kichigai wrote:
C&C would be very nice. Please?
Since you asked (and C+C me) Okay. ^_^
"I hate nights," Ryunosuke muttered to himself, turning over for
the 53rd time. His sheets were twisted around so tightly they would
have cut off circulation, if he had such a thing.
He's in the nk-1124 chasis?
The room was completely dark, although that mattered little to
him. The minute sounds he made were easily deciphered by his
sophisticated hearing, and his eyes were more than capable of seeing,
should he desire. Ryunosuke believed in being prepared, and only
someone that didn't know his history would call him paranoid.
Since they really were out to get him, eh?
Ryunosuke clicked his tongue softly, listening to the sound
rebound off his walls. Six years, he thought. Six years since I was
last attacked in my room.
Sounds like he misses it.
And it's been eight since it was a regular
occurrence. He shook his head. He kind of wished things were like that
again.
Wording seems a little wishy-washy. Maybe:
He wished things were like that again. Sometimes.
More a case of personal style, I guess. Just sounds better to me.
It was tempting, he thought. It would be nice to just switch off
for a while, get past the boring stuff, and wake back up. Maybe, maybe
they would forget about him, and he'd just sleep forever... Good thing
only Nuku Nuku had the codes for that function.
Ah. So she's alive here. Interesting. The future then, I take it?
She'd keep him from
doing anything stupid. He turned over again.
He did miss the early years, before his birth,
Might 'rebirth' be better here?
back when he still
had a mom and dad
'mother and father' sounds better to me.
that loved each other. His life had went to hell
'had gone to hell' sounds better IMO.
leave. And as always, he thought about the events that had played such a
big role in his life. His death at age 11, and his installation into
the android body created by his father.
So now we know the point of change.
Mom had been gone on too many special occasions, and
don't think you need the comma
thought. And then where would we be?
Dad was smart, a genius in his own way,
ie: A Mad Scientist.
Ryunosuke shook his head. Ah, well, at least I got a pet out of
the deal. And a unique opportunity to visit the girl's
girls' (I think)
locker room. He
chuckled to himself. Yeah, being a girl had it's points.
its
may have worked just as well, and looked a little less silly, but any
really close exam
examination (seems better spelled out.)
****************
Part one.
Ryunosuke became awake like someone had thrown a switch.
Ryunosuke awakened like
The
first thing he noticed was a slight weight sitting on his chest. The
first
thing his eyes focused on was the source of the slight weight on his
chest, a
cute furry cat nestled between his breasts.
Hey! I know that cat, he thought. It's okay!
Hmm. Seems as though someone has overlooked a major descrepency.
"AIIIIIIIEEEEEE! DAD! WHAT DID YOU DO TO ME?"
That's more like it. ^_^
he screamed in a
high-pitched, female voice. The cat freaked and immediately left the
room.
I can't say I care for the word choice. How about 'The cat panicked and
bolted out of the room.
for your present," Kyusaku said calmly from his position behind Ryunosuke.
Ryunosuke spun around to face him. "THANKS? YOU WANT ME TO SAY
THANKS? I'VE GOT BOOBS!"
Kyusaku: But they're very nicely shaped and formed. Guys will go nuts over
them.
"Dad,"
he said menacingly, "I now have several things that I don't know what are.
Thanks to you."
that I don't know what they are, thanks to you."
to do so. Instead, as a result of one of Kyusaku's quirky little ideas,
he
blushed cutely and tore two chunks out of the operating table he had been
leaning against.
Heh.
Mistaking the look that tried to surface on Ryunosuke's new face
for something else, he hastened to reassure him. "Don't worry, your body
can eat, you can even taste things. It's indistinguishable from a normal
girls
girl's
Dad has flipped his lid, Ryunosuke thought angrily. He acted like
it was no big deal. I'll SHOW him why it is a big deal. He will fix
this...
Yeah. You figure chasis redesign wouldn't be too hard for Kyusake to do.
Ryunosuke clenched his hands together on the table again, then he
peacefully slumped to the floor, fast asleep.
Kyusaku stepped in from outside the door where he had been hitting
buttons on a remote control and looked at his son thoughtfully.
Smart failsafe.
****************
"Ryunosuke! Come here, we have something to discuss!"
Ryunosuke's head snapped up from where she'd been studying,
external sensors swiveling out into place. "Yes Dad?"
"Yes, Dad?"
Kyusaku looked at the book and groaned inwardly.
Indeed, she looked like she had just drank something very bitter.
"And just what it
is it
that you're reading, dearie?"
Ryunosuke lowered the book again. "It's the owners
owner's
Shaking her head, Mrs. Tanaka replied, "Oh, it's no trouble. No
trouble at all! Here." She handed a wrapped package to Ryunosuke.
Ryunosuke took the package with all the enthusiasm of someone
accepting a dead mouse.
I think Nuku-Nuku would have accepted it enthuseastically.
"I hope you like it, I was shopping to day
today
****************
Everything went black, and Ryunosuke's vision and hearing went
back to normal. He grinned to himself.
Yep, it was a perfect fit. I just didn't say who it was going to
be a perfect fit on.
Unconsciously, he compared his mental images of Nuku Nuku and
Yoshimi.
Heh
Nuku Nuku was perfect, almost too perfect. She was the product
of his
father's fantasies, and her body reflected it. Her cat brain provided the
perkiest, friendliest, freshest personality one could ask for.
So Kyosuke made the cat into an cyborg too?
excellent martial artist, although she lacked the ability to turn steel
bars
into pretzels. And her personality! Sheesh, it seemed to Ryunosuke that
every time he turned around she was picking at him, or pissing off his
latest
girlfriend, or having a bad day, or something.
He also owed her his life several times over, for things he'd
never admit.
Yoshimi, he thought. Now there is a nice rack. Not as good as
mine was, but still...
Heh. Still want to hear why Kyosuke couldn't make a male body for Ryunosuke
though.
One of her other friends, Mitsuko, stared at her. "You mean you
can't?"
Ryunosuke shrugged. "No, they all look pretty much the same to
me. I mean, I know this one looked pretty good, but it's just a bra."
A few of the other girls in the locker room gathered around to
join in the conversation.
Heh. Foolish boy.
only
come from certain stores and they have the highest prices." Mitsuko
pulled her
skirt up. "Take a look at these and guess how much they cost."
Heh. The little perv is probably enjoying this.
Ryunosuke was all to
too
Sensitive microphones had relayed his answer to the women at the
controls. "YOU ONLY HAVE ONE WIFE, UNLESS YOU FORGOT TO TELL ME
SOMETHING!" she
screamed.
Heh
copter's windshield at the arguing women inside. "That's the same thing
that
was chasing us isn't it?"
Kyusaku nodded as he stood up carefully.
"That's Mom's, that's Poison One.
Mom's Poison One
Arisa fired another missile, and this time Ryunosuke simply leaned
to the side and deflected it.
Akiko screamed in frustration. "Don't we have anything? The power
suits!
They're in the back, correct?"
Kyoko nodded.
"Keep it busy! I'll take it from there!"
Oh? Akiko going into combat personally. Interesting.
Ryunosuke was barely able to contain the impulse to do a victory
pose and make a speech. It was so tempting, especially when she could see
it in
her mind's eye, but the nagging worry that other people would see it kept
the twisted impulse in check.
Heh.
fluidly like the arms, and it seemed to shift it's
its
The mecha paused to bat at a bit of cloth that flapped across it's
its
veiw
view
had
also just fired a rocket, which was just about to hit the back of the one
she
was standing on and explode.
Not even thinking about Akiko, is Arisa, eh?
By that time, however, Arisa had crossed the distance between them
and had picked her up by her head. This time in
it
was Ryunosuke's body that
strained under the pressure exerted on it.
Arisa moved the machine gun around to point into her torso, then
pulled the trigger. Hundreds of bullets flattened against the incredibly
resistant flesh.
Ryunosuke screamed for the first time. While the bullets didn't
actually cause any damage, and it didn't actually hurt much, it did cause
more
than a little discomfort.
yeah, if she's screaming I would expect so.
It took two tries, but by twisting and kicking with all of her
force
'strength' sounds better to me.
Ryunosuke was able to break free. She back flipped away.
Arisa turned and fired the machine gun again. Ryunosuke heard her
mother's startled gasp as a few of the bullets came a little to
too
Ryunosuke was jerked back to the present. "Wha?"
Everyone but Arisa searched for the owner of the voice. Arisa
continued her efforts to pry Ryunosuke's hand off.
Pretty self-centered, isn't she? ^_^
may have been a rocket scientist, but he sure wasn't much of a brain
surgeon.
heh
Unbidden, a thought of Arisa and Kyoko surfaced. Poor Kyoko, he
thought. She was so much happier then. Now her need for revenge
outstripped
his own at times.
Ah, past history showing up.
clock, and realized that it was nearly four in the morning. Even though
he
could adjust the chemicals in his brain to remove mental fatigue,
Ryunosuke did
needed
need
had a
price. In terms of agility, sensors, and internal backups, his first body
far
outstripped this one, leaving Nuku Nuku with the awesome hand to hand
skill. Still, Mother had insisted he be as manly as possible.
Ah, so he has been modified since then
He walked through his rooms swiftly and silently, following the
cat. Both of them had pretty much the same thing on their minds. Food.
In the kitchen, he was greeted by his housemate enthusiastically.
Atsuko 'Call me Nuku Nuku!' Natsume was always obscenely cheerful in the
morning, as well as every other time of day.
Hmm. Let me guess. When Ryunosuke got his male body, they gave the female
one to the cat.
"Good morning Ryunosuke!"
morning, Ryunosuke
she
chirped, then meowing something appropriate to Checkers. She was wearing
a cute
pink apron over a rather conservative skirt and blouse, and was in the
process
of dismembering a large fish.
Two other cats, one large grey male and a smaller calico female
female, were
were already eating from bowls placed to once side. Checkers made a
beeline
for his own and dug in.
"Morning Nuku Nuku,"
Morning, Nuku
needed.
need
Pretty much everything else was for pleasure, after a few other
basic
needs were met.
Ryunosuke started in on his share of fish. "Where do they have you
stuck today?"
Nuku Nuku made a face. "Desk again. I hate doing reports, meeting
reports. Meeting
people is so much more fun! I like patrol." Nuku Nuku was popular among
the
people at the AD police headquarters,
yeah. She can actually take out boomers, unlike the rest of the AD
cannon-fodder.
boomer crimes without your taps." Among other things, Nuku Nuku was the
resident hacker extraordinaire, and she had long since infiltrated the
police
network.
Probably make Nene jealous.
She nodded, resigned. "I know, but it's still boring. I wish I could
get out more."
Ryunosuke considered this for a moment. "Hmm, I'll probably be going
crazy after a day in the lab, what say we get Yoshimi and Kyoko and go
out tonight?"
Oh. So Kyoko's vengeance kick isn't against him, like I first thought.
Probably a boomer then.
This was his pride and joy. The lingerie store downstairs was nice,
especially when he was able to convince the girls to model for him, but
he left most of its day to day operation to the hired help. The lab,
however,
was were the real business started.
Ah, seems more like a fusion than the crossover I first expected. Now I get
it.
walked over and sat down at a relatively normal computer terminal.
Someone has
had
Yoshimi giggled. "Gee, I wonder why. And after that?"
Ryunosuke shrugged. "I was going to leave it up to you and Kyoko,
but I was thinking about Hot Legs. I heard they have a new singer."
Yoshimi nodded. "Sounds good to me, lets ask Kyoko."
me. Let's
home,
and I don't want to hand
hang
"Printout? How? Oh..." she said as Ryunosuke tapped her head.
Inside the apartment Yoshimi put aside her shoes and called for
her mom as Ryunosuke was doing the same. "Mom? I'm home! And I brought
a
friend."
They met her mother as they were walking farther into the room.
"Hello Dear,
Hello, Dear
Ryunosuke looked around with interest, mentally cataloging the
posters, books, small personal computer, clothes, and small mountain of
stuffed
animals.
The last she regarded with some caution, as it appeared to be
rather precariously stacked on top of the bed.
It's to hide the dead body. ^_^
Kyoko, on the other hand� Ryunosuke shook his head in amazement,
incidentally downing yet another shot of whiskey, and watched Kyoko
dancing with
a ferocity unmatched by anyone else, even in the mosh pit.
On stage a woman known as Priss was singing with a passion that
matched Kyoko's on the floor, if such a thing was possible.
Well, so the MainKS exist here, at least.
The guy had turned out to have quite a tolerance for
alcohol, so Ryunosuke had paid the tab in mock respect. After all, he
thought, taking all of a man's money after taking his clothes and his
girl would just be adding injury to insults.
Heh
Ryunosuke shrugged. "Ah, well. I'd best go see if I can't grab a
ride."
They walked out of the alley just in time for Ryunosuke to
see his van being driven away, probably by Yoshimi considering the state
Kyoko
was in last time he saw her. "Damn. It figures, this just isn't turning
out to
be my night."
Somehow, I doubt that. ^_^
As a direct result of Kyoko's unusually good mood, Yoshimi was
driving. After the MHI tower strafing incident, they'd all agreed to keep
Kyoko from the helm when she was grinning like that.
yep. Probably for the best all right
"Oh, so just because MHI hasn't shot at me personally means I
shouldn't care?" Yoshimi snapped. "Do you think I'm some sort of cold,
self-centered bitch?"
Kyoko saw she was waiting for an answer. "I thought it was a rhetorical
question," she replied.
Dumbstruck, after all, how could Ryunosuke have met someone like
Priss?, she watched him laugh as he talked easily with her, to far away
and to low to hear. Priss seemed a little taken aback by whatever it
was Ryunosuke was saying. Then as she watched, Priss's face darkened.
Gleefully, she watched Ryunosuke quickly stop talking as he
realized Priss's mood. She nearly cheered when Priss hauled off and
slugged him, knocking him back several steps.
Impressive. He's a heavy guy.
Nice work. A pretty well worked fusion of the two anime. Seems like you
have things well plotted out, giving hints of things to come as well as
explaining enough to get an idea of what's going on. Looking forward to
reading more.
D.B. Sommer