On Mon, 27 Mar 2000, Phil wrote:
Just a few quick comments.
Rhea Seraph wrote:
Asuka woke to the taste of pine tar and gagged
instinctively. Her whole body ached, and she felt cold.
The silk sheets were cold but soothing to the touch, and the
bed she was in was quite comfortable. Once she regained full
consciousness, she realized she was also quite naked, except
for her bra, her panties, and her socks. What kinda weird
hospital is this?, she asked herself.
Is the comma after the question mark really appropriate?
I've been told to do it both ways.
Another great chapter. Even without knowing much about the Cthulhu mythos, I
find myself enthralled by the excellent descriptions and wording, and the
great story-telling. Well done.
Thanks!
John Biles
Emperor of all He Surveys
http://www.tass.org/~rhea/falcon.html
"How embarrassing must that be for the Kree when they try to explain their
government: "Yes, we worship a giant green head in a tank."
--Reed Richards in a FF parody on psycomic.com