On Tue, 18 Apr 2000 05:02:01 -0700 asayogure2 <Asayogure2@worldnet.att.net> wrote:
{[cringes] I know I am a member of the smaller faction >in this regard, but
it just sets my teeth on edge when I hear people using >the term "chan," the
potential to misuse this term is ridiculous.
Ehh..*sweatdrop* Actually, I just realized that in later
chapters, I dropped any sort of use of ANY suffix to
names..@_@ I haven't looked at any of these old chaptes in
ages. *ahem* Yes. My bad. ^,^;;
you don't refer to them in the third person
with their title.
I sent you an older version, apparently. -_-;; The one
on my page doesn't say "Sir Ryouga". I changed that
awhile ago..^^; You must realize, I first wrote this
story in 5th grade. O_O I'm only going over it now.
I detest Japanese name suffixes in an English language >story ^_^
Oy! I'm gettin' rid of 'em! I don't really mind them, but
I also dun feel like dealing with them in my writing. ^^;
Also why would father be angry about her learning new >techniques? Are they
dangerous? Is Ryouga only supposed to be teaching her >footwork?
I got this whole idea from a book I read a LONG time ago.
umm..Dealing with Dragons? Yes... I think that was it...
Err... well, of course he's going to be angry. He doesn't
want is little girl fighting!!
Also I feel the need to mention that
you have done almost nothing in the way of scenery thus >far.
In an older, older version of this there was lots. Too
much, apparently. -_-;; I got too many complaints about
it being too long, wordy, and boring, so I took it all out
*sigh* Can't please everyone, I suppose..^^;;
You spelled Ryouga with the elongated "u" spelling. >Which is correct in
the Japanese sense. Now you need to be consistent. >Kunou should also have
a "u" in it. Or, leave them both out.
Ehh?? Nooooonononononono way. ^^; It's just the way I
am. Ryouga, Kuno, ukyou, Tendo.. that's how I spell 'em,
cuz it looks the best that way. @_@ It's habit. Sorry,
but I like it my way. ;p
{A princess! is watering flowers? I think not.}
To tell the truth, I'd find it VERY out of character if
Kasumi let everyone do everything else for her. What else
would she do?? *shakes head* This is the way I see her
in character, and if you dun agree, well pooh on you. ^_~*
it may just be me, but it seems to me that you are >hinting at sexual
activity here. Just what exactly are they doing out >there? Kissing or
fighting?}
*BIG sweatdrop* That's... just you. o_O;; You're the
first person to ever interperet that wrong...^^; They're
simply fighting. And in MY little world/story, a princess
should NOT be fighting, thus why it's supposed to be a
secret.
nobody wonders if they care about something.
hmm?? Sure they do!! Maybe it's just YOU that doesn't.
^__~*
you should have tagged this WAFF it is definitely a Warm >And Fuzzy Feeling fic
Bah. Nope nope. I'm a Ranma-Akane fan. ^__^ But Ryouga's
so sweet... *dreamy sigh* You have to give him some
happiness..
is she thinking this to herself? If so you need to >indicate it as such.
There are all kinds of methods you can use
*sagging in frustration* I've gotten totally equal
amounts of comments on both sides.. it USED to have
asterix (or whatever * is..^^;;;) for that, until about
7 people e-mailed me, saying that that was NOT the way
to do it, and to just leave out any. Like in real books.
*sighs* I'm just gonna leave it as it is. Like i said,
can't please everybody...
Oy. About the whole, "European/Japan" confusion...
*sweatdrop* I suppose you haven't read further chapters,
so probably wouldn't know... this isn't even set in the
real world. Not in anytime anywhere on earth. It'll
have dragons, and magic, and it's just... a fairytail.
Wherever fairytails take place. @_@ I should _probably_
mention that, huh? *sheepish laugh* My bad.
already into undying love. Your pacing is a little fast
Already?? He and Akane have known each other for over
10 year-- oops. o_O I forgot to send the prologue of this
story out first.. *snaps fingers* Shoot!
weapons and armor are not generally kept in ones >quarters, they have
armories for that purpose}
Well they are in MY story, and so far no one else has
minded... ^_~*
knights of any time did not wear their armor around the
castle/keep/courtyard just for kicks.
heehee. In MY time they do.
fancy piece of armor meant for looking nice, not >>protection.
no such thing. You of course can make this up. But if >you do please describe it
Describe it? Very well. -_- Later, ok? I don't feel
like writing fanfics right now. @_@
consistent for the Ryouga we know, not for squires of >that era
I AM going for ic here. If I REALLY wanted to do a
hardcore, realistic, accurate medieval Ranma fanfic,
I might as well just change all their names, change
their attitudes, and just write a medieval story that
really has nothing to do with Ranma. ^__^;;; And that's
no fun...
bokkens
were ONLY used in Japan.
...and in my story...
fizzle . . . the audience can hear crickets quite >audibly}
T'wasn't MEANT to be funny. I'm surprised anyone found
ANY of this story funny. O_O It wasn't what I was aiming
for... but hey, whatever...^^;
"Yes, over here," he said from a cabinet.
"Finally! I thought I'd never find this cursed roo- >>why are you
in a cupboard?"
{separate dialogue!
"Finally! I thought I'd never find this cursed roo -"
"Why are you in a cupboard?" Ryouga broke in to the >doctors train of
outspoken thoughts.
- of course I wrote the above assuming you left the "t" >off because Ryouga
was interrupting him. If you forgot the "t" then change >it to a better wording}
Wha?? No... ^^;;; It's not a T, it's an M. Room.
The whole "Finally! I thought I'd never find this cursed roo-- why are you in a cupboard?" Is Ryouga
talking, not Dr. Tofu. He had been searching for
Dr.Tofu's room, and finally found it. *sweatdrop*
You get confused awfully easily. *grin* ^.~
{problem, he is her bodyguard. Someone else MUST have >noticed his tendency
to get lost, he would have been reassigned to gate >keeper or something, they
never would have permitted him to stay on as her >bodyguard.}
Hm? Stranger things HAVE happened in the Ranma1/2 world.
Don't take this story too seriously. It's not meant
to be accurate. I know plenty about medieval times,
seeing as I'm learing about them in school right now...
But that's not what I was aiming for.
{um . . . no, a princess would not be allowed to train >in the fighting arts
in the first place, that is what commoners and guards >were for.
Ehh?? Do you live in my world?? ^.~* Nnnoooo... It's MY
story!! So there!! ^____^ but she's not allowed to
train. Correct. Tis WHY she and Ryouga were keeping the
training secret. And in MY story, she can wear whatever
she wants.
She would not be in Akane's room helping her dress (that >is
what hand maids are for)
*shakes head* Nabiki and Akane are sisters, and they hang
out. They defy the rules a lot... and this is my own
world. They can do what they want. ^~
it still doesn't work for me.
heehee. ^^; I'm not writing this story JUST for you,
y'know.
Nabiki being the older sister and hence a higher
ranking princess would just order it away and have the >cook make her
something new.
Oy. -_- You're taking this story too seriously!! Just
let it be light and happy, ok?? ^^;;
magazines didn't exist in this era.
BWA HA!! They do in mine. ;p
kings don't summon princesses.
I'm sure they could if they wanted to. ^__^;
kitchen entrances were in back side rooms, hidden from >the view of guests,
and they did NOT smell good. This was the middle ages >remember. It would
not be near any sort of fireplace}
hmm?? Well, maybe the contruction workers screwed up
on the building, or were stoned, or something...^~
Like I said, this is my world (I really need to put a
little note or something for more nitpicky people, ne?)
Nabiki has never been shown to actually love Kunou, that >is a fanfiction
convention, and one hell of a popular one. Nabiki loves >his money.
*sweatdrop* I showed signs of her liking him?? Wow. I
need to read my story again. @_@ I don't even remember.
I'll probably change it, since my outline really has
nothing to do with their nonexsistant love.
good Kunou speech here, but you are aware he is >insulting her family by
saying their floors are filthy?}
he's Kuno. -_- Like he'd notice that.
women in Japan today wear kimonos still
Yuppers. I know that. But maybe in MY world they don't.
I just need to explain things I bit more, I suppose...
*whines* But I don't wanna change EVERYthing! You're the
first to hve complained about it!!! <___>
you have people blink a lot in your story, is that >intentional?
Yes it is. -_- I LIKE blinking. ;p Ehh... have a problem
with it?? ^^;
"Please call me Nodaka, or Aunite. Himeko is much too formal,"
no, this wasn't done, not on the first meeting anyway
I spelled her name wrong throughout this
entire fic. #_# I just realized that... anyways, I'm
gonna leave it. *shakes head* No one else thought
anything bad of it.
no! Queens did not, would not ever, and could not >cook! In Japan maybe,
but NOT in Europe
If they really wanted to, I doubt anyone would stop them.
And in my story, it's just FINE!! ^.^
The
kitchen was NOT a place royalty hung out}
It COULD be!! And it is in my story. So there. ^~
{cook, chef is a French term, and generally only used in >restaurants}
Ehh... @_@ My bad.
cute but you really need to address his role as her >bodyguard, he either is
or he isn't, if he is then he should be by her side or >behind her at ALL
times, there is no possible way he could get lost, not >even him
I'm not gonna take out my favorite things about Ryouga
just to please you, dear. ^____^ I like him like that,
and if it bugs you that much, you don't have to read my
story. ^^
bodyguards were NOT introduced
But best friends are. At least in my story. ;p
NO! bodyguards don't "wander off"
o_O This IS Ryouga we're talking about here. I'm going to
stay IC. ^_^;
why on earth is she wearing an overcoat anyway?
It was a suggestion from another medieval expert.
He told me about some dresses that would fit my story,
and almost all of them were in three pieces. A skirt,
a large, heavy overcoat, and a small tanktop-like shirt
underneath.
glass doors were non-existent to rare in this era
^^;; Last time I'm gonna remind everyone that this is
in no 'era'. It's just a fairytail.
wow, I get huggies and everything? Kewl, usually I get >squat for C&C
Really?? How rude!! You can have all the huggies you
want!! I'm eternally greatful you fulfilled my request!
nonsense, you are a writer. How good of one depends on >the effort you put
into it, not what your letter grade is in some class
*sweatdrop* Thanks... either way, I got an A. @_@ 7th
grade is jus' tooooooooo easy. Either that, or my
teachers really are as stupid as I suspected they were...
I'm probably smarter than some of them, and that is just
NOT saying much on their parts... ^^;;;;
Thanks again for reading this. I'm a little nervous to
send out chapter two of Star... but I might build up the
courage to do it someday. ^___^;
You're very good at C&C!! Would you do Crucifix for me,
too?? ;)
Luv ya!!
*huggies*
Akane Miata
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