Almost didn't read this as I rarely read original fics, but then I'd have
missed a delightful story.
Jason Liao wrote:
After five minutes, I heard footsteps behind me, which was strange
because I hadn't heard the door open. I started to turn around, demanding
to know who it was, when I saw the tentacles. They filled my vision with
light brown as they exploded around me, some of them pinning my arms to my
side, swiftly drawing me close to their source. "No! Let me go," I
cried out. "Our dinner will be ruined!"
The tentacles held me close despite my cries, lifting me and
pressing me close to his own body, and I soon heard the other appendages
not busy gently hugging me take hold of the knife and chop the beef into
fine, delecate slices. Others tended to the assorted vegtables that I
was already cooking, while yet another set began preparations for frying.
Our dinner saved, I turned around, and kissed him between his three eyes.
"Why are you home, Nobu-chan?" I asked. "Did they let you off from work
early?"
Heh. Very funny and well written twist. This hooked me in.
Suddenly, the front door slammed open. A creature with great
mallice showing through the eyes stormed into our apartment, and headed
'malice'
She finally looked up from my shoulder into my eyes. "It was so
hard for me after your father died. You know what kind of man he was.
But despite all of that, those vigillante magical girls mistook him for an
'vigilante'
"Well dear," Mom said, "there's always the priest that married
your father and I..."
Heh.
Finally, before anyone asks, I'm not continuing this. Maybe it has
potential, AFAIK it's never been done before, but if you think so, you're
welcome to do it. One thing I'd have to do is to have more relationship
material, and of greater detail, which is nigh impossible as I have never
actually been in a relationship before (wah!). Or, I could try to
identify with the innocent-oblivious-Kasumilike protagonist that I've
created, but the thought of trying to think like that is scary. (There is
a good reason why she doesn't have a name.)
I think it stands well enough on its own.
A very amusing take on WAFF that I hope to see more of in the future. :)
Phil.