Hey D.B.,
Just a quick note. Will try and do more complete C&C later but I only
just skimmed the story for right now.
substance marred the surface of the doors. A multitude of gargoyles, all of
them carved from pure obsidian, their mirrored surfaces shining with an
unholy gleam, stared at the group from their perches along the ledges of
the building Their obscene appearance was an abomination to the senses, and
gazing at the darkness within them, a veil of endless night that seemed to
Need a period: building. Their
That whole scene with Konatsu and ninja tricks was hilarious! I was lol
the whole time. The reference to Hallstrom, while breaking the fourth
wall a bit, had me cracking up too.
More... eventually.
Keep up the good works!
Back to my history paper and still looking for pre-readers. ;>
Warr
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