[Oh My Goddess! / Buffy the Vampire Slayer]
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Title: Brimstone Raising
Segment: 6
Genre: Crossover [- ed]
Author: Skyrocket
Email: skyrocket35@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: April 13, 2000
Archive Number: 9217 (+ 20K)
Size: 16 KB
Series Summary:
The power of the Hellmouth has drawn Mara to Sunnydale. When the
goddesses learn of her location it becomes a race against time to stop
Mara from possibly unleashing a great evil into the world. But all is
not as it seems. Somewhere in the shadows someone is watching. And
everything is going as they desire. Can even the combined might of the
Norns and the Slayer stop Mara from destroying the world?
Segment Summary:
Mara finally makes her grand entrance into Sunnydale. And the first
person she runs across is no other than Oz. Meanwhile, in an effort to
find out what Mara is planning, Urd tracks down two very famous members
of the Buffy world. Oh, and did I mention there's a special surprise
appearance by someone outside both the Buffy and OMG worlds? ;)
Review:
One word: formatting. Most readers are quite finicky in their text formatting
and will not read works with abnormal formatting: no indentions, no spaces
between paragraphs.
Not really a lot I can do about that. Whenever I copy cand paste from Word stuff
like that just goes right out the window. I have no idea why and it bugs me too.
Another thing: never drop in John Constantine without the English accent.
That's his trademark and you'll probably have John turn up at your door
and do something suitably horrific to you, once he gets out of prison of
course. And with the English accent, that means continual, not on and off.
And John would use bloody wanker not bastard. ^_^
*sigh* I tried my best with that, I really did. I'm on a mailing list for comic
book fic writers and I sent out a request asking folks who've used the character before
(and very well I may add) if they could help me out. The responce? Zero. Zip. Nada.
So I figured I'd just do the best I could with what I had. I've got some issues of
Hellblazer from Paul Jenkins' run on the book so I got them out to study. Maybe it was
just Paul's take on him, but in those issues John's accent isn't as pronouned as it was
under some other writers. Just look at #91 (the one I keep beside me while I wrote) and
you'll see what I mean.
As for 'bloody wanker,' I already had him using bloody on something else. Two
'bloodies" seemed like overdoing it. Besides, I can't think of bettor word to describe
John than "bastard."
Pretty nice writing though a bit sparse for my taste. Anyway, keep up the
good work and polish it up a little.
Not sure what you mean by sparse, but I'll see what I can do.
Skyrocket