I'm so glad you have decided to keep this story going. It is actually one
of my favorite Tenchi fanfics. This chapter is a little a long winded than
the rest. You seem to be wanting to get into the story more and start
getting into the intrige that has been set up in the previous chapters. I
have to say though that this chapter greatly needs more Tenchi. Compared to
the other chapters, this story seems to be have only 1/4 Tenchi and the rest
is just the secondary characters. This chapter really lacked focused on who
your main character is in your story. I would consider breaking the chapter
down have more Tenchi. You could make this into two chapters if you edit it
more. To be honest, I am more interested in what happens to Tenchi than
what the story is actually doing. It is a Tenchi fanfic. Good work and I
looked forward to reading more.