Glazius Falconar wrote:
The FFML Synopses List Review
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For the week of: April 7, 2000
Moderator on Duty: Sean Connor
Synopses Submitted: 19 [1 rejected]
Reviewer on Duty: Glazius Falconar
Synopses Reviewed: Every last blessed one
Title: POK�GENIE
Chapter: 12
Series: Pok�mon
Genre: Humor
Author: Tom Mathews a.k.a Disruptor
Email: mathews1@gte.net
Homepage: http://home1.gte.net/mathews1/
Archived At: http://home1.gte.net/mathews1/fanfic.htm
Date Sent to FFML: Apr 4, 2000
Archive Number: 8814
Series Summary:
Misty gets turned into a Pokemon which Ash accidentally captures.
Episode Summary:
Charizard becomes helpful again.
A Chansey riding a bucking Charizard.
. . .
Okay, that mental image is just too fweird. But everything else seemed to
be... rather what might be expected of a typical episode. The only problem I
have is that you've got about ten characters in an extremely enclosed space
but only a few of them seem to be doing anything at any given time. Does
only one of Misty's sisters have any lines, or was I just reading things
wrong? I realize the series may not have been too concerned with what
I guess I should make it clear on what all is going on.
happened to everyone else when Ash and his friends were out on adventures,
but when they've got to share a rather small island with him, it becomes
rather important to have a sense they've not just dropped out of the
picture.
Right.
It's an interesting concept you have, and you've done some very nice things
with it so far; it's just that the whole thing feels... a little flat.
The flat comment needs a bit more explanation for me to fix it. As to
the other characters missing problem, I'll fix that.