At 08:02 PM 4/9/00 -0500, you wrote:
Well, here's the tenth chapter of Clothes Make The...
Very very riveting. You might think about wether or not this deserves to be
posted on the Yuri list... After this episode, it really does delve
straight into girl/girl...
As for C&C, I felt that Ukyou's acceptance was just a little rushed. You
might consider lengthening her turmoil/depression past her meeting with
Tofuu.
Also, I have trouble with Ryouga being as relatively comfortable as he is
at the club. He's nervous, yes, but not as threatened as I would imagine a
boy who has as much trouble with women as he does. You also hint that he
knows *exactly* who his host is. A few trips through Singapore would almost
certainly have exposed him to a few transsexuals or semi-trans, but this
*is* a guy who has trouble seeing through simple (glasses and wig)
disguises. A slower dawning of realization or even a realization after he
managed to leave the club might be more realistic.
I would much prefer to see Ryouga accept the help he gets from Aoi after
trying to flee for a few minutes.
"Ummm... which way is the exit again?" the lost boy asked, desparately
trying to flee the club.
"Why don't you let me call you a cab?"
Also, he doesn't seem angry or flustered at all. This is kinda
un-Ryouga-like.
Looking very much forward to next time!
C.