As Genma returned to the table Soun cautiously watched his friend over the top
edge of his newspaper. He wasn't positive what was bothering his Genma, but he
too had witnessed the savage sparring contest between father and son.
His Genma because, other than the Police in several
countries, no one else would want him.
I like the fact that you show that Ranma is actually very
angry here in the fight scenes. In the canonical universe he
rarely gets angry and doesn't fight any harder than he has
to. Here well this version of Kuno is even more of a fool
than the usual one and frankly he deserves more than he got.
You did a very good job of showing an Akane who has learned
more of the world by the time Ranma shows up, than the canon
version has by the end of the series.
Of course as I am sure several hundred people have told you
by now it is a good idea to put the subject and title of a
story on the subject line.
--
Rick Robinson
RICHARDROBINSONJR@prodigy.net
If violence is not solving your
problems you're just not using enough of it.
Misato
"I guess I'm just an old-fashioned sentimentalist at heart.
I refuse
to accept a no-win scenario. I hate the thought of a
universe without
justice. If the maneuverings of dark powers can't be
exposed and
defeated by the pure of heart, then there's no point in
anything. I
can't believe that."
-- Benjamin Hutchins