. You've introduced a whole bunch of characters and
their relationships in a fashion that remind me of the prolouge to a
longer story...could it be?
Most of all the characters covered in this story have already been
introduced and the relationships at least partially covered by previous
chapters of a "Knight Alone".
Nene is concentrating on the status of her relationship with her daughter
which as covered in chapter 1 was a complete mess.
However, these characters do tie into up and coming chapters of 2090.
< The truth behind that Evil which seduced Linna and changed her
into the monster that killed thousands.>
Eeek! I take it we haven't gotten this far in the mainline 2090 stuff.
Well... yes and no. This is the 2047 event that was partially alluded to
into chapter 1.
<It was her... and I will _never_ forgive her that even though I
know the woman who was once my best friend is long since dead.>
I hope you aren't giving all the 2090 surprises away in this piece.
Surprises? No... tasters...
Nene is just describing this event from her point of view. She does
not know WHY Linna did this, or who Sylia was allied to at the time
it happened.
All will be revealed....
Great emotion here, though.
** End of Nene's Last Journey.>
Interesting ending to an interesting story. I like the fact this is
accessible to people not following the rest of 2090 without boring those
of us who have been following it.
Good story. Recommended.
Arigato!
I have written the last two chapters of "2090 - A Knight Alone" but have yet
to
pre-read them. You are not the only one who has the dreaded _papers_
(shudder)
to read. ^_^