----- Original Message -----
From: "Jason Liao" <jliao@phoenix.Princeton.EDU>
To: "KaraOhki" <karaohki@snet.net>
Cc: "ffml" <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Sunday, April 02, 2000 2:29 AM
Subject: Re: [FFML] [r.5][sF] I wonder...
On Sat, 1 Apr 2000, KaraOhki wrote:
"Sorry, Ranchan. But this is for your own good." Ukyou grunted
from exertion as she dragged Ranma up the stairway to her room.
"When you
wake up, you'll have consummated your marriage to your cute
fiancee,
and you
won't have to take Akane's abuse anymore."
She's got to be kidding...he'll run as fast as he can. :)
Evidently, Ranma doesn't ascribe to the same logical schools of
thought
that everyone else does. ^_^
Absolutely
It was during a vicious kick to her side by Akane while she
exploded within their midst.
This sentence is sort of confusing. Ukyo exploded? Akane
exploded?
I don't remember either of them swallowing anything combustible.
Oops! I wonder how that line was cut. It was to originally read
"...blocked an overhead smash by Shampoo's bonbori, that a flour
bomb..."
Ah, thank you.
A short time later, after everyone's wrists had been untied,
Kenji
Kuonji introduced himself, and asking after his daughter's
health.
They
^asked
Which do you think is better, changing that tense, or removing the
'and'?
Either way will do it for me.
him in the conversation. He took an exaggerated glance around
the
room,
^an
exaggerated glance? A glance is something fast...perhaps he
looked at
everyone's face in turn, or something like that.
I was thinking of him trying to make it obvious that he was looking
around, like one would do on stage. I guess that wasn't clear.
I knew what you meant, but the wording looked odd to me.
Won't you continue it, please?? (Best wide-eyed cabbit begging
impression)
Well, I wasn't planning to...what?...stop looking at me like
that!...please?
Works every time!!!
Actually, I'll have to see. I have a loose sort of timeline set,
but
nothing specific, and I don't even really know where I want to end
up. My
gut reaction is to have it end up where they're not blood related at
all,
but I refuse to go down that road, as it's a cheap copout, and ends
any
generated conflict prematurely.
It would put everyone back at square one.
potential venue for conflict. Well, making her slightly gone
mad
does
that too, but still...
Oh yes, Ranma can now call her "my crazy cousin," rather than "my
cute
fiancee". That's going to go over REALLY well with Ukyo.
That's brilliant! Ranma can refer to her like that, and be
completely
oblivious to her reaction. And maybe some other people can
interject some
phrases during conversation, unwittingly. "That's crazy!" "You'd
have to
be nuts to do that!" etc...
*Takes a little bow.* Have fun with that one!
June