Angus MacSpon wrote:
"Are you ready, Minako-mama?"
"Do it." Kill me. That glaive of yours should be sharp enough to
decapitate in one stroke.
I'm sorry, my-
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Interesting, but I don't think it works all that well. You can't
seem to make up your mind whether you're writing a serious fic or
a comedy. The idea of sweatdropping to death is good and funny, but
the reactions and consequences you depict are far too serious to
match the whacko premise.
Sorry.
Don't be. Part of the point was to take something normally viewed as
funny and twist it around into a serious bit, kind of like Akane
actually bludgeoning Ranma to death with her mallet. Others have
pointed out (in private C&C) that the attempted effect here is neither
"serious" nor "funny", but "warped". So, its failure to be entirely
serious or entirely funny is actually in line with its purpose.