Good to see you back and writing again, WH!
Well, this was interesting, and from what I've seen I don't think your
writing capabilities have really dulled in your time away like you were
worried about.
One thing that could have been handled better was Saber's killing of
Gunnar. I found it a little too abrupt and jarring. The only other minor
quibble I have is the placement - IMHO this would probably work better as a
flashback during the fic than as a prologue. I can't really explain why,
and of course that's just my opinion and I haven't been able to read the
fic yet. Once I see the whole story, I might change my mind.
Oh, and as an aside, have you managed to see GW by now?
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Andrew Dynon
"When will those bloody adolescents learn to leave my Mobile Suits alone?"
- Bright Noah, from Kathleen Moffre's fanfic "Russian Roulette"
"Keep 'em guessing. Never tell anyone the truth. Try to confuse them."
- Stefan Elliot on dealing with Hollywood executives.
"Stories have to be told to exist. They exist in the telling and retelling."
- Itzhak Roeh