Good to see you trying your hand at TM! work. IMO, Tenchi
has a lot of comic potential which I don't often see
realized; this could be fixed very quickly with you on
the case.
One Hour challenge-- start time 7:20 PM ET
Growing Up-- sort of
Title was sort of hidden, here.
did. Her priorities normally ran along three paths--
(a) Eat Carrots.
(b) Let Sasami scratch her behind the ears.
(b2) Eat Carrots
(c) Cheer people up when they were down.
(c2) Eat Carrots
Ryo-oh-ki was beginning to see a pattern here.
Heh.
A mature Ryo-oh-ki in a green miniskirt and tube top walked up,
sat in his lap, put her arms around his neck, and licked his nose.
8... What an image! This could only happen to Tenchi...
It was true that Ayeka and Ryoko were not fighting. They WERE,
however, arguing fiercely.
"It's a comedy!"
"It's a ROMANCE!"
Sasami sighed. Personally, she thought that Ranma show
was both.
Good one. (Although the Ranma _show_ isn't all that romantic.)
Said argument was interrupted by a screaming Tenchi as he tore
through the room at speeds approaching that of, well, not light, but
sound was a possibility.
Typical of your style, but this comparison falls a bit flatter than
most of yours (at least, to me). How about:
'Said argument was interrupted by a screaming Tenchi as he
tore through the room. Ryoko blinked. Ayeka blinked. Both looked
down at the rug as if to check for rubber traces or burn marks.'
"I'm not seeing this, am I, Ayeka?"
"Ryoko-san, I hope not, because that would mean I was seeing it
too."
Heh. Very nice.
"She... seems to have frightened Tenchi somehow, Washuu-chan,"
Ayeka said doubtfully.
Nitpick: Ayeka prefers 'Washuu-sama'; she uses '-chan' for Washuu
only under duress.
"Oh, she was probably imitating you girls, and got a touch
affectionate. Nothing to worry about." Washuu personally found the
whole thing a hoot.
Heh. Of course.
"AFFECTIONATE? HER? WITH MY TENCHI?" squawked Ryoko in shock.
The concept was almost alien (Sorry!) to her. Not only Ayeka as a
rival, but... but a CABBIT?
I'm inclined to agree with the previous commenter here. Ryoko would
see this as a betrayal. Though this can't really come as a surprise
to any of the girls, as they all saw Ryou-ou-ki's thoughts on Washuu's
screen dominated by caring for Tenchi (in the same episode where she
receives this body).
"Could be a cute couple, you know. Study of the offspring might
reveal all sorts of things..."
..says Washuu, looking out of the side of her eyes at Ayeka and
smirking...
"OFFSPRING?" said Ayeka in tones very much akin to those of
Ryoko.
Heh.
Tenchi was finally coaxed out of his room as Washuu gently
explained that Ryo-oh-ki was probably just imitating the other girls.
Still apprehensive, he found himself staring in fascination at the
sunning cabbit-girl, who had been joined by Mihoshi, who personally
didn't see what all the fuss was about.
Of course. "Anooo... Ryo-oh-ki? Maybe you should have some
sun-tan lotion, so you won't get burnt? Oh.... That's right..."
Mihoshi punches her own head lightly. "Your skin is designed to
handle radiation in space. Silly me. Well, then, do you mind
putting some on me?"