Hiya guys and gals!
Well, after recovering from the aftereffects of writing ALSW
Y2K (i.e. vomiting, insanity, orange juice dependence), I
have finally decided to get this out of the way.
And this also marks a change in C&C policy. I will be doing
unsolicited out-of-SLR private C&C. The moment this hits
I go hunting! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Well, to be blunt about it, it's the bad/terrible writers who need
the C&C, not the good ones. I mean need as need badly
and most people should know the difference between need
want. And most likely the bad writers don't get C&C except
probably for flames :-( We should acknowledge the fact that
these people need help. And need help bad.
So I'm going to try and help them out.
And don't worry, private C&C from me doesn't mean you're
all that bad. I'll still send C&C to the people I owe them to
and to the really good writers.
So let's begin then.
Diclaimer:
All opinions are mine. If you don't like 'em, send mail to me
and we'll discuss your fic. Okay?
Synopsis List Reviewer: Elsa Bibat
The FFML Synopses List
======================
For the week of: April 14, 2000
Moderator on Duty: Nikholas "Switch" F. Toledo
Synopses Submitted: 30 (with 5 for April 15 and 4 for April 16)
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[Bubblegum Crisis]
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Title: Drunkard's Walk II: Robot's Rules of Order
Segment: Chapter 8: "Of Course You Know This Means War (Part I)"
Genre: Crossover/Insert
Author: Robert M. Schroeck
Email: rms@eclipse.net
Homepage: <http://www.eclipse.net/~rms>http://www.eclipse.net/~rms
Date Sent to FFML: April 11, 2000
Archive Number: 9147 (+ 20K)
Size: 139 KB
Series Summary:
In 2036, MegaTokyo sees two new inhabitants -- Lisa Vanette, graduated
from college and now working as a journalist, and a mysterious visitor
from elsewhere and elsewhen.
Segment Summary:
Leon gets what he wants -- with a condition. Priss ponders an offer. A
backfire leaves Lisa informed. An investigation, and Doug bolts. A
pitched battle takes place, and amidst the action a tragedy occurs and a
bargain is struck.
Review:
Yahoo! Another excellent chapter of Drunkard's Walk!
I loved the chapter and this is obviously the start of when things start to
really heat up. And the final scenes were very cool.
Keep up the good work!
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[Magic Knight Rayearth]
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Title: The Three Magic Knights Part 9: Dan in desperation-
a killing in the desert
Genre: Parody
Author: Carrot Glace
Email: carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage:
<http://www.geocities.com/misatira>http://www.geocities.com/misatira
Date Sent to FFML: April 15, 2000
Archive Number: 9311 (+ 20K)
Size: 25 KB
Summary:
Dan watches as the girls face off against Hojino with the help of Ferio,
one of Askot's minions. The young boy has a few words with him and
learns that dealing with him might be more dangerous than he had
originally planned.
Review:
Well, it seems Sean's formatting is alright. And no really big glaring typos.
Pretty clean.
And I am finally getting to enjoy this fic. ^_^
Anyway, there are still a few inconsistencies like calling a she a he and a
few missing commas. Look it over again.
Keep up the good work!
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[Mobile Police Patlabor]
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Title: On the Run
Segment: Part 4
Author: David A. Tatum
Email: desaix@sysnet.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Athens/Acropolis/7872/fanfics.htm
Archived at above at some future point... (probably not until I finish
the thing)
Date Sent to FFML: April 13, 2000
Archive Number: 9207 (+ 20K)
Size: 27 KB
Series Summary:
Asuma's father is murdered, and Asuma himself is framed for it.
Segment Summary:
A little more investigation, a lot more time focused on the hide-away.
Review:
Hey, David, you said this would end by part 3. ^_^ Anyway, another
good chapter of a good Patlabor fic. People have to write more
of these. ^_^
Keep up the good work!
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[Neon Genesis Evangelion]
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Title: Garden of EVA Book 2: Blows
Segment: 2:3 - Asuka Blows
Genre: Alternate Universe
Author: Jim Lazar
Email: jimlazar@earthlink.net
Homepage: http://home.earthlink.net/~jimlazar/anime
Date Sent to FFML: April 12, 2000
Archive Number: 9206 (+ 20K)
Size: 40 KB
Series Summary:
Take 5 minutes from episode 26 and make it into a continuing series? No
way! Can't be done! What if I put a VR Eva game in and lots of
hormone-driven teenagers talking about sex? Not enough? How about a
love triangle? Ah, now that I have your attention:
Segment Summary:
Asuka blows big time and in every way. Hold onto everything you know...
because you don't know anything.
Review:
Once again, the sex-driven EVA fantasy world of Jim Lazar is on the
road again!
At least it's not angst-driven. ^_^
Anyway, another mind-bending chapter of a marvelous series. And
Asuka-dominatrix is a mental image that won't leave my mind for
awhile. ^_^
Keep up cranking these babies out, Jim!
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Title: Neon Genesis Evanjellydonut
Segment: Part 4: The Good, the Bad, and the Really Ugly Angel
Genre: Spoofy
Author: Andrew Huang
Email: alhuang@hcs.harvard.edu
Homepage:
<http://www.hcs.harvard.edu/~alhuang/anime/fanfic/myfics.html>http://www.hcs
.harvard.edu/~alhuang/anime/fanfic/myfics.html
Archived at above
Date Sent to FFML: April 15, 2000
Archive Number: 9302 (+ 20K)
Size: 42 KB
Series Summary:
Evangelion, starting at episode 16 1/2, after eating peyote and riding
on the Tilt-a-Whirl for three hours straight.
Segment Summary:
Angel one, two, three fourteen. Zeruel sneaks into Tokyo, despite being
a really, really large and ugly thang. Shinji eats almonds, which
induces much allergic torment--poor Shinji. Hilarity, stomach pain, and
property damage ensue.
Review:
Finally, after eons of waiting, the monster that is Neon Genesis
Evanjellydonut 4 has arrived. ^_^
And the grandaddy of Eva fanfiction, (Hey one of his fans called him that),
Andrew Huang, proves once again that there's a reason why they call him
grandaddy. Mostly because he drools and tells these really funny stories. ^_^
Well, not exactly drools...but hey, you get what I mean. NGEjd 4 is on par
with it's counterparts and proves that Andrew hasn't lost his touch.
And now the long wait for NGEjd 5 begins. ^_^
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Title: Something Else
Genre: WAFF
Author: Sparky Clarkson
Email: sparkster@writeme.com
Homepage: http://members.tripod.com/Sage_Ohlmin/evafic.htm
Archived at, apparently, lots o' places
Date Sent to FFML: April 12, 2000
Archive Number: 9192 (+ 20K)
Size: 27 KB
Summary:
Shinji's conflicting emotions about Asuka come to the surface, and she
accidentally hurts his feelings. But why was it an accident?
Review:
The revised version of the earlier fic with the same title, this fic is a
more polished version of the two. It fixes some of the setting problems
and polishes the dialogue. Other than that, this is the same excellent
fic.
Hope to see more!
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[Neon Genesis Evangelion / The X-Files]
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Title: The EVA-Files: Sic Transit Gloria Mundi
Genre: Fusion
Author: E.L. Toh
Email: toheel@singnet.com.sg
Homepage: http://www.teloong.mcmail.com/
Date Sent to FFML: April 13, 2000
Archive Number: 9255 (+ 20K)
Size: 25 KB
Summary:
FBI Agents Shinji Ikari and Sohryu Asuka Langley investigate a computer
hacking case. Also hot on the heels of the hacker are the agents of
SEELE who want to preserve the secrets of the Eva Project.
Review:
Well, another interesting EVA fic and one of the better offerings of this
particular series, this is the prime reason why you shouldn't do drugs and
fanfics at the same time. ^_^
No, seriously, this is a nice fic, but the newer readers may have trouble with
all that's going on. But it interested me enough to check out the website and
I pieced everything together, so it's fine.
Anyway, keep up the good work.
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[No Need for Tenchi!]
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Title: Kiyone Muyo!
Segment: Season 1: Return of the Akuneko Episode 4: No Need for a Battle
Genre: Action
Author: Thrythlind "Thryth" Hardwulf or Luke "Thryth" Green
Email: Thrythlind@aol.com
Homepage: http://members.aol.com/thrythlind/snake.html
Archived at http://members.aol.com/lycanskord/aku.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 16, 2000
Archive Number: 9317 (+ 20K)
Size: 20 KB
Series Summary:
Ryoko's past makes itself known, with consequences for all.
Segment Summary:
Rei attacks Rikyu and is winning when the Masaki household intervenes.
He flees and most of the warriors take to space to catch him. After
some maneuvering, the battle ensues.
Note:
Subject header of post reads: "[FFML] [Tenchi Muyo]Kiyone Muyo! [4]".
Review:
You know, my main problem with this is the little details. And your
style is too minimalist. Give us broader descriptions, show more of the
world. And the fact that you are quite good at the language is a plus on
that, though you have too many short scenes, jumping around. Mostly
my major complaint is when you change scene, don't just put in the
location on top of the scene. Describe and show.
Also your dialogue, though having its brilliant moments, is usually...
I don't know...cardboardy? There's the feel to it that I can cut it with
scissors if I wanted to. Try to liven up bothe the dialogue and set
descriptions.
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[No Need for Tenchi! / SailorMoon]
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Title: The Fall of Juraii
Genre: Continuation/Crossover/Weirdness
Author: Valandar the Red
Email: Valandar_the_red@yahoo.com
Homepage:
<http://valandar.tripod.com/fanfic.htm>http://Valandar.tripod.com/fanfic.htm
Date Sent to FFML: April 15, 2000
Archive Number: 9295 (+ 20K)
Size: 11 KB
Summary:
With the death of Wasshu during a fragile temporal experiment, all
Juraii watches as their doom approaches...
Review:
You going to continue this? Anyway, it's a pretty nice shortfic and
well self-contained. Pretty good twist in the ends.
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[No Need for Tenchi! Mega-Crossover]
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Title: Another Large Crossover
Segment: (Pre) Tenchi/Slayers World
Series: Tenchi, Slayers, so far
Genre: Adventure, Crossover, Humour
Author: Geoff "Zop" McCord
Email: geozop@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/geozop/
Archived at http://www.geocities.com/geozop/fanfic.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 12, 2000
Archive Number: 9209 (+ 20K)
Size: 16 KB
Series Summary:
The crossover is split into two types of sections, and then those
sections also have pieces. The story is split into 'pre' pieces and the
'body' pieces. Pre pieces are the bit of story that explain how a group
of characters got into a universe. The body is the main section of the
universe with the new characters.
Segment Summary:
This is one of a few prechapters for my large crossover of Tenchi,
Slayers, El Hazard, Ranma, and a bunch of my friends. This one is just
the pre for both the Tenchi and Slayers universes. I may add in Rurouni
Kenshin later on, but not likely.
Review:
Oookay, let me guess...you've been on the FFML for three or so months,
right?
You see... that's because the majority of writers on the FFML start like
this. ^_^
It needs polish badly. I dislike the formatting. The grammar's good. And
the concept is ... to be kind ... enthusiastic... and a bit of a cliche. I've
seen the Washuu-invention-starting-a-real-big-crossover opening quite
a few times and most of the time by the newer writers in the fanfic
community. I do _lurk_ around other fanfic places than the FFML, you
know. ^_^
What we have here is overenthusiasm couple with a lock of polish. And
again I say that you shouldn't start with a big crossover but start with
small works first. That doesn't mean you should stop writing this, my advice
is to keep it on your hard drive and work on it, while not releasing it for
awhile. In the meantime, develop your style and approach to storytelling
and think about your concept. Eventually the concept will evolve into
something coherent, because as I read this I don't know where the hell
this one's gonna go. Big crossovers like this have to have the thrust shown
immediately or people don't get it or lose interest.
Anyway, polish up is all I can say.
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[Oh My Goddess! / Buffy the Vampire Slayer]
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Title: Brimstone Raising
Segment: 6
Genre: Crossover [- ed]
Author: Skyrocket
Email: skyrocket35@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: April 13, 2000
Archive Number: 9217 (+ 20K)
Size: 16 KB
Series Summary:
The power of the Hellmouth has drawn Mara to Sunnydale. When the
goddesses learn of her location it becomes a race against time to stop
Mara from possibly unleashing a great evil into the world. But all is
not as it seems. Somewhere in the shadows someone is watching. And
everything is going as they desire. Can even the combined might of the
Norns and the Slayer stop Mara from destroying the world?
Segment Summary:
Mara finally makes her grand entrance into Sunnydale. And the first
person she runs across is no other than Oz. Meanwhile, in an effort to
find out what Mara is planning, Urd tracks down two very famous members
of the Buffy world. Oh, and did I mention there's a special surprise
appearance by someone outside both the Buffy and OMG worlds? ;)
Review:
One word: formatting. Most readers are quite finicky in their text formatting
and will not read works with abnormal formatting: no indentions, no spaces
between paragraphs.
Another thing: never drop in John Constantine without the English accent.
That's his trademark and you'll probably have John turn up at your door
and do something suitably horrific to you, once he gets out of prison of
course. And with the English accent, that means continual, not on and off.
And John would use bloody wanker not bastard. ^_^
Pretty nice writing though a bit sparse for my taste. Anyway, keep up the
good work and polish it up a little.
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[Pocket Monster]
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Title: A little side story to my Pokemon Story
Genre: Serious
Author: Sonny Taing
Email: sonny_taing@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: April 15, 2000
FFML Archive Number: 9308 (+ 20K)
Size: 5 KB
Summary:
Just a little side story that's supposed to give some light to Ash's
background.
Review:
Grammar, English language and formatting. Fix 'em. That's all I'll say.
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[Ranma 1/2]
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Title: The Amazon and the Moneylender
Segments: Episodes 1 through 7
Genre: Yuri/Adventure
Author: Thrythlind "Thryth" Hardwulf (Luke Green)
Email: Thrythlind@aol.com
Homepage: http://members.aol.com/thrythlind/snake.html
Archived at http://members.aol.com/lycanskord/aatm.html
Dates Sent to FFML: April 6 through 9, 2000 (in 14 posts)
Archive Numbers: 8919, 8920, 8918, 8916, 8915, 8917, 8913, 8914, 8953,
8954, 9001, 9003, 9090, 9091 (+ 20K), resp.
Size: totalling 270 KB
Series Summary:
It starts with a (not-so) innocent business dinner between Shampoo and
Nabiki. As Nabiki goes about removing many of the obstacles between
Ranma and Shampoo, several unplanned things occur. Not the least of
which is when Nabiki makes a startling revelation.
Segment Summary:
Maybe later I'll summarize each epi...
Note:
Subject headers of posts vary, including "AatM". Posts are numbered [1]
through [14].
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Title: The Amazon and the Moneylender
Segment: Episode 10, Part 2: Visitations (Rewrite)
Genre: Romance, Lemon
Author: Thrythlind "Thryth" Hardwulf or Luke "Thryth" Green, IYP
Email: Thrythlind@aol.com
Homepage:
<http://members.aol.com/thrythlind/snake.html>http://members.aol.com/thrythl
ind/snake.html
Archived at
<http://members.aol.com/lycanskord/aatm.html>http://members.aol.com/lycansko
rd/aatm.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 16, 2000
Archive Number: 9316 (+ 20K)
Size: 19 KB
Series Summary:
It starts with Shampoo hiring Nabiki to remove a few obstacles to
winning Ranma. Things develop from there.
Segment Summary:
Ranko is starting to be convinced that she's newly created. Kasumi
tries to throw a little water on the fire between Nabiki and Shampoo.
It proves to be a futile gesture. Lemon scene.
Note:
Subject header of post reads: "[FFML] [Ranma][Lemon][Rewrite]The Amazon
and the Moneylender [20]".
Review:
Okay, concept's pretty good and all that. No complaints, though I am
somewhat...I dunno...turned off. Anyway, formatting again. just put
spaces between your paragraphs and the convenient asterisks between
scenes, okay. That'd make it a he;ll of a lot easier.
On your style, see my earlier review.
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Title: Clothes Make The...
Segment: Chapter 10
Genre: Um... good question.
Authors: Halbred, Ichinohei, and Leifker
Email: nightelf@thekeep.org
Homepage:
<http://www.thekeep.org/~nightelf/fanfic>http://www.thekeep.org/~nightelf/fa
nfic
Date Sent to FFML: April 9, 2000
Archive Number: 9025 (+ 20K)
Size: 54 KB
Series Summary:
Ranma-as-woman - sorta.
Segment Summary:
Ranma and Ukyou go on a date, while Akane does some soul-searching.
Review:
Another great chapter of one of the first fanfics I've ever read. Which means
this things been around for a long time. ^_^
Anyway, this chapter's still up to standards and I must say the writers are doing
real good work to meld their styles. I sometimes can't identify who wrote the
part I was reading.
Keep up the good work!
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Title: Olvido
Segment: Part 2
Genre: Dark
Author: C Morgan
Email: gally@cs.utexas.edu
Archived at http://24.31.125.242/cgi-bin/RetrieveStory.exe?StoryID=149660
Date Sent to FFML: April 3, 2000
Archive Number: 8764 (+ 20K)
Size: 37 KB
Series Summary:
Alternate time-line starting at Jusendo, a cold and dark time.
Segment Summary:
Will summer draw near
Only when life bleeds away
Death, a hollow warmth?
Author's Note:
The first part can be found on the most wonderful FFML Mini-Archive at:
http://24.31.125.242/cgi-bin/RetrieveStory.exe?StoryID=147922
Review:
This ... is ... cool! ^_^ Sorry about that. The writing is incredible. And your
style fits this fic so well. And the wind motif that runs through the chapter
is somehow appropriate. I've read part one again and the motif of the wind
in the second part is a good counterpoint to the numbers motif of number
one. Dare I guess what motif would part three have? ^_^
And Kasumi is wonderfully...darker for this series. I must praise you for that.
Keep up the good work and crank this out faster!
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Title: Permanent Part 27: Okonimiyaki means... What the hell?
Genre: Actiion/comedy
Author: Carrot Glace
Email: Carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/misatira/
Date Sent to FFML: April 12, 2000
Archive Number: 9181 (+ 20K)
Size: 18 KB
Summary:
Ranma gets a visit from an old friend, who is surprised to find out that
he is a girl. Also Akane deals with some new and interesting problems
as she is hunted down by devil hunters.
Many dangerous things still loom on the horizon, waiting for them.
Review:
You know, whenever I C&C for the SLR I always seem to have at least
one or two synopsis from Sean. ^_^
Anyway, another really nice chapter of Permanent, one of Sean's better
works. Up to snuff as always with Sean's works.
Anyway, keep up the good work, Sean!
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Title: Le Plus Ca Change...
Segment: Part One (Revision)
Genre: Comedy
Author: Dave Menard
Email: catthouse@lweb.net
Homepage: http://www.angelfire.com/anime/spacepiratesguild/
Date Sent to FFML: April 14, 2000
Archive Number: 9261 (+ 20K)
Size: 20 KB
Series Summary:
Twenty years after the original series, the mayhem continues.
Segment Summary:
It's another typical Tuesday at Furinkan High as Kobuta Hibiki must
fight off half a dozen rivals or fiancees just to get to class. Ranma
and Ryoga reminisce about how things got started.
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Title: Le Plus Ca Change...
Segment: Part Two
Genre: Comedy
Author: Dave Menard
Email: catthouse@lweb.net
Homepage:
<http://www.angelfire.com/anime/spacepiratesguild>http://www.angelfire.com/a
nime/spacepiratesguild/
Date Sent to FFML: April 14, 2000
Archive Number: 9262 (+ 20K)
Size: 14 KB
Series Summary:
Twenty years after the original series, the mayhem continues.
Segment Summary:
The omiai between the Tendo and Hibiki families goes horribly wrong;
Sachiko and Kobuta meet for the very first time.
Review:
Dave, I've got a big problem with your fic.
I hate Lonko.
Not the character, though she is like a very, very, unpolished Ranma. The
name grates on my ears. I hate the name. Couldn't you just made it Ranko?
Anyway, this is a pretty weird little fic. I'm used to second generation fics,
but this? Well, it's weird in a Ranma-esque sort of way. Pretty good though.
Keep it up and a little polish. And change Lonko's name!
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Title: Returning Home
Segment: Chapter 10
Genre: Continuation
Author: David Farr
Email: djfarr@ihug.co.nz
Homepage:
<http://homepages.ihug.co.nz/~djfarr>http://homepages.ihug.co.nz/~djfarr/
Date Sent to FFML: April 10, 2000
Archive Number: 9056 (+ 20K)
Size: 23 KB
Series Summary:
Ranma and Akane return home after being missing for three months, with a
four-year-old daughter and a nine-month-old son. Their sudden change of
heart brings massive changes to Nerima.
Segment Summary:
Genma makes a heartfelt apology. Blades and Nabiki are caught together.
Finally, Ranma and Akane find a day-care center for Chibi-Ukyo.
Review:
Well, up to the standards of the series. It is a bit late, though, isn't it?^_^
Anyway, I personally love the series and I hope to see more.
Keep up the good work!
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Title: Those Who Hunt Ninjas Part 1
Genre: Original Flavor
Author: D.B. Sommer
Email: sommer@3rdm.net
Homepage: http://angcobra.jumpfun.com/dbsommer.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 8, 2000
Archive Number: 8988 (+ 20K)
Size: 54 KB
Summary:
Ranma, and just about everyone else, are recruited to stop three inept
self-proclaimed 'Sexy Ninja Girls' from stealing a valuable urn from a
museum.
Review:
Heh. Classic Sommer work here with all the comedy that just make you
want to roll on the floor laughing.
A must read, kiddies, so go read it!
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[Ranma 1/2 / Saber Marionette]
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Title: Strangers in a Strange Land
Segments: Chapters 5 and 6
Author: Christopher J. Olsen
Email: gamers@prodigy.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/
Archived at http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/ssl.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 11, 2000 (in 2 posts)
Archive Numbers: 9153, 9154 (+ 20K), resp.
Size: totalling 63 KB
Series Summary:
Ranma, Akane and Nabiki wake up five hundred years in the future on the
all-male planet of Japoness... as Marionettes.
Segment Summary:
Ranma goes looking for help, we find out what happened to Nabiki, and
Akane spends a day in the woods.
Review:
The prose style's been improving for the past chapter or so, but still there
is room for improvement. And there are still some typos and a few
formatting errors.
Other than that this is a fine fanfic. I just wish this was a straight SMJ fic. ^_^
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[Ranma 1/2 / SailorMoon]
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Title: A Different Viewpoint: Curses and Demons
Segments: Chapters 1 and 2
Genre: Continuation/Crossover, Lemon (for Chapter 2) [- ed]
Author: Christopher J. Olsen
Email: gamers@prodigy.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/
Archived at http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/fanfics.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 14, 2000 (in 2 posts)
Archive Number: 9281, 9275 (+ 20K), resp.
Size: totalling 75 KB
Series Summary:
A new story opens with Ranma and Akane's wedding, and the begining of a
whole new batch of chaos.
Segment Summary:
Ranma and company have returned from their vacation in California to see
Johnathon's parents, and its time for the wedding of Ranma and Akane...
but of course, no wedding between those two is ever uneventful.
Review:
Well, another story arc for this series has finally begun! And what a
wonderful series it is. The style is definitely improving but still there is
always room for more polish.
A must read, starting from the first story arc up to now, it's worth a
a good many hours of reading.
Keep up the good work!
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Title: Souls of Fire
Segment: #1: Dawn of Black Moon
Genre: Continuation/Crossover
Author: Razorclaw X
Email: spiceoflife@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.crosswinds.net/~slythe/index.html
Date Sent to FFML: April 11, 2000
Archive Number: 9175 (+ 20K)
Size: 81 KB
Series Summary:
In the age before the Silver Millennium, a mighty empire of darkness
conquered many stars in the heavens. Their downfall marked the
beginning of the Silver Millennium, but their legacy lives on. At the
dawn of the new Age of Enlightenment marked by the rise of Crystal
Tokyo, the ancient empire of darkness is about to claim retribution....
Segment Summary:
The times of Chaos have passed with the conclusion of the Black Moon
War; order has been restored to Earth and the remnants of the evil army
have returned to their homeland. However, the War was not fought in
vain, for in secret staging grounds, survivors of the original
Rebellion wait for their leaders to appear -- seventeen warriors, dark
as night....
Review:
Okay, as always Mr. X's writing is very good. But once again his
concept doesn't do it for me. I just didn't feel the thrill.
But it is good writing and for other people who like this sort of stuff,
go for it. Personally, this isn't my cup of tea.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Saint Seiya]
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Title: War of the Gods
Segment: 4
Genre: X-Over
Author: Wanderer D
Email: wandererd@hotmail.com, wandererd@yahoo.com
Homepage: http://wandererd.cdreams.com
Date Sent to FFML: April 16, 2000
Archive Number: 9345 (+ 20K)
Size: 13 KB
Series Summary:
After the battle with Hades, Sieya dies, but his Cosmo finds his long
lost brother, and fills him with pieces of Seiya's life experiences.
Segment Summary:
The battle with Sorrento continues and comes to an end.
Review:
Let's just say that you style's a bit too minimalist for this style of fic. Maybe
that's because I'm spoiled when it comes to battle scenes and other
Ranma fics. ^_^ But, really this needs a big polish, though your dialogue
is pretty good and the concept is a bit interesting.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Batman]
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Title: Shadow of Nerima Parts 1 and 2
Genre: Dark/Action
Author: Carrot glace
Email: Carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/misatira/
Date Sent to FFML: April 13 and 15, 2000 (in 2 posts)
Archive Number: 9232, 9283 (+ 20K), resp.
Size: totalling 62 KB
Summary:
A dark Ranma/batman fusion where Ranma isn't related to Bruce Wayne, for
once.
In the opening chapters, Ranma's life is destroyed when his pregnant
wife is shot and killed on their way back from a funeral. Grief-
stricken, he becomes a recluse and decides to take on the mantle of
Batman. Meanwhile, Kodachi becomes The Black Rose, an insane criminal
who is developing dangerous chemicals for her own amusement and personal
gain.
Review:
Oookay, another one of Sean's works. That should, in all essence, tell it all. ^_^
This isn't exactly bad, but it isn't either the pinnacle of perfection. It's a
pretty weird fusion, with Batman of all things, something that is not my
cup of tea. It does have nice touches, but still polish is always neccesary.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Battletech]
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Title: Battletech: The Saotome Gambit
Segment: Part Eight
Genre: Fusion
Author: J. Austin Wilde
Email: wildeman@psn.net
Homepage: http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/
Archived at http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/TSG-8.txt
Date Sent to FFML: April 6, 2000
Archive Number: 8925 (+ 20K)
Size: 100 KB
Series Summary:
A Ranma 1/2 - Battletech fusion pitting the might of the Furinkan
Combine, the League of Five Nails, and the Jusenkyo Commonwealth against
the beleaguered Nerima Confederation. The only hope for the Tendo
family lies in the hands of two Dispossessed mechwarriors named Saotome.
Segment Summary:
Ranma and Company search Capra City for the fifth crypto key, unaware
that they are surrounded by enemies; Kodachi sends forth her dreaded
Black Rose Terror Regiment on a mission of murder and vengeance; and
Ryouga is reunited with an old school chum...
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Title: Battletech: The Saotome Gambit
Segment: Part Nine
Genre: Fusion
Author: J. Austin Wilde
Email: wildeman@psn.net
Homepage: <http://www.psn.net/~wildeman>http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/
Archived at
<http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/TSG-9.txt>http://www.psn.net/~wildeman/TSG-9.txt
Date Sent to FFML: April 11, 2000
Archive Number: 9104 (+ 20K)
Size: 102 KB
Series Summary:
A Ranma 1/2 - Battletech fusion pitting the might of the Furinkan
Combine, the League of Five Nails, and the Jusenkyo Commonwealth against
the beleaguered Nerima Confederation. The only hope for the Tendo
family lies in the hands of two Dispossessed mechwarriors named Saotome.
Segment Summary:
The Black Rose Terror Regiment begins its Urban Renewal project on Capra
City; Ranma and Company look for an escape from the Joketsuzoku; Mousse
goes ballistic on the Combine; Pansuto Tarou murders someone; and
Happousai taunts Tatewaki Kuno with his Locust.
Review:
Another wild ride through the Battletech/Ranma universe courtesy of James
Austin Wilde. As always the detail is good, along with tight plotting and
excellent dialogue.
A definite must read for any fan of either universe.
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[Ranma 1/2 Mega-Crossover]
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Title: Nerima Park Part 8
Series: Mega X-over
Genre: action/adventure/scifi, Dark
Author: Carrot Glace
Email: carrotglace@juno.com
Homepage:
<http://www.geocities.com/misatira>http://www.geocities.com/misatira/
Date Sent to FFML: April 12, 2000
Archive Number: 9130 (+ 20K)
Size: 18 KB
Summary:
The group moves towards the visitors center after discovering the
destroyed docks. Unfortunately they also have their first run in with a
live Saiyan.
Also, Carrot wakes up in the Pokemon village under the care of Nurse
Joy. He decides to press onward despite his still unhealed wounds.
Leaving the Pokemon village behind, he decides to follow his friends in
the hope of catching up before they make it off the island without him.
Review:
Well, Sewan does his stuff again. This is still a pretty unique thing. Not
a must read, but it may interest quite a few readers. The prose style and
the presentation is signature Sean D'Anna/Carrot Glace, and you know
what that means.
But still a fan of Sean's work will find this a great read.
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[SailorMoon / Gen13]
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Title: Moonlight Heroes
Segment: 1
Genre: Crossover [- ed]
Author: Skyrocket
Email: skyrocket35@hotmail.com
Archived at http://www.fanfiction.net
Date Sent to FFML: April 16, 2000
Archive Number: 9324 (+ 20K)
Size: 29 KB
Series Summary:
Anime's favorite magical girls met comic's hippest teens. A call from
the past of John Lynch has brought the Gen13 kids to Japan. All they
want is a nice relaxing vacation. But unbeknownst to them, their
arrival in Tokyo has garnered the attention of the Negaverse.
Meanwhile, Raye is having bad dreams - dreams that end in the death of
the Sailor Scouts.
Segment Summary:
An old friend of Lynch's invites him to Japan with an offer Lynch can't
refuse. Gen13 just want a little downtime from their training in San
Diego. But since when did vacations ever work out for superheroes?
Meanwhile, Raye begins to have dreams that leave her very unsettled.
Something dark looms in the future and she doesn't know what.
Review:
Ooookay. Once again my bias against American comics and the NA
dub rear their ugly head. ^_^
Formatting troubles and add a little more polish to your writing style is
all I can say.
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Anyway, the bloody writing bug has hit me and I've forestalled all my
othr fanfic works to work on the ALSW addenda essays: parts that
were excised from ALSW Y2K because, well they grew into really
weird tangents and some are quite offensive. But after having thought
about them I started polishing them up a bit.
So in a copule of days, watch out for my essay, "On The Neccesity of
Cruelty and Pain: An Examination of Character Torture by Authors",
and "On Lemons and Lesbian: An Examination of the Lemon Fanfic
Genre and Some Related Areas".
Until then,
Ja Mata!