I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but this
wasn't really that funny. I think the problem is
the punch line. It's too abrupt. You need to
describe the scene more, say with Ranma and Akane
huddled in the nook, backs to the mob, arms
twitching as they perfom some unseen act. Kuno
shouts something about "Foul fiend! Cease your
sinful plundering of the beauteous Akane! I, the
Blue Thunder of Furinken High shall smite thee!"
Ranma and Akane turn around with long thin rods in
their hands and stare in puzzlement at the
assembled mob of enemies, fiances, hentai, and
all in between who decided to show up just in case.
Or something like that. I can't do cliches like
that worth a damn.
Thomas Hood
thood@cs.mun.ca