Subject: [FFML] Re: Bag o' Comments
From: Kyhdin@aol.com
Date: 3/26/2000, 9:34 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com


In a message dated 3/26/00 3:28:20 PM, jmele@brandeis.edu writes:

<< Subject: [FFML] [FFMl][Fanfic][TM]Princess and the Pirate <Chapter 2>
   Date: Thu, 23 Mar 2000 06:48:10 EST
   From: Kyhdin@aol.com
     To: ffml@fanfic.com

Comments: My primary complaint is the length; I want more! Interesting
premise and carried out with a minimium of fuss. Formatting and grammar
are acceptable, and the characters are reacting well. I think you might
be underestimating Ryoko's cunning a little bit; she was a successful
pirate for hundreds of years but she seems a little naive in the scene
with the phone call. Recommended. >>

First off, thank you for your kind words. As for Ryoko, I would point out 
that her cunning is more of the stalk, hunt, kill variety. Reading between 
the lines isn't exactly on her list of talents. To me anyway. I could be 
wrong. Also, a note on continuity, this is set in a TV/OAV/Tenchi Forever 
universe. What that means is; It primarily follows the OAV timeline. However, 
Kiyone is here and she arrived just like she did in the TV series. The same 
for Azaka and Kamidake. Tenchi was kidnapped and Ryoko got him back. Me? I'm 
going back to this BGC X-Over that came to me as I was going to sleep last 
night.

--Komodo


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