At 12:00 PM 4/7/00 -0400, Miller, Bert wrote:
Nice story.
Thanks.
Work on my other outstanding projects should probably resume once my
Utena-mojo runs out.
I know the feeling.
The one where working on anything but one project is comparatively so
unappealing that even feelings of obligations can't make you do it? :)
Which, at the current rate (this story, several more
one-shots definitively planned, and a large-scale post-TV-series story
currently standing at about 300k), may not be for a while. :)
Looking forward to them.
I'm hoping to do the second one-shot in this series in the next week (ten
days until my first exam starts, and I can't spend _all_ that time
studying). The longer story will be released in separate parts over a few
months when it does finally come out. Due to my experience with WUE
teaching me that long, convoluted plots are much easier to do well if you
don't release individual parts as serials, I'm going to complete the entire
thing in draft before releasing it widely.
I think Oniisama likes you.
Ah, a Nanami soliloquy. I like.
Nanami's my favourite. :)
Do you know what I am?
Do you know what I did?
The repetition of these two lines is very effective. You
convey the obsessive guilt very well, especially with the
first of the two.
Repetition is something used a lot for dramatic impact in Utena,
particularly so in the Nanami episode this was inspired by, where the
repeated imagery of the cardboard box sliding down into the river is used
in a similiar manner to these repeated lines. Anyway, glad it worked the
way I intended.
Nothing else, really, to say. Nicely done.
Thanks again; much obliged for the commentary.
Ciao,
-Alan Harnum