Um, not bad for a first fanfic. Although I have fanfics like this one before
(Ranma actually finding out that his life sucks, and he wants something
better.)
Just need to work on the overall formatting, like line wrap. And there was
one case of a sentense starting without a capital letter. As it is, I would
like to see more of this story, as having an idea that has been done before
is not always a bad thing. How the story develops is more important.
But those are my opinions. You can take my advice, or you can take my advice
and throw it away.
James Holzhauer (aka Tobimaro [Ton-chan])