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--- Kuro Taka <kurotaka@cyberhighway.net> wrote:
Sukban Senshi Chapter 7 part 2 of 3
Where's part 3?
##Coming soon. Probably tonight or tomorrow.
<SNIP>
I've never seen Mako-chan (My otherwise favorite by
a long shot)
this .... this .... cruel.... before. I'm not sure
I like it. In fact
I don't
like it at all. But if no one showed us things we
didn't like, the
world
would be much less interesting or challenging. I
can see no flaw in
your characterization here, no matter how much I'd
like to. Mako-chan
is good at speaking before thinking.
##Thanks. This is actually a plot point. Makoto has
more problems than the rest. She, like Soban, is an
orphan. AND she's been fighting a losing battle
against the DK. So, she's a _little_ stressed. ^_^
<SNIP>
ouch. sometimes one should remember that he saw the
fall of
his homeland to an invading army. Would any of us
fare as well
in his place? Or would we curl up as we watched
that same enemy
assaulting our new home? A home with much weaker
defenses, and only
five children to defend it. I wonder what must go
through his mind
as he watches his charge (Luna's too) dash off to
battle. There's a
shortfic
idea there if anyone's paying attention.
##WOW!!! This is a GREAT idea. You expressed it so
well I think YOU should give it a try.
I'll see what I can work into Sukeban. (giving you
credit for the idea of course)
It's a really good idea though.
"It _does_ look like a crescent moon." Minako
whispered to herself. Shivering at a sudden chill
she hurried
to catch up with the others.
Class, this is what we call foreshadowing.
##You may have noticed I'm doing a lot of that in
Sukeban.
Looking
around Minako decided it looked like a scene out
of Blade
Runner with a little Clock Work Orange mixed in,
only not
as warm and fuzzy.
Now that is a disturbing image.
##Thanks. I try.
<SNIP>
interesting. So what does Soban mean?
and while I'm asking for translations, I've been
wondering what
Sukeban meant.
##Well, my Japanese is almost non-existent. I've seen
various translations. generally it seems to mean
"Lady Gang Leader"
"He reminds me of my senpai ...
I was wondering when that would come in... : )
whom I loved and who spurned me"
That style of speech it a bit too refined for her.
##Don't blame me. ^_^ I lifted this almost
word-for-word from the original Anime. (NOT the NA
dub)
"But she's changing it . . ." Ami's puzzlement
changed to horror as she realized Soban was
repeating
words she'd heard many times before.
that thought actually hurts. that one with such a
good heart should
have to hear those things. repeatedly. You write
well to make little
dark dots on a screen cease to be just that.
##Thank you very much. This was one of my favorite
pieces to write. (Cyrano will show up again. I rather
liked comparing Soban/Usagi with Cyrano.)
"SIMPLE," She finished softly. "It would have
been
a blessing if she had died."
Itai !!!
<SNIP>
##Thanks for all the kind words. I always appreciate
it when I hear from fans.
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"When I get a little money, I buy books;
And, if any is left, I buy food and clothes."-Erasmus
"A man is a small thing, and the night is large
and full of wonders." -Lord Dunsany
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