Subject: [FFML] Re: [EVA/Lovecraft] Children of an Elder God #15
From: Rhea Seraph
Date: 3/26/2000, 4:10 AM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

On Sat, 25 Mar 2000, David Johnston wrote:

consciousness, she realized she was also quite naked, except
for her bra, her panties, and her socks.  What kinda weird
hospital is this?, she asked herself.

"her bra, panties and socks"

Isn't going to sleep in the Dreamlands redundant?  Wouldn't you wake up?

Since you can spend months in the dreamlands in one night, you can also
'sleep' there.  

 
Does this mean that the Byahkee are going to suddenly turn into ersatz
human beings?

Winged and feathered humanoids, but not true humans.

      "Get out of the way, your highness, or I'll poke you
with my magic spear," Touji said.  Geez, that sounds stupid,
he thought.

Spear and magic helmet!
Spear and magic helmet!
Kill the waaaabbit!

Hehe.

 
You know, now that I think about it, there's a certain resemblance
between Nyarlothotep and Bugs Bunny.

"I shoulda taken the left turn at Celeano"

 
      This cell held a swarm of blue-black two-foot long
beetles, which hurled themselves futilely at the door as

Oi!  Aren't they a little behind their time?

They've been locked up a looong time.
 
forms may be alien, and their minds as well in many cases,
but they are just innocent victims of the King, led astray

Uh-hunh.  You telling me that not one of those guys deliberately
tried to invoke a power beyond him out of base motivations?

It's not like she's all knowing :)  I'm sure a fair number of them are
quite guilty of foolish playing with dark powers, but she doesn't know
them personally :)

 
       /Yes./ he replied.  /I am from Valusia./

Yeah, go ahead, free the Serpent Man.  They just luuuve helping mammals.
Um...just what exactly was the help he provided?

Any boat in a storm.  But he was a plot point that got lost in the process
of writing; we're trying to decide whether to cut him or use him more.

 
hand, and the fire and light were snuffed.  "Fire burns out
and light fades."  His hands twisted and the flaming sword

I suggest "Fire dies and light fades"

I'll take that suggestion.

figure riding in a sleigh shaped from a giant shell and
pulled by eight winged unicorns rode down from the heavens

Winged unicorns?  How tacky.

Nodens tends to have funky critters pulling his sleigh.
 
vanished.  "You have not won, for this is what I sought all
along.  Cherish your illusion of freedom and victory while
you can."  Touji wanted to vomit.

Reminds me of Doctor Destroyer.  "This apparent defeat was all part of
my Master Plan!  Nyah-hah-hah-hah!"

It's pretty much the big N's attitude at the end of Dream Quest.
 
       "A congerie of bubbles ate the King in Yellow.  I
was going to go down, but then I decided to wait for the

"congerie"?  Yes, I know Lovecraft referred to Yog-Sothoth as
a congerie of bubbles, but Misato ain't no Lovecraft.

Better suggestion?
 
      "This bodes ill," Fuyutsuki said to Gendo across his
desk.

Gendo slaps him.  "Stop talking like 19th century horror novel
character!"

"We must consult the Book of Thoth," Fuyutsuki replied. :)
 
      "And the Second Sun could just be a powerful lamp.
But I doubt it."

Cthuga!  Cthuga!  What a wonderful, wonderful toy!

Yep!
 
Hm...  The city of the Bean.  Chicago?

That would be telling :)


John Biles
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"How embarrassing must that be for the Kree when they try to explain their
government: "Yes, we worship a giant green head in a tank." 
--Reed Richards in a FF parody on psycomic.com



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