Hi, Alan!
All C&C are my opinions and suggestions only.
Alan Harnum wrote:
Some of you may have been wondering what happened to me in my capacity as a
fanfic writer, as I haven't sent a non-[Admin] message to the FFML in over
a month.
The answer, in a word, is "Utena".
And what a good word that is, too. :)
You have to understand, it isn't that I have any especial hatred
for cats.
I'm not very fond of animals in general.
I've had some bad experiences with them.
Hmm, is she referring to the cows, elephants, or cats here? :)
That's just the kind of thing she'd do, the horrible girl.
Taking an animal away from his mother before he was ready.
Taking it away from the siblings who love it.
What a fascinating analogy...
I would do anything for Oniisama.
It's only right.
No one loves him like I do. No one ever could love him like
I do. Who has known him longer, who has loved him longer, than I
have? It's only fair.
Anyone who comes between me and my brother will be sorry.
Brrr... absolutely chilling, and in such a nicely written way, too. :)
I'm going to sit down on the banks of the river, on the sun-
warmed concrete banks, and take you out of your box. And then...
I don't know what, then.
It's not you.
It's just that nothing can come between my brother and I.
Oh dear. Kitten No. 2?
I don't like his sister, either. Whenever she and Miki are
together, if I even say "hello" to Miki, she looks at me like
I've done something awful. I don't understand it at all.
Heh. Pot calling the kettle black...
"You're really devoted to your brother, aren't you, Nanami-
san?"
"I am. But you're the same way about your sister, aren't
you, Miki-kun?"
Why do you look so uncomfortable?
"I don't think I feel the same way about Kozue that you feel
about Touga-sempai, Nanami."
Why do you say it like that?
"Oh? And how exactly do I feel about Oniisama that's so
different from how you feel about Kozue-san, Miki-kun?"
Miki: No, no, it's not like that. I like Himemiya-san, after all. I mean, she's
beautiful, plays the piano well, reminds me of my sister.... Er, this isn't
going well, is it?
Click.
What is with that stopwatch, anyway? Someday, I'll have to
corner you and ask you--and not let you go until you give me a
straight answer.
Nanami: Yes, I'll have to tie you to the bed, just to make sure you don't get
away, and then sit on you and... oooh, icky! Hmm, I wonder if that'll work with
Onii-sama?
"Well, I think there's two kinds of forgiveness: the
conditional kind, and the absolute kind. You can give yourself
the first kind, and so can other people... but it's never
absolute. Absolute forgiveness can only be given by... I don't
know. The Universe. God. Natural Law. Karma. Choose your own
metaphysical absolute." You laugh; I don't understand why it's
funny, but if I laugh along, will you not think I'm so dumb?
Perhaps: 'will you no longer think I'm so dumb?'
He takes you without a word and holds you on his lap. His
hands listlessly stroke your fur.
"What are you listening to? It's very sad."
"You know, maybe if you listened to some happier music,
you'd feel better. This is all... slow and depressing."
Extra line above.
You curl up in his lap. You're so small. You fit there
just perfectly. I'm jealous.
"Would you like to borrow some of my pop albums? They
sometimes make me feel better, when I'm depressed."
"Maybe you should open the curtains, too. Let some sun in."
Extra line above. Is it deliberate?
If everything can be forgiven, then I have nothing to be
sorry for. Thus, why should I need to change, or do penance, or
suffer any longer for what is done and cannot be undone?
So why did I do it?
All of a sudden, I have this image of Nanami as a nun - which really cracks me
up. :)
Also, perhaps a scene break is needed here.
"You can stay in here for now."
//
"Damn cat."
"Damn cat."
I don't even know why.
Penance? :)
Nicely written, Alan. Nanami was perfectly in character and oh so delightful.
:)
Phil.